Building— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific supporting detail. Use linking words (for example, 'however' or 'but') and correct countable/uncountable forms ('fewer' or 'few', 'buildings'). Avoid repetition and filler sounds.

例: I live in a rural area, so there are only a few buildings nearby. However, about two hours away is Toronto, which has many tall skyscrapers that I sometimes visit on weekends.

提案: Reply directly and use a topic sentence. Correct verb forms and articles, remove fillers, and give one specific example of when and why you take photos. Use a linking word like 'because' to connect reason.

例: Yes, I often take photos of buildings because I find their architecture interesting. For example, when I visit downtown I take pictures of old brick facades to remember the trip.

提案: Provide a clear direct answer and support it with specific reasons. Use correct tense (conditional: 'If I got the chance, I would...') and more precise vocabulary ('panoramic view'). Keep responses within 3–4 sentences and avoid hesitation.

例: Yes — I would like to visit the CN Tower in Toronto because it offers a panoramic view of the city. If I had the chance, I would go to the observation deck to take photos and enjoy the skyline.

提案: Answer directly, correct prepositions and expressions ('afraid of heights', 'live on a high floor'). Provide a brief reason and one specific detail about your preference. Use linking words like 'because' or 'so' effectively.

例: No, I wouldn't want to live in a tall building because I'm afraid of heights. Therefore I prefer a ground-floor or basement apartment where I feel safer and more comfortable.

× I'm living in a rural area, so there is a very less buildings around me, such as there are some apartment buildings and that, uh, other, some business buildings.

✓ I live in a rural area, so there are very few buildings around me, such as some apartment buildings and other business buildings.

Use simple present 'I live' for a general situation instead of 'I'm living' (Present continuous implies temporary). 'There are' is the correct 'there be' plural form for 'buildings'. 'Very less' is incorrect; use 'very few' for countable nouns. Remove redundant phrases ('that, uh, other, some').

× If I talk about the tall buildings, so there is a Toronto which is just two hours far from here.

✓ If I talk about tall buildings, Toronto is just two hours away from here.

Don't use 'so' after 'if' in this context. Use 'Toronto is' not 'there is a Toronto' because Toronto is a specific place (subject). Use 'two hours away from here' rather than 'two hours far'.

× There are lots of tall building which we can see around us.

✓ There are lots of tall buildings that we can see around us.

Use plural 'buildings' to match 'lots of', and use 'that' or 'which' with correct relative clause structure. Ensure subject-verb agreement: 'There are' with plural noun.

× As I am living in a rural area and so it is a very interesting thing just for, to see the buildings around us.

✓ As I live in a rural area, it is very interesting to see the buildings around us.

Use simple present 'I live' for habitual facts. Remove redundant 'and so' and awkward 'just for, to'. Use infinitive 'to see' after 'interesting' (it is interesting to do something).

× So whenever I'm go outside for the downtown and somewhere else, I love to take a pictures with the buildings, which is uh, like, which helps me to keep my memories.

✓ So whenever I go out to downtown or other places, I love to take pictures of the buildings, which helps me keep my memories.

Use simple present 'I go' not 'I'm go'. 'Go out to downtown' or 'go downtown'; 'somewhere else' -> 'other places'. 'Take a pictures' should be 'take pictures' (no article with plural). Use 'of' with 'take pictures of'. The relative clause should use 'which helps' (singular 'which' refers to the activity of taking pictures), and 'keep my memories' is more natural than 'to keep my memories'.

× Umm, it is very difficult to say that, uh, select one building, but yeah, the CN Tower is the tallest building in Canada.

✓ Umm, it is very difficult to choose one building, but the CN Tower is the tallest building in Canada.

Use 'choose' instead of 'select' for natural speech. Remove filler words and 'that, uh'. The article 'the' before 'CN Tower' is appropriate. Sentence structure simplified for clarity.

× If I will get a chance, I will definitely go on top of it.

✓ If I get a chance, I will definitely go to the top of it.

In conditional sentences type 1, use present tense in the 'if' clause: 'If I get a chance'. Use 'go to the top of it' (preposition 'to' and 'top' noun) rather than 'go on top of it'.

× And I love to see the view of whole Toronto from there And uh, that will be my dream building.

✓ And I would love to see the view of the whole of Toronto from there, and that would be my dream visit.

Add 'the' before 'whole Toronto' and use 'the whole of Toronto' for natural phrasing. Use 'would love' and 'would be' to express hypothetical desire. 'Dream building' is awkward; 'dream visit' or 'dream experience' is clearer.

× Uh, actually I'm very scared from the height, so I can't, uh, live far, live on the tallest building for a long time.

✓ Actually I'm very scared of heights, so I can't live in the tallest building for a long time.

Use 'scared of' not 'scared from'. Use plural 'heights' as idiomatic. 'Live in the tallest building' is correct; remove redundant 'live far' and extra words.

× So that is the reason. So I love to live in a, uh, at a ground floor or in a basement instead of living on that, uh, building.

✓ So that is the reason. I would prefer to live on the ground floor or in a basement instead of living high up in that building.

Use 'prefer to live' or 'would prefer' for preference. Use 'on the ground floor' (or 'on a ground floor') and 'in a basement'. 'Instead of living on that building' is incorrect; say 'living high up in that building'. Avoid redundant fillers.