Building— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be concise, correct grammar, and state directly whether tall buildings are nearby. Use one clear topic sentence then add one specific supporting detail (e.g. types of houses, landscape). Avoid repetition and incorrect verb forms.

例: Not really. I live in a rural area where most houses are small, single-storey cottages surrounded by fields, so tall buildings are uncommon.

提案: Clarify what you photograph and correct word choice. Give one direct statement and one specific reason or example. Avoid confusing nouns and irrelevant details.

例: Yes, I often photograph traditional houses in my village because their wooden doors and colorful gardens create interesting contrasts with newer concrete buildings.

提案: Start with a clear answer about preference, then give a specific example and reason using correct grammar. Keep sentences short and natural; avoid awkward phrases like "attracts my eyes."

例: I generally prefer small, historic buildings, but I would love to visit the Burj Khalifa in Dubai because its vast height and modern design are impressive and I want to see the view from the top.

提案: Answer directly and give one clear reason or condition. Fix grammar (e.g. "experience it once in my life") and avoid redundant phrases. Mention a specific aspect you would like to try (view, facilities, location).

例: Not really, but I would like to try living in a high-rise once to enjoy the views and modern facilities, even though I prefer the quiet of low-rise homes.

× Not really, because I live in a rural area where we can found a smaller and convenient home rather than a tall building which is quite normal in a rural areas.

✓ Not really, because I live in a rural area where we can find smaller and more convenient homes rather than tall buildings, which is quite normal in rural areas.

Errors: 'found' should be 'find' (verb form) — but primary issue is pluralization: 'a smaller and convenient home' should match plurality and adjective order and 'a rural areas' is incorrect. Use plural 'homes' and 'tall buildings' to indicate general contrast, and 'rural areas' without an article. Also change 'smaller and convenient' to 'smaller and more convenient' for correct comparative structure. Suggestion: ensure noun number matches intended meaning, use comparative form for adjectives, and use 'find' as present tense verb.

× Yes I do. I prefer photographing lorries parties because their gardens and the traditional details create in our home that contrast nicely with our modern tall buildings.

✓ Yes, I do. I prefer photographing local properties because their gardens and traditional details in our area contrast nicely with modern tall buildings.

Errors: 'lor ries parties' is nonsensical; likely 'local properties' or 'houses'. 'Create in our home that contrast' is wrong word order and preposition usage. Use 'in our area' or 'in our neighborhood'. Remove unnecessary 'the'. Suggestion: choose correct nouns ('properties' or 'houses'), use 'in' with location 'area', and place 'contrast' subject correctly: 'traditional details in our area contrast nicely with modern tall buildings.' Also add comma after 'Yes'.

× Well to be honest I prefer small parties rather than tall building but if I get a chance to visit of Burj Khalifa of UAE then I will obviously grab the opportunity because the beauty and the height of the Burj Khalifa really attracts my eyes.

✓ Well, to be honest, I prefer small places rather than tall buildings, but if I get a chance to visit the Burj Khalifa in the UAE, I will obviously grab the opportunity because the beauty and height of the Burj Khalifa really attract me.

Errors: 'parties' should be 'places' or 'houses'; 'tall building' should be plural 'tall buildings' for general contrast. 'visit of Burj Khalifa of UAE' has incorrect prepositions/articles — use 'visit the Burj Khalifa in the UAE'. 'Attracts my eyes' is unnatural; use 'attract me'. Also add commas for flow. Suggestion: use correct nouns and prepositions, ensure verb agrees with subject ('attract' with plural 'beauty and height' or rephrase) and use natural English expressions.

× Not really, but I want to experience once in my life living in a tall building which has a incredible height and striking architecture which makes the whole living attractive and the comfort as much as the buildings look.

✓ Not really, but I want to experience living in a tall building once in my life, one that has incredible height and striking architecture, which would make living there attractive and comfortable, matching the building's appearance.

Errors: 'experience once in my life living' has wrong word order; place 'once in my life' after 'experience' or after verb phrase. 'a incredible' should be 'an incredible' (article before vowel sound). 'which makes the whole living attractive and the comfort as much as the buildings look' is ungrammatical and unclear. Rephrase to 'would make living there attractive and comfortable' and 'matching the building's appearance' for clarity. Suggestion: correct article usage 'an', reorder adverbial phrases for natural flow, and simplify complex clauses.