Building— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make your answer clearer and more concise. Start with a direct topic sentence, correct place names and reduce repetition. Use one or two supporting details (e.g., how many buildings or where they are) and a linking word if needed.

例: Yes. I live in the centre of Astana, so there are several tall buildings near my home. For example, opposite my window there are a few high-rise apartment blocks that are much taller than my house.

提案: Give a direct answer and explain briefly with clear reasons. Avoid confusing phrases and repetition. Use linking words (for example, because or so) and one or two specific details about your interests instead of vague statements.

例: No, I don't usually take photos of buildings because I am more interested in nature and portraits. For instance, when I go out I prefer photographing parks and people rather than urban architecture.

提案: Answer directly and name the building correctly. Add a clear reason and one specific detail (memory, history, or an architectural feature). Use linking words like because or for example to make your response coherent.

例: Yes, I would like to visit Baiterek in Astana because it is an important national landmark. For example, it holds family memories for me and its observation platform offers great views of the city.

提案: Give a clear opinion and support it with specific reasons. Avoid hesitations and unclear phrases. Use linking words (for example, because or so) and provide one or two concrete reasons such as noise, space, or personal preference.

例: No, I would not like to live in a tall building because I prefer more private outdoor space and a quieter environment. For example, I like having a garden and feeling close to the ground rather than living in a high-rise.

× Yes, probably yes because I live in the center of the asana and the the opposite.

✓ Yes, probably, because I live in the center of Astana and opposite my house.

The student misused the definite article 'the' before a place name and repeated words. City names do not take 'the' (except some exceptions). 'The opposite' is unclear; 'opposite my house' or 'across from my house' is correct. Remove duplicated words and unnecessary 'the'.

× In the opposite of my window I see the the hard drive buildings that is tall, taller than my house.

✓ Across from my window I see the high-rise buildings that are taller than my house.

Phrases like 'opposite of my window' are unnatural; 'across from my window' is idiomatic. 'Hard drive buildings' is incorrect vocabulary; likely 'high-rise buildings' is intended. Subject-verb agreement error: plural 'buildings' requires 'are' not 'is'. Remove duplicate 'the'.

× Probably not because I'm not tall buildings is or buildings or just building not a road to not a rose my interested and I'm not I'm don't see I don't have a sparkle to take a photo of buildings.

✓ Probably not, because I'm not interested in tall buildings and I don't feel like taking photos of them.

This sentence has multiple problems: incorrect word order, wrong forms, and unclear vocabulary. Replace informal fragments with a clear structure: 'I'm not interested in tall buildings' and 'I don't feel like taking photos of them'. Ensure subject-verb agreement and correct verb forms.

× I think I want to visit bite Syria, uh, as the main landmark in Astana because, umm, it contains a lot of memories with my relatives and uh, it has really huge, uh, great importance has.

✓ I think I want to visit Bayterek, the main landmark in Astana, because it holds many memories with my relatives and is very important to me.

The proper noun was mispronounced or misspelled ('Baiterek' or 'Bayterek'). Use the definite article 'the' before 'main landmark'. Remove redundant 'has' and awkward phrases; use 'holds' or 'has' and 'is very important to me' for clarity. Keep correct verb forms and word order.

× No, I would lie. I probably not because I'm not, I'm not the I don't have a pay. I'm not passionate about living in tall buildings and it's not a rose my interested and uh, and fundamentally different from my perspective.

✓ No, I would not. Probably not, because I'm not passionate about living in tall buildings; it's not really interesting to me and it's fundamentally different from my preferences.

The student used incorrect verbs ('lie' instead of 'live' or 'would not') and unclear phrases. Use 'I would not' or simply 'No' and 'I'm not passionate about living in tall buildings'. Replace 'it's not a rose my interested' with 'it's not really interesting to me'. Maintain correct verb forms and clearer vocabulary.