Building— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make the answer more natural and concise: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details. Correct grammar (word order, articles) and avoid contradictory phrases like "night view in the day." Use linking words to connect ideas.

例: Yes. I live in a high-rise condo in the central business district, so there are several tall office buildings nearby. For example, the office tower opposite my building has a glass facade that looks especially impressive in the evening.

提案: Give a clear topic sentence and specific reasons with correct grammar. Use linking words (because, for example) and avoid simple repetition. Mention one or two specific examples and describe how you feel or what you focus on when photographing.

例: Yes, I enjoy photographing buildings because I like the contrast between modern and historical architecture. For example, I often photograph the nearby modern glass tower and an old temple, focusing on details like reflections and ornate carvings.

提案: Be specific about the building and give clear reasons why you want to visit. Fix grammar and vocabulary (e.g., "a building in Bangkok," "famous for its feng shui and fountain"). Use linking words to organise points (first, also, for example).

例: Yes. I would like to visit a famous shopping mall in Bangkok that is known for its feng shui design and large decorative fountain. Firstly, the modern architecture attracts me, and also I want to see how the fountain and layout reflect local beliefs.

提案: Start with a clear topic sentence and give two or three specific reasons, using linking words (for example, because, also). Correct small grammar issues and prefer singular/plural consistency. Give concise, natural phrasing.

例: Yes, I would. I prefer living in a tall building because it feels quieter and more private, and the higher floors have better air and impressive views. For example, I enjoy watching the sunset from my balcony each evening.

× Yes, there are several tall buildings near my home I live.

✓ Yes, there are several tall buildings near where I live.

The original sentence conflates two clauses and misuses 'home I live'. Replace with 'where I live' to correctly indicate location; 'buildings' plural is fine.

× I'm living in high rise condo and my area is a CBD area and the opposite of my condo is office building.

✓ I live in a high-rise condo, and my area is a CBD. Opposite my condo is an office building.

Use simple present 'I live' for habitual/state. Add articles 'a' and hyphenate 'high-rise'; 'opposite my condo is an office building' requires the article 'an' and clearer word order.

× It's quite night view in the day.

✓ It has a nice night view in the evening.

'Quite night view in the day' is incorrect word choice and time reference. Use 'has a nice night view' and 'in the evening' to match meaning.

× Yes I do. I enjoy taking pictures of buildings 'cause it's modern building and historical buildings.

✓ Yes, I do. I enjoy taking pictures of buildings because there are modern buildings and historical buildings.

Replace informal ''cause' with 'because'. Use 'there are' to indicate existence of both types; plural 'buildings' needed. Also add commas.

× There are different building in my area.

✓ There are different buildings in my area.

Count noun 'building' should be plural 'buildings' after 'there are'.

× It's make me feel thoughtful when I taking those photo.

✓ It makes me feel thoughtful when I take those photos.

Use third-person singular 'makes' to agree with 'It'. After 'when' use base form 'take' for simple present, and pluralize 'photos'.

× Yes, there is a building I would like to visit.

✓ Yes, there is a building I would like to visit.

Sentence is correct; 'there is' properly introduces a single building. No change needed.

× That building is uh, one Bangkok.

✓ That building is in Bangkok.

Original missing preposition 'in' and has extraneous 'one'. Use 'in Bangkok' to indicate location.

× There's famous like Feng shui, the good Feng shui of fountain and the building very modern, is a shopping mall and attractive tourist sport in tourist spot in Thailand.

✓ It is famous for its good Feng shui, including a fountain. The building is very modern; it is a shopping mall and an attractive tourist spot in Thailand.

Sentence was run-on and had wrong structures. Use 'famous for' and 'its' possessive, separate ideas into clear sentences, add articles 'a' and 'an', and correct 'sport' to 'spot'.

× Yes I do, I want to live in a tall building because they have fresh air and quiet, can keep a privacy and have a good view before watching the sunset every evening.

✓ Yes, I do. I want to live in a tall building because it would be quiet, offer privacy, and provide a good view for watching the sunset every evening.

Use singular 'it' to refer to 'a tall building' and consistent verb forms. 'They' mismatches singular; 'have fresh air' is awkward—'it would be quiet' or 'there would be fresh air' is clearer. Use 'privacy' without article and 'provide a good view for watching' for natural expression.