Building— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make the answer more fluent, concise and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words (uh, well), correct noun forms and use one or two supporting details with a linking word. For example, say you live in the countryside, describe typical houses, and explain why tall buildings are rare.

例: I live in the countryside, so there aren’t many tall buildings near my home. Most houses here are single-storey and spread out, which makes skyscrapers uncommon. As a result, the skyline is mostly low and residential.

提案: Improve accuracy and reduce repetition. Use correct verb forms and a clearer structure: state whether you take photos, give a reason, and provide a brief example. Use linking words like because or for example.

例: Yes, I enjoy photographing buildings, especially those with creative designs. Because unusual shapes and patterns catch my eye, I often take pictures to study the details later. For example, I photographed an old theatre last month because of its ornate façade.

提案: Be more specific and concise. Begin with a direct answer, give reasons with linking words (because, and), and add one specific detail to show interest (e.g., which pyramid or what you want to learn). Avoid fillers and repeated phrases.

例: Yes, I would love to visit the Pyramids of Giza in Egypt because I’m fascinated by ancient history and architecture. I want to see how they were built and learn about the people who constructed them. Visiting would be an unforgettable way to connect with the past.

提案: Give a clear preference and explain reasons concisely. Start with your main idea (preference for single-storey houses), then add two specific reasons using linking words (because, and). Avoid filler phrases and ensure grammar agreement (single-storey houses or a single-storey house).

例: I would prefer to live in a single-storey house because it’s more convenient and feels safer. For example, it’s easier to move around without stairs and I’d be less worried about collapsing or falling in an earthquake.

× since I live in a countryside

✓ since I live in the countryside

Use the definite article 'the' with 'countryside' when referring to a specific type of area where one lives. 'In a countryside' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'in the countryside.' Suggestion: say 'I live in the countryside.'

× you can see barely tall buildings in here

✓ you can barely see tall buildings here

The adverb 'barely' should modify the verb 'see' and is normally placed before it. Also 'in here' is redundant; use 'here.' Suggestion: place 'barely' before the verb and use 'here.'

× There's always one, uh, flat houses, uh, in my, uh, town.

✓ There are always some flat houses in my town.

'There is' contracts to 'there's' and requires a singular noun; 'houses' is plural so use 'There are.' Also 'one flat houses' is contradictory. Use 'some' or 'a few' with plural nouns. Suggestion: 'There are always some flat houses in my town.'

× So it's hard to find something tall like like skyscrapers in here.

✓ So it's hard to find something tall like skyscrapers here.

Remove the duplicated 'like' and use 'here' instead of 'in here.' 'Like skyscrapers' is fine to give an example. Suggestion: '...tall like skyscrapers here.'

× I really like taking photos of building, especially when it's really creative

✓ I really like taking photos of buildings, especially when they're really creative

Use plural 'buildings' when speaking generally. Match the pronoun: 'they'/'they're' refers back to 'buildings' (plural) rather than 'it.' Suggestion: pluralize 'building' and use 'they're' or 'which are.'

× like when it's like builded in a creative design and structure.

✓ like when it's built with a creative design and structure

The correct past participle of 'build' is 'built,' not 'builded.' Also use 'built with' to describe how it was constructed. Suggestion: '...when it's built with a creative design and structure.'

× because whenever I found something interesting to me, I love taking photos.

✓ because whenever I find something interesting, I love taking photos

When describing habitual actions, use the present simple 'find' rather than the past 'found.' Also 'interesting to me' is wordy; 'interesting' suffices. Suggestion: use present simple for repeated actions: 'whenever I find...'.

× I would like to visit pyramids in Egypt.

✓ I would like to visit the pyramids in Egypt

When referring to the famous pyramids collectively, use the definite article 'the pyramids.' Without 'the' the phrase sounds incomplete. Suggestion: 'visit the pyramids in Egypt.'

× so that's why I think it would be a great experience for me to visit and see pyramids.

✓ so that's why I think it would be a great experience for me to visit and see the pyramids

Include 'the' before 'pyramids' and avoid repeating 'that's why' and 'so' together. 'See pyramids' needs the definite article when referring to specific famous pyramids. Suggestion: use 'the pyramids.'

× because they're like very, uh, tall and big.

✓ because they're very tall and large

Avoid using 'like' as a filler. 'Big' and 'tall' are overlapping; 'large' is more natural with 'tall.' Remove filler words and redundant adjectives. Suggestion: 'because they're very tall and large' or simply 'because they're very tall.'

× for some reasons I would like to live in tall buildings

✓ for some reasons I would like to live in tall buildings

This sentence is acceptable, but 'for some reasons' is awkward; 'for some reason' or 'for a few reasons' is preferred. No definite article error detected, keep as is. Suggestion: use 'for some reason' or 'for a few reasons'.

× but I mostly prefer to live in a single story houses because it's more convenient and also safe rather than tall buildings

✓ but I mostly prefer to live in single-story houses because they're more convenient and also safer than tall buildings

'A single story houses' mixes singular article 'a' with plural 'houses.' Remove 'a' and hyphenate 'single-story.' Match plural subject 'houses' with plural verb and pronoun 'they're.' Use comparative 'safer than' rather than 'safe rather than.' Suggestion: 'prefer to live in single-story houses because they're more convenient and safer than tall buildings.'

× and because you know, when there are like earthquakes, it's really, uh, scary to live in this kind of building.

✓ and because, you know, when there are earthquakes, it's really scary to live in this kind of building

Remove filler 'like' and unnecessary commas. 'This kind of building' is singular and acceptable; ensure consistency: earlier referenced 'tall buildings' (plural) but here general statement about 'this kind of building' is fine. Suggestion: omit 'like' and fillers for clarity.