Building— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more grammatically accurate, concise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct singular/plural and prepositions, and add one brief supporting detail using a linking word. Avoid redundancy.

例: No, there aren’t any tall buildings near my home because I live in a rural area. For example, the nearest town only has two- or three-storey shops, so most structures are low-rise.

提案: Use more natural verbs and tighten the sentence. Provide a short reason with a linking word and one specific example to make the answer more vivid.

例: Yes, I often photograph buildings when I visit cities because they make attractive backgrounds. For instance, I took several photos of a modern glass facade last month that looked great at sunset.

提案: Improve grammar and word choice: use natural verbs (e.g., 'I'd love to visit') and correct place names and structures. Give a concise reason and possibly a detail about what you want to see. Keep to under five sentences.

例: Yes, I would love to visit the Burj Khalifa in Dubai because it is the tallest building in the world. I want to see the observation deck and experience the panoramic view of the city from the top.

提案: Make your response grammatically correct and specific. State a clear topic sentence, then give one or two concrete reasons using linking words. Avoid repeating the same idea twice.

例: Yes, I would like to live in a tall building in the future because high-rise apartments often offer better views and security. For example, living on an upper floor would give my family more privacy and a nicer outlook over the city.