Building— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Nên trả lời trực tiếp, rõ ràng và mạch lạc hơn. Tránh lặp từ và lỗi ngữ pháp (ví dụ: “in my neighborhood is the area located in the rural areas of Hanoi city” nên đơn giản thành “my neighborhood is a rural area of Hanoi”). Thêm một câu giải thích ngắn với chi tiết cụ thể để làm câu trả lời phong phú hơn. Hạn chế tiếng “uh” và câu quá dài; giữ tối đa 3–4 câu.

例: No, there are no tall buildings near my home. My neighborhood is a rural area of Hanoi, so most houses are low-rise and surrounded by trees. This makes it quiet and peaceful, and I rarely see any high-rise construction nearby.

提案: Cần dùng cấu trúc tự nhiên và từ vựng phù hợp (ví dụ: “I love taking photos” thay vì “I am the person who very loves the taking photo”). Trình bày ý chính rồi nêu lý do và một ví dụ cụ thể. Tránh tiếng “uh” và lỗi ngữ pháp như “choose to taking”. Giữ 2–3 câu ngắn gọn, sử dụng liên từ để nối ý.

例: Yes, I often take photos of buildings because I love architectural details. For example, I like photographing doorways and facades when I walk around the city because they show local history and style.

提案: Cần rõ ràng về tòa nhà cụ thể bạn muốn thăm và giải thích vì sao. Tránh từ sai nghĩa như “unfortunately” nếu không phù hợp, và sửa ngữ pháp (ví dụ: “almost the building I want to visit is located near the 100 cities” không rõ nghĩa). Nên nêu 1–2 ví dụ cụ thể (tên đền/chùa, ngôi nhà cổ), lý do (lịch sử, kiến trúc) và kết luận ngắn. Dùng từ vựng chính xác như “pagoda”, “ancient houses”, “historical significance”.

例: Yes, I would like to visit the ancient pagodas and traditional houses in other Vietnamese cities. These buildings have unique architecture and historical decorations, so visiting them would help me learn more about local culture and art.

提案: Câu trả lời thiếu rõ ràng và nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp/vốn từ. Trước hết, trả lời trực tiếp “Yes” hoặc “No”. Sau đó nêu 1–2 lý do rõ ràng với ví dụ (ví dụ: tiện lợi, an toàn, nguy cơ thiên tai). Tránh từ không đúng “living in trouble” hoặc “dis unnatural disaster”. Giữ tối đa 3 câu, dùng linking words như “however” hoặc “because”.

例: No, I would not prefer to live in a tall building. Although high-rises can be convenient and close to shops, I worry about safety during natural disasters and the difficulty of evacuating quickly. Therefore I prefer a low-rise house with easier access to the street.

× Uh, no, definitely. I think that in my neighborhood is the area located in the rural areas of Hanoi city and they don't have any tall buildings near my home.

✓ No, definitely not. I think my neighborhood is a rural area of Hanoi city, and there are no tall buildings near my home.

The original sentence has awkward word order and redundancy ('in my neighborhood is the area located in the rural areas') and wrong verb construction ('they don't have any tall buildings' with unclear subject). Reorder the sentence for a clear subject-verb structure and use 'there are no tall buildings' to state nonexistence. Use singular 'a rural area' and remove repetition. Grammar problem type id:26

× Yes I do because I am the person who very loves the taking photo and the building is one of the most, uh, popular and favorite object. I always uh, choose to taking my photo in my daily life.

✓ Yes, I do because I really love taking photos, and buildings are among my most popular and favorite subjects. I always choose to take photos of buildings in my daily life.

Errors: incorrect adverb phrase 'very loves' (should be 'really love'), wrong use of articles and nouns ('the taking photo'), and gerund/infinitive confusion ('choose to taking' should be 'choose to take'). Also use plural 'photos' and 'buildings' as subjects. Correct these to follow normal adjective/adverb and verb patterns. Grammar problem type id:13

× Yes, unfortunately almost the building I want to visit is located near the 100 cities like the uh, pagoda or some ancient homes, uh, which is the symbol of the historic and artist from the previous decades in.

✓ Yes. Unfortunately, most of the buildings I want to visit are located across many places, such as pagodas or ancient houses, which are symbols of history and art from previous decades.

Problems: 'almost the building' is incorrect — use 'most of the buildings' or 'many buildings'; 'near the 100 cities' is unclear and ungrammatical; 'homes' should be 'houses'; 'the symbol of the historic and artist' is wrong word choice and agreement. Revise to plural forms and clear expressions, and use 'symbols of history and art'. Grammar problem type id:26

× Yes, unfortunately almost the building I want to visit is located near the 100 cities like the uh, pagoda or some ancient homes, uh, which is the symbol of the historic and artist from the previous decades in.

✓ Yes. Unfortunately, most of the buildings I want to visit are located in many different cities, such as pagodas or ancient houses, which are symbols of history and art from previous decades.

Preposition issues: use 'located in many different cities' rather than 'near the 100 cities'. Also remove the trailing 'in' at the end. Use 'such as' for examples. This fixes preposition and collocation errors. Grammar problem type id:11

× Uh, in my opinion I think that living in trouble didn't have the drawback such as the convenience and the dangerous if have some dis unnatural disaster and some trouble in exes.

✓ In my opinion, living in a tall building has drawbacks, such as safety risks during natural disasters, even though it can be convenient.

Original sentence has tense and vocabulary errors: 'living in trouble didn't have the drawback' is incorrect; 'didn't have' is past tense and not appropriate. Use present tense 'has drawbacks'. 'the dangerous' should be 'safety risks' or 'danger', and 'dis unnatural disaster' should be 'natural disasters'. 'in exes' is unclear and removed. Reorganize sentence to contrast convenience and risk. Grammar problem type id:6

× Uh, in my opinion I think that living in trouble didn't have the drawback such as the convenience and the dangerous if have some dis unnatural disaster and some trouble in exes.

✓ In my opinion, living in a tall building has drawbacks, such as potential danger during natural disasters, despite its convenience.

Adjective/adverb misuse: 'the dangerous' is wrong — use 'danger' or 'dangerous situations'; 'dis unnatural' is incorrect word order and spelling. Use 'potential danger' and 'natural disasters'. Also use 'despite its convenience' to express contrast properly. Grammar problem type id:13