Building— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct and clear with one topic sentence, then add one or two specific details using linking words. Avoid repetition and incorrect grammar (e.g., tense, articles, and plurals). Keep sentences concise (max 5).

例: Yes. There are many tall buildings near my home because I live close to the city center. For example, the apartment towers nearby are much taller than my two-storey house, and they contain offices, shops and a gym, which makes the area feel busy and convenient.

提案: Start with a clear topic sentence, then explain conditions with linking words (e.g., 'if', 'when', 'sometimes'). Correct verb tenses and pronouns, and avoid redundancy by combining similar ideas into one sentence.

例: Sometimes. If I am sightseeing or with friends having fun, I often take photos of interesting buildings. However, I don't take pictures every time I go out — only when a building looks special or when we want to remember the moment.

提案: Answer the question clearly (want vs visited) and use correct time expressions. If describing a past visit, use past tense consistently and give specific details about why it was interesting. Use linking words (e.g., 'because', 'for example') and avoid repeating words.

例: Yes. Two days ago I visited the Parliament building and it was amazing because it houses several museums with a wide range of historical artifacts. For example, I saw old paintings and ceremonial items, and I took many photos because the architecture and exhibits were impressive.

提案: Give a clear opinion first, then support it with specific reasons using linking words ('because', 'also', 'for example'). Correct vocabulary (e.g., 'elevator' instead of 'lift' is OK but keep consistently), fix comparative forms and avoid unclear phrases.

例: Yes, I would like to live in a tall building because it is convenient and often quieter than living on a busy street. Also, tall buildings usually have elevators and good facilities, and living high up offers nice city views, which I would enjoy.

× Yeah, definitely when I arrived this places, this place has so big area and big cities, so actually nearby my home, there are so many buildings in there and so larger than my buildings because I am home in like 2 and they are so much bigger than and it is like to convenient is not, but yeah, it is to live to.

✓ Yeah, definitely when I arrived this place, this place has a very large area and big streets, so actually near my home there are many buildings and they are much larger than my house because I live in flat number 2 and they are much bigger. It is not very convenient, but yes, it is livable.

Multiple singular/plural errors and noun choices: 'this places' should be 'this place' (singular). 'there are so many buildings in there' -> 'there are many buildings' (remove redundancy). 'larger than my buildings' -> 'larger than my house' (singular/plural mismatch and wrong noun). 'I am home in like 2' -> 'I live in flat number 2' (correct noun and number expression). Suggestions: ensure nouns agree in number (singular vs plural), use specific nouns (house, flat) and remove redundant words.

× Yeah, not necessarily. It depends when I went outside, when I go outside and then my friends on me are having a fun, then I will take phone and then after that I will take a photo sometimes. But it's not necessary every time. So it depends.

✓ Not necessarily. It depends: when I go outside and my friends and I are having fun, I will take my phone and sometimes take a photo. But I don't take photos every time.

Tense inconsistency: mixing past 'went' with present 'go' is confusing; use present simple for habitual actions. Pronoun order and phrasing corrected ('my friends on me are having a fun' -> 'my friends and I are having fun'). Also corrected article usage for 'a photo' and simplified repetition. Suggestions: keep consistent tense for habitual actions (present simple), use correct subject order ('my friends and I'), and use concise phrasing.

× Yeah, definitely our last two days ago I visited A Parliament and it was so incredible and so much museum like, like variety of historical, historical object in there and the places so nice and we are taking a lot of picture with this building and yeah, it is too fine.

✓ Yes, definitely. Two days ago I visited the Parliament and it was incredible; there were many museum-like exhibits, a variety of historical objects, and the place was very nice. We took a lot of pictures of the building; it was great.

Incorrect use of time expression and past tense: 'our last two days ago' should be 'two days ago'. Use past simple consistently for completed actions ('I visited', 'we took'). 'A Parliament' -> 'the Parliament' (definite article). 'so much museum like' corrected to 'many museum-like exhibits' and 'historical object' pluralized. Suggestions: use proper time phrases ('two days ago'), use past simple for past events, choose correct article 'the' for specific landmarks, and pluralize countable nouns.

× Yeah, of course when I get chance I want to live in a big building because it's too more convenient or no noisy, noisy effect.

✓ Yes, of course. If I get the chance, I would like to live in a tall building because it is more convenient and less noisy from street traffic.

Modal and conditional use: 'when I get chance I want' is informal and missing article; better to use 'If I get the chance, I would like' to express desire politely. 'it's too more convenient' is incorrect; use 'more convenient'. 'no noisy, noisy effect' is vague; express as 'less noisy from street traffic'. Suggestions: use conditional/modal structure ('would like') for hypothetical desires, include articles ('the chance'), and use comparative forms properly.

× Or we can use both things. Lift can use also as well and we can see a lot of beautiful scenery in whole city. So yeah, I want to become a when I get chance.

✓ We can use both options. We can also use the elevator, and we can see a lot of beautiful scenery across the whole city. So yes, I would like to move there when I get the chance.

Pronoun and word choice issues: 'both things' -> 'both options' clarifies meaning. 'Lift can use also as well' is wrong word order and unnecessary repetition; corrected to 'We can also use the elevator.' 'in whole city' -> 'across the whole city' needs preposition. Final sentence 'I want to become a when I get chance' is ungrammatical; intended meaning is 'move there' or 'live there' and requires article 'the' and modal 'would like'. Suggestions: use clear pronouns and noun choices, correct word order for adverbs ('also'), include necessary articles and use appropriate verbs ('move', 'live').