Building— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and correct small errors. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one specific supporting detail. Avoid redundancy (e.g., "actually" and "at least" are unnecessary) and fix grammar (use "number of floors" not "amount of floors").

例: No, there aren't. My neighborhood has a legal limit of four floors per building, so tall buildings are not allowed here.

提案: Give a direct topic sentence, then add one specific reason with a brief example. Fix grammar: say "taken photos" and remove extra words like "of" after "remember." Use linking words (e.g., "because" or "so") to show cause and effect.

例: No, I rarely take photos of buildings because I'm not interested in architecture; for instance, when I travel I prefer photographing people and street scenes instead.

提案: Good clear answer with a reason. Make it more concise and correct minor phrasing ("to-go list" or "on my list to visit"). You can add one brief specific detail about why it appeals to you to strengthen the response.

例: Yes — the Taj Mahal. I've never visited it despite living in Delhi, and I'm keen to see its architecture and the famous marble inlay work in person.

提案: Start with a clear personal opinion (e.g., "Yes" or "No"), then give two concise, specific reasons linked with words like "because" or "however." Fix grammar and redundancy (e.g., "than compared to" should be "than"). Avoid hesitation phrases such as "Well" and "I never thought about it" in a test answer.

例: Yes, I would consider living in a tall building because it would reduce street noise and offer better views. However, I would also check for practical issues like elevator waiting times and safety measures.

× No, I haven't really taken photo of any building and I can't remember of a time when I did so, because I don't think that it has any benefit and I'm not that interested in architecture.

✓ No, I haven't really taken photos of any building and I can't remember a time when I did so, because I don't think that it has any benefit and I'm not that interested in architecture.

'photo' should be plural 'photos' because 'any building' implies multiple possible instances; countable nouns used in a general sense need plural. Also remove 'of' after 'remember' — the correct collocation is 'remember a time' not 'remember of a time.' Suggestion: use 'photos' and say 'remember a time'.

× I'd say that I'd probably like to visit the Taj Mahal because I have never visited it in my entire life despite living in Delhi, so that's definitely on my to go list.

✓ I'd say that I'd probably like to visit the Taj Mahal because I have never visited it in my entire life despite living in Delhi, so that's definitely on my to-go list.

Hyphenate 'to-go' when used as a compound modifier for 'list' (to-go list). This is an orthographic convention rather than a tense error, but it improves clarity. Suggestion: use 'to-go list' or rephrase as 'on my list of places to visit.'

× Well, living in a tall building has its own advantage. For example, you may escape a lot of noise pollution and you may have much better views than compared to living in a house.

✓ Well, living in a tall building has its own advantages. For example, you may escape a lot of noise pollution and you may have much better views compared to living in a house.

Use plural 'advantages' for general statements. Remove 'than' when using 'compared to' — use one comparative construction: either 'better views than living in a house' or 'better views compared to living in a house.' Suggestion: choose one form and keep comparative structure consistent.

× But I never thought about it. Now I'm that I'm thinking about it, I think that it will be quite nice to live in.

✓ But I had never thought about it. Now that I'm thinking about it, I think that it would be quite nice to live in one.

Tense and pronoun issues: use past perfect 'had never thought' to refer to earlier state before now. Remove duplicate 'I'm'. 'Would' is appropriate for a hypothetical preference. Add 'one' to avoid ending sentence with a preposition and to clarify the noun (a tall building). Suggestion: 'I had never thought about it. Now that I'm thinking about it, I think it would be quite nice to live in one.'