Building— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve grammar, clarity and coherence. Start with a clear topic sentence, use correct plural/singular forms, and avoid repetition. Add one or two specific details (e.g. types of tall buildings, locations) using linking words like "also" or "for example". Keep answers concise (max 5 sentences).

例: Yes, there are several tall buildings near my home. For example, there is a new apartment tower and an office complex by the river. These buildings have modern glass facades and have changed the skyline of my hometown. I like them because they make the area feel more lively and attract new businesses.

提案: Focus on clear, grammatically correct sentences and give a specific reason and frequency. Use linking words such as "because" or "when" to connect ideas. Avoid filler words and repetition. Keep it within 3–4 sentences with a clear topic sentence and one or two supporting details.

例: Yes, I sometimes take photos of interesting buildings. For example, I photographed the Hughes Building last month because it has unusual materials and a striking facade. I usually take pictures when I visit the city with my friends, and then I share them on social media.

提案: Be specific about the building and why you want to visit it. Use correct tense and sentence structure, and organize ideas with linking words like "because" or "so". Provide one clear reason (architecture, view, history) and a short personal comment. Limit to 3–4 sentences to sound natural.

例: Yes, I would like to visit the Ambani Building in my hometown because it is 28 storeys tall and has impressive architecture. I visited it once with friends and enjoyed the panoramic view from the top. I hope to go again to take more photos and learn about its design.

提案: State your preference clearly and give specific reasons (space, view, facilities). Use correct nouns and articles (e.g., "a tall building", "four bedrooms") and avoid repetition. Organize into a topic sentence plus 1–2 supporting sentences with linking words like "because" or "so".

例: Yes, I would like to live in a tall building because it offers more space and better views. For example, a typical flat there might have four bedrooms, a kitchen and a storage room, which would suit my family. Also, tall buildings often have amenities like lifts and security, which I appreciate.

× There are many building, There are many building build up nowadays in my hometown.

✓ There are many buildings; many buildings have been built recently in my hometown.

The noun 'building' should be plural when referring to more than one (singular and plural issue). Also the verb phrase 'build up' with this meaning is incorrect; use 'have been built' for recent passive action. Suggestion: use plural nouns and correct tense/passive when describing construction.

× My hometown has a great building to enhance the improvement society in its in its life.

✓ My hometown has a great building that enhances the improvement of society and its quality of life.

Incorrect or missing articles and awkward phrasing ('the improvement society in its in its life'). Use 'that' to introduce a relative clause and include articles where needed (article errors). Rephrase for clarity: 'enhances the improvement of society and its quality of life.'

× And I have no worries about my society.

✓ And I have no worries about my community.

'Society' is too general and collocates oddly with 'my'; 'community' is a more appropriate noun here (incorrect use of pronouns/noun choice). Also 'And' at sentence start is acceptable in speech but can be omitted in writing.

× I like to all buildings in my hometown.

✓ I like all the buildings in my hometown.

Incorrect verb construction 'like to all buildings' and missing article 'the'. Use direct object 'like all the buildings' (singular/plural and article use).

× Sometimes I take the photo of Hughes building who who is building that building has a great materials to express it's it's it's look and I just I just take the pictures once a time with my friends and I told about that building from the market of the person.

✓ Sometimes I take photos of the Hughes Building because the building has great materials that show its appearance. I only took pictures once with my friends, and I told someone at the market about that building.

Multiple issues: missing articles ('the photo' -> 'photos', 'the Hughes Building'), repeated words, wrong relative clause ('who who is building'), incorrect pluralization 'materials' is okay but 'a great materials' is wrong (article error), incorrect possessive 'it's' should be 'its' (pronoun vs contraction), awkward time expression 'once a time' should be 'once'. Corrections follow article rules and proper relative clauses.

× Yes, in my hometown has a great building I like to to Ambani building money building has a 28 floors to expect.

✓ Yes, there is a great building in my hometown: the Ambani Building. It has 28 floors.

Original sentence lacks subject and correct structure ('in my hometown has'). Use 'there is' for existence and break into clear sentences. Remove repeated words and incorrect phrases like 'money building' and 'to expect'. This fixes sentence structure errors.

× It's looked and I liked it very much and I visited more again with my friends and off of that building I liked it very much.

✓ It looks impressive, and I liked it very much. I visited it again with my friends, and I still like that building a lot.

Awkward verb forms 'It's looked' and tense mismatch 'liked' vs ongoing impression. Use present tense 'looks' for appearance and past/present as appropriate. Also avoid repetition and incorrect preposition 'off of'. This addresses incorrect adjective/adverb and tense usage.

× I never to forget this building in my life.

✓ I will never forget this building in my life.

Missing auxiliary/modal and incorrect infinitive form 'to forget' after 'never'. Use future tense 'will never forget' to express lasting memory. This fixes past/future tense misuse.

× Yes, sometimes I had a small building I want to get I want to get live in tall building because tall building has A4 bedrooms and one kitchen and and storeroom.

✓ Yes, I used to have a small house. Now I want to live in a tall building because a tall building can have four bedrooms, one kitchen, and a storeroom.

Confused tense: 'had' suggests past; clarify 'used to have' if habit. Repetition 'I want to get I want to get live' is incorrect (sentence structure). 'A4' should be 'four' and include articles. Use 'can have' to express possibility. Fixes past tense misuse and sentence structure.

× Also I like to that building to living to live to live there.

✓ Also I would like to live in that building.

Incorrect infinitive/gerund sequence 'to living to live to live'. Use 'would like to' + base verb for polite desire. This corrects verb form misuse.

× And I I progress to my this building with my father and mother.

✓ And I will progress with building this house along with my father and mother.

Original is unclear: 'progress to my this building' is ungrammatical. I interpreted intent as planning to build or improve a house with parents. Use clearer verb 'will work on/build' or 'will progress with building' and correct pronoun order. Fixes pronoun placement and sentence structure.