Building— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答要直接、语法正确并简洁。避免使用不正确的时态和重复词（例如“did”、“you know”多次）。提供一到两句具体补充说明（比如数量、功能或距离），并使用连接词使句子连贯。可练习用现在时描述事实并说清具体原因或例子。

例: Yes, there are many tall buildings near my home because I live close to a busy commercial area. For example, there are several office towers and shopping malls within a ten-minute walk.

提案: 回答要更清晰并使用合适词汇。避免填充词和口头禅（如“you know”, “umm”）。说明拍摄原因时要用具体词汇（e.g. architecture, design, details）并用连接词（because, so）组织句子。练习把观点和理由分成两到三句。

例: Yes, I often photograph buildings because I admire their architecture and unique designs. I especially like modern structures with interesting lines and glass facades, which look great in photos.

提案: 回答应直接回应问题并提供一个具体例子。避免无关词（如“dogs”）和大量停顿。可以说出一个你想参观的具体建筑并解释原因，使用连接词（for example, because）展开说明。保持句子简短明了。

例: Yes, I would like to visit the Guggenheim Museum in Bilbao because its curved, modern design is very unique. I want to see how the architecture interacts with the surrounding city and take photos of the exterior.

提案: 回答要表达明确立场并给出具体理由，避免用模糊和重复的说法。用一两句说明担心的具体问题（例如安全、逃生困难或噪音），并可提出反例或条件（如果有安全措施则另说）。这样更有说服力。

例: No, I would not like to live in a tall building because I worry about safety and evacuation in an emergency. If a building had excellent safety systems and regular drills, I might consider it.

× Yes, it did.

✓ Yes, there are.

原句使用了過去式 "did"，但此處在回答是否有高樓時應使用現在時表示當前狀況；另外原句語法不完整，應使用 "there are" 來表達『有』。建議使用現在時態並改為完整的存在句。

× So you know, the building always is so talk.

✓ So, you know, the buildings are always so tall.

原句中使用了錯誤的形容詞 "talk"（拼寫錯誤）且語序不當。正確應為形容詞 "tall" 並且主詞為複數 "the buildings"，be 動詞應放在主詞後。建議注意拼寫並使用正確的主詞和動詞順序。

× Yeah, I really love to take photo for building, you know, some buildings, yeah, re recent buildings so amazing and umm they it it has a good wine.

✓ Yeah, I really love to take photos of buildings. Some recent buildings are so amazing and they have a good design.

原句存在多個問題：1) "take photo" 應使用複數或不定冠詞 "take photos" 或 "take a photo"；2) 介詞應為 "photos of buildings" 而不是 "for"；3) "re" 和重複的詞彙為口語填充音或錯誤，應刪除；4) "has a good wine" 非常不合語境，應改為合適的名詞如 "design"（設計）。建議使用正確的名詞單複數形式、介詞以及語義相符的詞。

× So, you know, taking this photo which can attract people to watch.

✓ So, you know, taking these photos can attract people to look at them.

原句中"taking this photo which can attract people to watch" 在語法和用詞上不自然：1) 與前文一致應使用複數 "these photos"；2) 動詞搭配應為 "attract people to look at"，不能直接用 "watch"；3) 結構可以簡化為主語+動詞的形式。建議使用正確的動詞短語搭配和一致的單複數形式。

× I think dogs, umm, because I just yeah, I, I, I just uh, obsessed with the good wide building or interesting building yes, So I don't have certain times of building.

✓ I don't have a specific favourite building, but I'm just really obsessed with wide or interesting buildings.

原句語序混亂且包含不相關詞（如 "dogs"），導致句子結構不清楚。應先表達沒有特定偏好，再說明喜歡的建築類型。"certain times of building" 是不正確的表達，應改為 "a specific favourite building" 或 "a certain type of building"。建議刪除雜詞並重組句子以表達清晰意思。

× I think dogs, umm, because I just yeah, I, I, I just uh, obsessed with the good wide building or interesting building yes, So I don't have certain times of building.

✓ I think not. I don't have a specific favourite building; I just like wide or interesting buildings.

原句開始用 "I think dogs" 與後文不搭，可能是語流錯誤导致不當代詞或名詞插入。需刪除無關詞並用代詞（如 "I"）和否定表達清楚。建議在回答時保持簡潔，使用正確的代詞和名詞短語。

× Basically not, you know, tall building is so dangerous Yes, I often watch the TV Yeah, the some people, yeah umm, uh, meets out the dangers from the tall building so that they can't umm, go out.

✓ Basically no. Tall buildings can be dangerous. I often watch TV about some people who encounter dangers in tall buildings and can't get out.

原句中多處形容詞、副詞和詞序錯誤：1) "Basically not" 應為回答否定 "Basically no" 或 "Not really"；2) "tall building is so dangerous" 應將建築物作複數或用定冠詞；3) "meets out the dangers" 是錯誤搭配，應為 "encounter dangers" 或 "face danger"；4) "can't go out" 用法可接受但需放在合適的時態和結構中。建議使用正確的形容詞搭配和固定動詞短語，並注意單複數一致。