Building— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 文法と語順に注意し、意味の通りやすさを改善してください。短い回答でまず直接に答え（トピック文）を述べ、その後で必要なら理由や詳細を付け加えます。例えば三つの文以内で完結に述べ、同じ語を繰り返さないようにしましょう。具体的には “No” の後に続く説明は「私のコンドミニアムは低い家に囲まれている」など簡潔に表現します。発音や語句の省略（“a beer from my window” のような不自然な表現）にも注意してください。

例: No, there aren’t any tall buildings near my home. My condominium is surrounded by small houses, so I have a nice view from my window.

提案: 答えは明確で理由も述べられていますが、つなぎ言葉とより自然な表現を使って流れを改善しましょう。“uh” のような口語の間投詞は減らし、supporting detailを一つ増やすと説得力が上がります。語彙ももう少し具体的にし、どのような歴史的建物が好きかを示すと良いです。

例: Yes, I do. I especially enjoy photographing historical buildings because I love history, for example old churches and colonial-era houses.

提案: 時制と語順に注意し、情報を論理的に整理してください。まず行きたいという直接的な答えを述べ、その後に理由や計画を続けます。複数形・単数形の一致（"tall buildings" vs "Twin Towers"）や過去形と未来形の混在（"came"ではなく"is coming"）を修正しましょう。

例: Yes, I would like to visit the Petronas Twin Towers because they are famous landmarks in Malaysia. My friend is coming next month, so we plan to visit them together.

提案: 回答は簡潔で理由も述べられていますが、繰り返しや不要な単語（"I I'm"）を避け、理由をもう少し具体的に述べると良いでしょう。例えば避けたい点（安全面、高所恐怖など）や代替の良さを示すと会話が広がります。

例: No, I don’t. I’m worried about earthquakes and prefer a low-rise house because I feel safer living closer to the ground.

× No, they are are my condominium is surrounded by. Small house, so a beer from my window is very nice.

✓ No, my condominium is surrounded by small houses, so the view from my window is very nice.

The original contains duplicated words and fragmented clauses. Combine ideas into a single sentence with correct word order: 'my condominium is surrounded by small houses' (subject + verb + prepositional phrase) and 'so the view from my window is very nice' clarifies the result. Use 'small houses' (plural) to match 'surrounded by'. Replace 'a beer' with 'the view' to make sense in context.

× Yes, I do. I take some photos, especially, uh, historical buildings. This is because I love history.

✓ Yes, I do. I take some photos, especially of historical buildings, because I love history.

Use the preposition 'of' after 'photos' to indicate what is being photographed (preposition error). Also remove the filler 'uh' and combine clauses into one sentence using 'because' to show cause. Present simple is appropriate for habitual actions.

× Yes, I would like to visit Twin Towers which is very famous and popular tall buildings in Malaysia. So next month my friend came to Malaysia so we will go there.

✓ Yes, I would like to visit the Twin Towers, which are very famous and popular tall buildings in Malaysia. Next month my friend is coming to Malaysia, so we will go there.

Multiple issues: article use ('the Twin Towers') and subject-verb agreement with plural 'which are'. 'Came' is past tense; use 'is coming' for future arrangement. Also split into clearer sentences and use commas appropriately.

× No, I don't. This is because I I'm afraid of earthquakes, so I want to live in a house.

✓ No, I don't. This is because I'm afraid of earthquakes, so I want to live in a house.

Remove the duplicated 'I'. Use the correct contraction 'I'm' for 'I am'. The rest of the sentence is correct with present simple to express a general preference.