Building— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Focus on clarity, correct vocabulary (e.g. 'tall' not 'talk'), reduce hesitation and filler words, and make a concise structured response: state the main idea, then give two specific supporting details using linking words. Aim for 2–3 sentences and avoid repetition.

例: Yes. I live in Batumi, and there are many tall buildings nearby, including modern skyscrapers and high-quality hotels and apartments. Moreover, the skyline is very attractive, especially at sunset, which I find fascinating.

提案: Good content and relevant details. Improve sentence variety and coherence by using linking words (for example, 'also' and 'when'), correct small grammar errors (plural/singular and articles), and shorten to 3–4 sentences without unnecessary repetition.

例: Yes, I often photograph buildings. I especially enjoy capturing modern architecture as well as historical structures when I travel, because they tell different stories. I usually share the best shots on social media to preserve memories and get feedback.

提案: The answer is unclear and full of hesitation. First, identify the building specifically, then give two clear reasons for wanting to visit and mention a concern if relevant. Use linking words (for example, 'because' and 'however') and avoid filler sounds. Keep it within 2–3 clear sentences.

例: I would like to visit the cable car station in my town because it offers spectacular views and is a popular attraction. However, I am slightly afraid of the cable cars, so I might go with a friend for support.

提案: Answer the question directly, then provide two clear, specific reasons using linking words like 'because' and 'for example'. Fix grammar (articles, singular/plural) and avoid irrelevant words. Keep it to 2–3 sentences with clear endings.

例: Yes, I would like to live in a tall building because the view of the city is much more beautiful, especially at night when the lights are on. Also, tall buildings often have better security and amenities, which makes them more comfortable to live in.

× Oh yes, there are many talk buildings near my home.

✓ Oh yes, there are many tall buildings near my home.

The word 'talk' is a mistaken form; the correct adjective to describe height is 'tall'. Replace the incorrect word with 'tall' to modify 'buildings'. Suggestion: Use the adjective 'tall' to describe high buildings.

× I live in Batumi and in my city there are many skyscrapers, shopping malls and top tier, uh, and high quality, uh, hotel and apartments.

✓ I live in Batumi and in my city there are many skyscrapers, shopping malls and top-tier, high-quality hotels and apartments.

Plural nouns must match across the list. 'Hotel' should be plural 'hotels' to agree with 'apartments' and the earlier plural items. Also 'top tier' and 'high quality' should be hyphenated when used as compound adjectives before a noun: 'top-tier' and 'high-quality'. Suggestion: Make nouns plural when listing multiple items and hyphenate compound adjectives before nouns.

× Uh, and uh, they are very beautiful, uh, skyline, but to me, and it's, I think it's very fascinating.

✓ They make a very beautiful skyline, and I think it is fascinating.

Original is fragmented with filler words and incorrect noun usage ('they are very beautiful skyline' mixes plural subject with singular noun). Restructure to show that the buildings create a skyline: 'They make a very beautiful skyline.' Remove fillers and redundant phrases. Suggestion: Reduce filler words and ensure subjects and complements agree in number and meaning.

× Yes, I always take photo of buildings.

✓ Yes, I always take photos of buildings.

'Photo' should be plural 'photos' because 'always' implies repeated action and 'buildings' is plural. Use plural noun to match the sense of frequency. Suggestion: Use plural when referring to multiple instances: 'take photos'.

× I find new modern buildings and also I like to take photos of historical buildings.

✓ I find new modern buildings interesting, and I also like taking photos of historical buildings.

Stylistically, after 'like' the gerund ('taking') is more natural when referring to a general habit. Also add 'interesting' after 'find' to complete the idea. Suggestion: Use 'like' + gerund for habitual actions and ensure verbs have necessary complements.

× And when I travel I always try to save the moments and take photo.

✓ And when I travel I always try to save the moments and take photos.

'Photo' should be plural 'photos' to match 'moments' and to indicate multiple pictures. Use plural nouns when referring to more than one item. Suggestion: Use plural 'photos' for multiple pictures.

× Then I always share my photos on social media.

✓ Then I always share my photos on social media.

This sentence is correct; no change needed. It already uses the correct plural form and verb agreement. Suggestion: Continue using plural 'photos' and present simple for habitual actions.

× It's a very buildings, uh, I would like to visit it and uh, this, uh, uh, building, uh, uh, is cargo cable yeah it's uh, very, yeah, very attractive, uh, place and most visited place in my town, but I have some fear over the cables, so I think.

✓ There is a building I would like to visit: the cable car; it is a very attractive and popular place in my town, but I am a little afraid of the cables.

Original is disfluent, mixes plural/singular, and mislabels 'cargo cable'. Restructure to a clear sentence: introduce the building, name it as 'the cable car', use 'there is' to introduce existence, use adjectives 'attractive' and 'popular', and express fear with 'am a little afraid'. Suggestion: Remove fillers, use clear nouns ('cable car'), and correct verb forms for clarity.

× Yes Sir, I want to live in tall building because I think some nephew uh from the city, uh, for a view of the city from the tall building is uh more beautiful umm and umm yeah, especially when uh, the especially at night when the lights are turned on and also there are more security systems and can.

✓ Yes, Sir. I want to live in a tall building because I think the view of the city from a tall building is more beautiful, especially at night when the lights are on; there are also better security systems.

Multiple errors: missing articles 'a' before 'tall building'; unclear phrase 'some nephew' removed because it seems incorrect and unrelated. Use 'the view' to refer specifically to the view, and 'a tall building' for a general tall building. 'Especially at night when the lights are on' is the correct clause. Finish the sentence by saying 'there are also better security systems' to complete the thought. Suggestion: Use articles ('a', 'the') appropriately: 'a tall building' for one of many, 'the view' when specifying a known view; avoid undefined words like 'nephew' unless intended.