Building— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 答えは質問に直接答えていますが、表現が不自然で繰り返しや文法誤りが多く、情報の構成も混乱しています。改善のためには、まずシンプルな主題文で直接答え、その後1〜2文で具体的な補足（例：周囲の建物の種類や農業の存在、近所からもらった物など）を論理的な接続詞（for example, because, so）でつなげてください。発音や流暢さを上げるために、短く明確な文を心がけ、不要な繰り返しを避けましょう。

例: No, there aren't any tall buildings near my home because I live in the countryside. Instead, the area has many farms where people grow vegetables and fruits. Recently my neighbors gave me some fresh produce, which I really appreciated.

提案: 回答の中心は明確ですが、語彙の誤用（earrings? brew?）や冗長な表現が多く、文の構成が混乱しています。改善策としては：まず直接に短い主題文で答え（No, I usually don't...）、次に理由を1文で述べ、最後に具体例を付け足す。理由では正確な語彙（enjoy the view / prefer to experience it）を使い、接続詞（because, so, for example）で文をつなげてください。発音や語彙選択に注意を払うとより自然になります。

例: No, I don't usually take photos of buildings because I prefer to enjoy the view directly. For example, when I visit landmarks like Tokyo Tower, I like to remember the atmosphere rather than spending time taking pictures.

提案: 意図は明確で、訪れたい建物（Tokyo Tower）を挙げていますが、文法誤りと語彙の混乱が目立ちます（SkytreeとTowerの混同、意味の通らない表現）。改善のためには：主題文で建物と理由を簡潔に述べ、その後で1〜2文で具体的な期待（特に見たい景色や体験）を述べる。比較をするなら正確な比較語（more impressive, tallerなど）を使い、不要なフレーズや曖昧な語は避けてください。

例: Yes, I'd like to visit Tokyo Tower because it offers a great view of the city. From the observation deck I want to see the skyline at sunset, and I think the view from there would be very impressive.

提案: 質問には否定で答えていますが、文が支離滅裂で語彙や文法の誤りが多く、意味が伝わりにくいです。改善策：まず短く明確に答える（No, I wouldn't like to）し、その理由を1文で述べる（because of earthquakes and evacuation concerns）。必要なら具体例（地震時の避難の難しさ）を加えるが、長すぎないようにして接続詞（because, so）で論理的につなげてください。

例: No, I wouldn't want to live in a tall building because my area is prone to earthquakes. In that situation I would worry about how quickly I could evacuate from a high floor.

× No, I live in the countryside, so there aren't There aren't.

✓ No, I live in the countryside, so there aren't any tall buildings.

The sentence misuses 'there aren't' without specifying what does not exist. Use 'there are'/'there aren't' + noun phrase; add 'any tall buildings' for clarity.

× There are not so bearings and near my house.

✓ There are not many buildings near my house.

The phrase 'so bearings' is incorrect. Use 'many' with plural countable nouns and 'near my house' to indicate location.

× But so there are out of the farms like which planting, which plant does vegetables or some fruits in my city, it's famous food, Japanese beer and my my neighbors are planted.

✓ But there are farms nearby that grow vegetables and fruits; my city is also famous for food and Japanese beer, and my neighbors grow crops.

The original mixes conjunctions and clauses incoherently. Use 'that' to introduce relative clause, parallel structure 'vegetables and fruits', and separate ideas with punctuation or conjunctions for clarity.

× So these days I I gave her, I gave it from my neighbors.

✓ So these days my neighbors give me produce.

The original uses incorrect pronouns and verb forms. Use subject 'my neighbors' and verb 'give' with object 'me produce' for clear active sentence.

× No, I don't usually take photos of earrings or I don't usually take photos.

✓ No, I don't usually take photos of buildings.

'Earrings' is likely a mispronunciation; ensure correct noun 'buildings'. The verb 'don't' is correct for first person; adjust object accordingly.

× Of course I prefer to enjoy a brew or experience a price umm compared from the photographing and it often keep the memory in my mind and I feel anything.

✓ Of course I prefer to enjoy the view or the experience rather than taking photographs; the memory stays in my mind.

The original mixes metaphors and has incorrect verb forms. Use 'prefer to' + base verb, 'rather than' to compare, and 'the memory stays' for present tense retention.

× when I go to the Riker Runescapes with I can talk to Sky 3 or Tokyo Tower in the countryside.

✓ When I go to places like Skytree or Tokyo Tower, I can look at them from the city, not the countryside.

Proper nouns 'Skytree' and 'Tokyo Tower' must be used correctly. 'Talk to' is wrong; use 'look at' or 'view'. Prepositions 'from' indicate perspective.

× Yes, I'd like to visit Tokyo Tower because I know Tokyo Skytree because it has a great view of the city and it's a famous landmark and it attracts many tourists like me and I want to see the, uh, skyline from.

✓ Yes, I'd like to visit Tokyo Skytree because it has a great view of the city; it's a famous landmark that attracts many tourists, and I want to see the skyline from it.

Sentence needed correct reference 'Tokyo Skytree' and 'see the skyline from it'. Use 'that' for relative clause and ensure complete prepositional phrase.

× The most highest point and. I I think I'm a trooper.

✓ the highest point. I think I'm a trooper.

'Most highest' is redundant; use 'highest' only. Remove filler repetition 'I I'.

× I think that Tokyo table is more true twice than other providing.

✓ I think that Tokyo Skytree is taller than other towers.

Original contains garbled words. Use 'taller than' for comparison of height and correct noun 'Skytree'.

× So it's very good beer.

✓ So it is very impressive.

'Very good beer' is unrelated; likely meant 'impressive' or 'a great view'. Choose word matching context.

× Yeah, no, I don't want to rewrite because in, uh, some scientists say that that we experience, we were experienced some, uh, earthquake is a Nanking through or metropolitan earthquakes.

✓ No, I don't want to live in one because scientists say we may experience earthquakes, including large metropolitan ones.

'Rewrite' is wrong verb; use 'live in one'. Tense and pronoun issues fixed: 'we may experience' expresses possibility correctly.

× So it's scared to revenge and.

✓ So it's scary and makes me nervous.

'Scared to revenge' is ungrammatical. Use adjective 'scary' or 'it scares me' and 'makes me nervous' to express emotion.

× Some if I stop the aeroplane in my in the door breathing, I can't evacuate from my hair, so I'm I scare.

✓ If an earthquake stops the elevators in my building, I might not be able to evacuate, so I'm scared.

Original mixes unrelated words. Use 'if an earthquake stops the elevators in my building' and 'evacuate' with correct object; 'hair' and 'door breathing' are incorrect.