Building— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is relevant but a bit wordy and slightly awkward. Give a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific details linked with a connector. Avoid repeating 'beautiful' and be concise.

例: Yes, there are several tall buildings near my home. For example, a modern apartment complex and a glass-front office tower stand on the main street, and they include a gym and a rooftop garden, which many residents use.

提案: Good direct answer but slightly informal and repetitive. Start with a clear statement, then give specific reason and an example, using a linking word such as 'because' or 'for example'.

例: Yes, I do, but only sometimes because I prefer photographing historic buildings. For example, I often take pictures of old temples and colonial-era houses because of their unique details and textures.

提案: Your enthusiasm is fine, but the phrase 'beautiful fabric' is inaccurate for the Taj Mahal and you repeat 'beautiful'. State the building clearly, give specific reasons (design, history, materials) and avoid vague words. Use a linking word like 'because' or 'since'.

例: Yes, I would love to visit the Taj Mahal because of its exquisite marble inlay work and symmetrical architecture. I want to see the detailed carvings and learn about its historical background.

提案: The answer is unclear (Tallinn is a city, not necessarily a tall building). Clarify whether you mean a tall building or a city, and give specific reasons using linking words. Avoid repeating 'beautiful'.

例: Yes, I would like to live in a tall apartment because it offers great views and convenient facilities. For instance, a high-rise would give me panoramic sunrise views and easy access to a gym and nearby cafes.

× Yes, talking about my hometown, there are large buildings with beautiful amenities and also modern facilities.

✓ Yes. In my hometown there are large buildings with beautiful amenities and modern facilities.

The original sentence misuses a topical phrase 'talking about my hometown' causing awkward structure and misplaced modifier. Rephrase to 'In my hometown' to correctly introduce the subject and remove redundancy 'and also'. This produces a clear subject-verb structure and parallel nouns 'amenities and modern facilities'.

× Yes, it depends on the situation. If the building is like historic buildings, then I mostly prefer to take the pictures.

✓ Yes, it depends on the situation. If the building is a historic building, I usually prefer to take pictures.

Problems: incorrect comparison 'is like historic buildings' and awkward article use. Use singular 'a historic building' when referring to one, and 'usually' is more natural than 'mostly'. Also 'take pictures' (no article) is idiomatic. These changes fix noun agreement and verb-noun collocation.

× Oh yes, it's my dream to visit Taj Mahal because it has many beautiful designs with beautiful fabric.

✓ Oh yes, it's my dream to visit the Taj Mahal because it has many beautiful designs and decorations.

Missing definite article for a famous monument: use 'the Taj Mahal'. 'Beautiful fabric' is odd when describing a monument; 'decorations' or 'architectural details' fits better. Also avoid repeating 'beautiful' twice; use varied vocabulary for clarity.

× Yes, I would like to live in Tallinn because it has many beautiful amenities with all the beautiful scenery and also I can get the sunrise.

✓ Yes, I would like to live in Tallinn because it has many nice amenities and beautiful scenery, and I could see the sunrise.

Original repeats 'beautiful' and uses 'get the sunrise' which is unnatural. Use 'see the sunrise' to express viewing it. Replace 'has many beautiful amenities with all the beautiful scenery' with parallel nouns 'many nice amenities and beautiful scenery'. Change 'can' to 'could' to match the conditional mood of 'would like'.