Building— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Speak more directly and clearly. Start with a clear topic sentence answering the question, then add one specific supporting detail. Avoid repetition and filler words. Use linking words (e.g., 'because', 'so', 'for example') correctly and keep to 2–3 sentences.

例: No, there are no tall buildings near my home because I live in a small village. For example, most houses here are two-storey cottages, so the skyline is low and quiet.

提案: Be concise and use precise vocabulary. Give one clear reason and one specific example to support your answer. Replace vague phrases with accurate words (e.g., 'historic' or 'ancient', 'architecture' or 'decorative details').

例: Yes, I enjoy photographing buildings because I am fascinated by historic architecture. For example, I often photograph old temples and houses to capture their decorative details and learn how people lived in the past.

提案: Give a clear, grammatically correct response naming the building and one reason why. Avoid confusion between past and future tenses. Use linking words to add a supporting detail or an example.

例: Yes, I would like to visit Big Ben in London because it is an iconic clock tower. I want to see its famous clock face and learn about its history and the role it plays in British culture.

提案: Answer directly and give one clear reason with a specific detail. Use correct grammar when comparing preferences (e.g., 'I prefer living in a small house because...'). Avoid vague phrases like 'assemble life'—replace with concrete ideas such as 'a sense of community' or 'lower risk'.

例: No, I prefer living in a small house because it gives me a stronger sense of community and feels safer. For instance, in my village neighbors know each other and we often meet in the street or at local shops.

× No, not tall because, uh, I, I am live in a small village and only surrounded, uh, me with a small building, uh, because I live in, I live with a symbol. People, uh, didn't care if this building, uh, tall or not.

✓ No, there are no tall buildings near my home because I live in a small village and I am only surrounded by small buildings. I live in a symbol? -> I live in a small village where people don't care whether buildings are tall or not.

The original contains multiple pronoun and structure errors: 'I am live' should be 'I live' (verb form), 'surrounded, me with' should be 'surrounded by', and 'People... didn't care if this building tall' needs a subject-verb structure: 'people don't care whether buildings are tall or not.' Suggestions: use correct verb forms (I live), use the preposition 'by' with 'surrounded', and use complete clauses with auxiliary verbs (do/does/did) and conjunctions like whether.

× Yes, I like that because, uh, I would like to take a photos of umm, ancient building, uh, because I like this decoration.

✓ Yes, I like that. I would like to take photos of ancient buildings because I like their decoration.

Errors: 'take a photos' mixes singular article with plural noun; remove 'a' or use singular consistently. 'Ancient building' should be plural if referring generally. Also use plural possessive 'their' for buildings. Suggestion: match article and noun number and keep consistent plurality.

× I like, uh, when I see, I like to see this building which speak how to people live in uh, in the past in a simple way.

✓ I like to see buildings that show how people lived in the past in a simple way.

Problems: 'which speak how to people live' is ungrammatical. Use 'that show' or 'which show' and correct tense 'lived' for past. Remove redundant phrases. Suggestion: use relative clause 'that show' and past tense 'lived' for actions in the past.

× Uh, yes, I went because, umm, I went to live, I would to visit a big, big building in London.

✓ Yes, I have been to London because I wanted to visit a very large building there.

Original mixes tenses and incorrect verbs: 'I went to live' is unclear and 'I would to visit' is incorrect modal/infinitive use. Use present perfect 'have been' or simple past 'went' and 'wanted to visit' for past intention. Suggestion: decide on tense and use correct verb forms and modal constructions.

× This building was umm a watch, uh, hours, uh, that attract a large number of people.

✓ This building was like a clock tower that attracts a large number of people.

Confusing words: 'a watch, hours' should be 'a clock tower' or 'a clock' and verb 'attract' needs third-person singular 'attracts' to agree with singular subject. Suggestion: choose correct noun and ensure subject-verb agreement (clock tower attracts).

× I would teach, I would to see in a.

✓ I would like to see it.

Fragment and wrong verb: 'I would teach, I would to see in a' is meaningless. The intended meaning is 'I would like to see it.' Suggestion: use 'would like to' + base verb and referent pronoun 'it'.

× No, because I prefer to live as in a small building which they which it is a symbol and not have a high risk because I like at the same time assemble life and prefer that.

✓ No, because I prefer to live in a small building which is a symbol and does not have a high risk. I like a simple life and prefer that.

Errors: 'prefer to live as in a' should be 'prefer to live in a'; redundant 'they which it' removed; 'not have a high risk' needs 'does not have' for third-person singular; 'assemble life' likely means 'a simple life'. Suggestions: correct preposition 'in', use 'which is' for defining clauses, use 'does not' for singular subjects, and use clear vocabulary like 'simple life'.