Building— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make the response more concise and add a specific detail to sound more natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one specific example and a brief reason. Use a linking word to connect ideas.

例: Yes, there are many tall buildings near my home because I live in the city. For example, the 30-storey Central Tower is right across from my apartment, and it has offices and a shopping mall, so the area is always busy.

提案: Improve clarity and grammar by giving a direct topic sentence, a reason, and a specific example. Use linking words (for example, because) and avoid vague phrases like "so many angles."

例: Yes, I often photograph buildings because I enjoy their architectural details. For example, I like the old town hall’s façade because its carved stone and windows create interesting angles and shadows.

提案: Be specific: name one building you want to visit and explain why. Use a topic sentence, a linking word, and a concrete reason or detail to make the answer effective and natural.

例: Yes, I would like to visit the city cathedral because of its historic stained-glass windows and tall spire; I’ve seen pictures and I’d like to see the interior architecture in person.

提案: Provide a clear direct answer and one or two specific reasons. Avoid repetition and grammatical errors. Use a linking word to add the reason and give a brief example to support your opinion.

例: No, I don’t want to live in a tall building because I prefer ground-level houses for the garden space. However, I enjoy visiting tall buildings for photography, for instance, the rooftop views are great for cityscape shots.

× Yes, there are so many of the buildings I like to visit.

✓ Yes, there are so many buildings I would like to visit.

This sentence has an incorrect use of the article 'the' with 'many of the buildings' and a missing modal/tense consistency. Use 'many buildings' (no 'the') to express a general quantity, and use 'would like to' to clearly express desire to visit. Suggestion: say 'there are so many buildings I would like to visit.' Grammar problem type ID:1

× No, I don't. I like to go there for a visit because I find a places there that I find more beautiful to take a photo.

✓ No, I don't. I like to go there for a visit because I find places there that are more beautiful to photograph.

Errors: 'a places' mixes singular article with plural noun (singular/plural and article error). Also 'that I find more beautiful to take a photo' is awkward and has verb form issues. Correct by removing the incorrect article, using 'places' (plural), and use 'are more beautiful to photograph' (adjective + infinitive verb form) for clear phrasing. Suggestion: use 'places' without 'a' and 'to photograph' instead of 'to take a photo.' Grammar problem type ID:22

× Yes, I take photos of buildings because there are so many angles that I find it beautiful to take a photo with.

✓ Yes, I take photos of buildings because there are so many angles that I find beautiful to photograph.

Problems: unnecessary and awkward preposition 'with' at the end and redundant phrase 'find it beautiful to take a photo with.' Better to use 'find beautiful to photograph' or 'that make for beautiful photos.' Suggestion: remove the trailing preposition and simplify to 'find beautiful to photograph.' Grammar problem type ID:11

× Yes, there are many tall buildings near my home because I live in a big city. There are also big malls for shopping.

✓ Yes, there are many tall buildings near my home because I live in a big city. There are also large malls for shopping.

No major grammatical errors, but 'big malls' is acceptable; 'large malls' is a slightly more natural collocation. This is an optional stylistic improvement rather than a strict grammatical correction. Suggestion: prefer 'large malls' or keep 'big malls' if informal. Grammar problem type ID:13

× Are there tall buildings near your home?

✓ Are there tall buildings near your home?

This question sentence is grammatically correct and needs no change. Grammar problem type ID:3

× Is there a building that you would like to visit?

✓ Is there a building that you would like to visit?

This question is grammatically correct as written. No change required. Grammar problem type ID:3