Building— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: まず主語と動詞の一致や不要な語句の削除に注意してください。過去と現在の時制が混在しているので、答える時は一貫した時制を使い、聞かれた内容に直接答える短めの主題文を最初に述べ、その後に具体例を一つか二つ補足する練習をしてください。たとえば"I have a big shopping mall near my house."のように現在形で始め、過去の経験を話すときは"When I was a child, I often went there with my mother."と時制を明確にします。また冗長な繰り返し（"I I"や不要な前置詞）を避け、語彙は"shopping mall"や"movies"など文脈に合う語を使って簡潔にまとめてください。

例: Yes. I have a large shopping mall near my home. When I was a child, I often went there with my mother to watch films and buy snacks. It is very convenient for shopping and entertainment.

提案: 回答は簡潔にし、文法と語順を正しく保つことが大切です。ここでは現在の習慣について問われているので、普段の行動を述べる現在形を中心にし、過去の経験は短く補足として述べましょう。また"often I was surprised"のような語順の乱れや重複（"often I was"）を直し、理由を説明する際は接続詞（because, so）を適切に使って論理的に繋げてください。

例: Yes, I do sometimes. I enjoy photographing interesting buildings, especially tall ones. When I was a child, I was amazed by the height of the shopping mall near my home, so my mother often took pictures of me there.

提案: 質問は単数の建物についてなので、返答は単数形で明確に答えてください（"Yes, there is"や"Yes, I would like to visit..."）。場所や特徴を述べるときは文を完全にして語順を整え、慣用表現（"located in"や"next to"）を使うと自然です。語彙は正確に使い、"aquarium"と"planetarium"の機能を正確に説明するために接続詞を使って整理しましょう。例えば"It has an aquarium and a planetarium, where you can see fish and star shows."のように。

例: Yes, I would like to visit Sunshine City. It is located near the main station and has a large aquarium and a planetarium. In the aquarium you can see many kinds of fish, and in the planetarium you can watch realistic star shows.

提案: 否定の理由を述べる際は明確な主題文と理由の接続を整理してください。語句の繰り返しや不完全な文（"I want to."で終わる）を避け、"because"や"so"で理由を一文にまとめる練習をしましょう。また語彙の誤用（"shedding"は不適切）に注意し、"block sunlight"や"cast shadows"のような自然な表現を使ってください。さらに代替案や好みを付け加えると説得力が増します。

例: No, I wouldn't like to live in a tall building. I prefer low-rise houses because tall buildings often block sunlight and cast long shadows on the street. I enjoy having more natural light and a small garden near my home.

× Yes they are.

✓ Yes, there are.

The student used 'they' as a response to a yes/no question about existence; this is incorrect. Use the existential 'there are' to indicate the presence of tall buildings. Suggestion: answer with 'Yes, there are.' or 'Yes, there are tall buildings near my home.'

× There is a big shopping mall near my house.

✓ There is a big shopping mall near my house.

This sentence is correct in form for 'there is' with a singular noun; no change needed. Explanation: 'There is' is appropriate for a singular noun phrase like 'a big shopping mall.'

× When I was a child I often went to there with my mother.

✓ When I was a child, I often went there with my mother.

The preposition 'to' is redundant when used with 'there' because 'there' already indicates direction/place. Remove 'to' and add a comma after the introductory clause. Suggestion: use 'went there' rather than 'went to there.'

× In this complex I I will enjoy watching movies and buying some foods.

✓ In this complex I will enjoy watching movies and buying some food.

First, there is a duplicated 'I'. Second, 'food' is an uncountable noun and should not take plural 'foods' in this context. Using the gerund phrases 'watching' and 'buying' after 'enjoy' is acceptable when referring to future enjoyment, but usually 'I will enjoy' is followed by a simple verb or gerund. Suggestion: remove duplicate 'I' and change 'foods' to 'food.'

× It was very fun for me.

✓ It was a lot of fun for me.

While 'It was very fun' is understandable, native speakers typically say 'It was a lot of fun' or 'It was very enjoyable.' Using 'a lot of fun' or 'very enjoyable' is preferable. Suggestion: replace 'very fun' with 'a lot of fun' or 'very enjoyable.'

× Yes I do.

✓ Yes, I do.

Add a comma after 'Yes' for natural spoken writing. The sentence is otherwise correct.

× When I was a child I often I was surprised how tall the shopping mall is, so I asked my mother to take a photo with me.

✓ When I was a child, I was often surprised by how tall the shopping mall was, so I asked my mother to take a photo of me with it.

Problems: duplicated 'I often I'; sequence of tenses—use past 'was' to match 'When I was a child'; use 'surprised by how tall' and 'photo of me with it' or 'a photo with the mall.' Also change 'take a photo with me' (ambiguous) to 'take a photo of me with it.' Suggestion: remove duplicate words, keep past tense consistency, and use correct prepositions for 'surprised by' and 'photo of.'

× Yes they are.

✓ Yes, there are.

Same error as before: using 'they' instead of existential 'there are.' Use 'there are' to indicate existence of multiple buildings or places.

× I prefer to visit Sunshine City.

✓ I prefer to visit Sunshine City.

This sentence is grammatically correct as written; 'prefer to visit' is appropriate.

× There is in a capital station.

✓ It is near a capital station.

Original structure is ungrammatical. Likely intended meaning is location relative to a station. Use 'It is in the capital city near the station' or 'It is near a central station.' Suggestion: choose 'It is near a central station' or 'It is at the capital's main station.'

× It is a big and we can see a lot of fish in aquarium or planetarium.

✓ It is big, and we can see a lot of fish in the aquarium or visit the planetarium.

Problems: 'a big' requires a noun ('a big building'); missing article before 'aquarium'; 'or planetarium' is confusing because planetarium shows stars, not fish. Suggestion: separate ideas: 'It is big, and we can see a lot of fish in the aquarium or watch shows in the planetarium.'

× In planetarium we can see a lot of stars.

✓ In the planetarium, we can see a lot of stars.

Add the definite article 'the' before 'planetarium' and a comma after the introductory phrase. Suggestion: use 'the planetarium' when referring to a specific planetarium.

× I don't want to live near the tall buildings.

✓ I don't want to live near tall buildings.

Both forms are acceptable, but 'near tall buildings' is more natural than 'near the tall buildings' unless referring to specific buildings already mentioned. Suggestion: drop 'the' for general statement.

× This is because we can get We can't get our sunshine by shedding these big buildings.

✓ This is because we can't get enough sunshine if these big buildings block it.

Original contains duplicate/conflicting phrases and incorrect verb 'shedding'—probably intended 'shadowing' or 'blocking.' Use 'block' or 'cast shadows' and correct the negative structure. Suggestion: say 'we can't get enough sunshine because these big buildings block it' or 'because they cast shadows.'

× I want to.

✓ I don't want to live near tall buildings.

The original fragment 'I want to.' is unclear and contradicts previous negative; likely intended 'I don't want to.' or 'I want to live elsewhere.' Suggestion: restate clearly: 'I don't want to live near tall buildings.'