Building— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Speak more clearly and directly answer the question with one clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details. Avoid repetition and incorrect words. Use correct grammar for location and countable nouns (e.g., "there aren't any tall buildings near my home"). Keep it to no more than five sentences.

例: No, there aren't any tall buildings near my home. I live in a small village in Vietnam, so the area mostly has single-storey houses and low-rise buildings. For example, the nearest town has only two- or three-storey shops, not skyscrapers like in the capital city.

提案: Begin with a clear topic sentence saying whether you take photos. Use past tense correctly when describing past trips, and reduce fillers (uh, like). Add one specific detail about why you took the photo or what you liked about the building. Keep it concise and coherent with linking words (e.g., "for example", "because").

例: Yes, I often take photos of interesting buildings. For example, last week I visited Ho Chi Minh City and photographed Landmark 81 because I was impressed by its height and modern design. The lighting at sunset made it especially photogenic.

提案: Answer directly with the building name and location, then give a concise reason why you want to visit. Avoid repeating words and unclear phrases, and use correct vocabulary (e.g., "twin towers" not "double towel"). Provide one specific detail about the building's features or reputation.

例: Yes, I would like to visit the twin towers in Colombo. I have seen photos of their striking glass façade and unique design, and I'm curious to see the city views from the top. I hope to visit them when I travel to Sri Lanka.

提案: Start with a clear statement and give one or two specific reasons (view, convenience, facilities). Use smoother linking words (e.g., "because", "for example") and avoid filler words. Use correct phrasing for benefits (e.g., "a beautiful view of the city"). Keep response under five sentences.

例: Yes, I would like to live in a tall building because it offers a beautiful view of the city. For example, from a high-floor apartment I could see the skyline and enjoy sunsets, and tall buildings often have good facilities like gyms and security.

× Yeah, maybe it's not near my home there do not have some stones building because I live in a village in a like a small town in my country in my Vietnam.

✓ Yes, maybe there are no tall buildings near my home because I live in a village-like small town in Vietnam.

The original sentence has multiple preposition and structure errors. 'Not near my home there do not have' is ungrammatical; use 'there are no' with plural 'buildings' (preposition/structure). 'Stone building' seems incorrect for 'tall buildings'; use 'tall buildings'. 'In a village in a like a small town in my country in my Vietnam' is redundant and misuses prepositions; use 'a village-like small town in Vietnam'. Suggest simplifying and using 'there are' for existence and correct prepositions.'},{