Building— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời nên ngắn gọn, rõ ràng, và ngữ pháp chính xác hơn. Tránh lặp từ (ví dụ: "some some") và sửa lỗi số nhiều/ít ("tall building" → "tall buildings"). Bắt đầu bằng một câu chủ đề trả lời trực tiếp, sau đó thêm 1-2 chi tiết hỗ trợ cụ thể (ví dụ: loại tòa nhà, cảnh quan xung quanh). Dùng liên từ đơn giản để mạch lạc (e.g., "so", "and").

例: No, there aren't many tall buildings near my home because I live in the countryside. Most of the area is green fields and there are only a few medium-sized houses and low-rise buildings, so the skyline is quite open.

提案: Câu trả lời cần rõ ràng và tránh câu mơ hồ ("Just a cold" không rõ nghĩa). Sửa ngữ pháp (article, plural, verbs: "a buildings" → "a building", "have" → "has"), và tách thành 2-3 câu ngắn để mạch lạc. Thêm chi tiết cụ thể về loại thiết kế bạn thích hoặc mục đích chụp để tăng nội dung.

例: Yes, I often take photos of buildings when I travel. If a building has a unique design or interesting details, I usually photograph it to show my friends or to remember the place. I especially like taking pictures of modern skyscrapers and historic facades.

提案: Cần trả lời trực tiếp, loại bỏ tiếng nặng lắp ("uh"). Sửa từ sai ("landmark 89th" có thể là "Landmark 81"? và "hate" sai từ — chắc là "height"). Nêu rõ lý do muốn đến (ví dụ: quan điểm, thiết kế, tầm nhìn) và thêm dự đoán ngắn hoặc kế hoạch cụ thể. Giữ tối đa 3-4 câu.

例: Yes, I would like to visit Landmark 81, which is the tallest building in Vietnam. I'm interested in its architecture and the panoramic views from the observation deck. I hope to visit it someday when I can travel to that city.

提案: Câu trả lời cần mạch lạc hơn và loại bỏ lặp từ và tiếng lắp. Trả lời trực tiếp, sau đó nêu 1-2 lý do cụ thể (ví dụ: view, tiện nghi, an ninh). Sử dụng cấu trúc rõ ràng và sửa lỗi ngữ pháp ("buy apartment" → "buy an apartment", "help the beautiful views" → "offer beautiful views").

例: Yes, I would like to live in a tall building in the future if I can afford it. Living in a high-rise often offers better views of the city and modern amenities like gym and security, which I find attractive.

× Of course there aren't many tall building that near my home because I live in the countryside, so most of the space there is green space and some some buildings, some medium buildings.

✓ Of course there aren't many tall buildings near my home because I live in the countryside, so most of the space is green space with a few medium-sized buildings.

The noun 'building' should be plural 'buildings' to match 'many'. 'That near my home' is missing the preposition 'near' used correctly after 'buildings' so rephrase to 'near my home'. 'Most of the space there is green space' is wordy; use 'most of the space is green space'. 'Some some buildings, some medium buildings' repeats and needs hyphenation and quantifier: 'a few medium-sized buildings'. Suggestion: ensure noun number matches quantifiers and simplify redundant phrases.

× Just a cold. Whenever I see a buildings that have a unique designs I often take some photos to show my friends and also whenever I visit a new place that have a tall buildings I often take some photo with it.

✓ Just a little. Whenever I see buildings that have unique designs, I often take photos to show my friends, and whenever I visit a new place that has tall buildings, I often take photos of them.

'A cold' is incorrect; likely intended 'a little' or 'a bit'. 'A buildings' should be 'buildings' (plural without 'a'). 'Have a unique designs' mixes singular and plural; use 'have unique designs'. 'Some photo with it' should be 'photos of them' to match plural 'buildings'. Also change 'that have' to 'that has' when referring to 'a new place' (singular). Ensure determiners match noun number and pronouns refer clearly; use consistent plural/singular forms.

× Uh, there's, uh, a building that I want to be, this is landmark 89th, a famous building in Vietnam.

✓ Uh, there's a building I want to visit; it is Landmark 81, a famous building in Vietnam.

Sentence structure is confused. 'A building that I want to be' is incorrect; likely 'want to visit'. The clause should be connected with a semicolon or conjunction. Also 'landmark 89th' seems incorrect naming; if referencing Landmark 81 use correct name. Ensure 'there's' introduces existence and the following clause uses a verb that matches intent.

× Uh, it is the highest building in my country and it's famous for its hate and also the design.

✓ It is the tallest building in my country and it's famous for its height and its design.

Use 'tallest' (superlative) rather than 'highest' when describing buildings. 'Hate' is a misspelling of 'height'. Also parallel structure needs 'its height and its design' or 'for its height and design'. Suggestion: check spelling and parallelism when listing features.

× Uh, I hope in the future I will have the chance to go there.

✓ I hope I will have the chance to go there in the future.

Position of time expression is flexible; moving 'in the future' to the end sounds more natural. The future tense 'will have' is acceptable; this is stylistic rather than grammatical. Suggestion: place time phrases at the end for clarity.

× Yes, of course in the future, I want to have a stable income and a career that, uh, I can have, uh, that I can have enough money to buy apartment in the tall buildings, uh, this, uh, and it's also help the beautiful views to the, uh, city.

✓ Yes, of course. In the future I want to have a stable income and a career so that I can have enough money to buy an apartment in a tall building, and it would also give me beautiful views of the city.

'Buy apartment' needs an article: 'buy an apartment'. 'In the tall buildings' should be singular or 'in tall buildings' depending on meaning; use 'in a tall building' for one. 'It's also help the beautiful views to the city' is ungrammatical; use 'it would also give me beautiful views of the city'. Use 'so that' to show purpose. Suggestion: check article use before singular countable nouns and restructure for clarity.