Building— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答は短くて不完全な文が多く、文法や語順の誤りが目立ちます。まずは直接的なトピック文で始め、続けて具体的な支持情報を1〜2文で加える練習をしてください。接続詞（for example, and, because）を使って文をつなぎ、可算・不可算名詞や複数形の使い方（land → lands は通常不可算、farmers の複数形）を正しく使いましょう。また、自然な表現（countryside, rural area, peaceful）や簡潔な語を選び、最大5文以内に収めてください。例文を声に出して繰り返し練習し、流暢さと正確さを高めてください。

例: No, there are no tall buildings near my home. I live in a rural area, and the town is very peaceful. Most of the land is used for farming, so you can see many fields and farmers working outdoors.

提案: 意味は伝わりにくく、文法ミスと不自然な代名詞（she）が使われています。まずは簡潔に「はい/いいえ」で答え、その理由や頻度を続けて説明しましょう。条件を述べるときは if 節を正しく使い、時制も整えてください（e.g. if I see tall buildings）。短い具体例を加えると効果的です。語彙はシンプルで正確なものを選びましょう。

例: Yes, I sometimes take photos of buildings when I travel. If I see an interesting tall building, I usually take a picture because I like the design and the view it offers.

提案: 情報はあるが語順や否定の二重表現（haven't never）が誤っています。まず明確な主文で場所を名指しし、なぜ行きたいかを一つか二つの理由で説明してください。接続詞（because, since, as）で理由をつなぎ、時制は現在完了や現在形を正しく使いましょう。例として、テレビで見たことやその建物の特徴を具体的に述べると良いです。

例: Yes, I would like to visit the Tokyo Skytree because I have never been to Tokyo. I often see it on TV and I am curious about the amazing views from the observation decks.

提案: 内容は伝わりますが文が混乱しており語彙の使い方（patriots は不適切）が誤りです。最初に明確な肯定/否定の立場を示し、その後で理由を2点程度述べるとよいでしょう。自然な語彙（advantages, disadvantages, security, earthquake）を使い、条件節（if an earthquake happens）を正しく表現してください。文は簡潔にまとめ、最大5文以内に収めてください。

例: I would rather not live in a very tall building. Although tall buildings offer beautiful views and good security, I worry about the risk during earthquakes, so I prefer lower-rise homes.

× No, I remains small, still in countryside.

✓ No, my hometown remains small; it is still in the countryside.

The sentence has multiple issues: 'I remains' treats the speaker as subject but intended subject is 'my hometown' (subject error and verb agreement). 'Countryside' needs a determiner 'the' when referring to the general rural area. Also sentence fragments are combined to form a full sentence. Suggestion: use the correct subject 'my hometown' and ensure number agreement and include 'the' before 'countryside'.

× My hometown is peaceful and very.

✓ My hometown is very peaceful.

The original places 'very' after the adjective, creating an incomplete phrase. 'Very' is an adverb modifying the adjective and must precede it: 'very peaceful'. Combine into one complete adjective phrase.

× They just.

✓ There are not many tall buildings.

'They just.' is a fragment lacking subject and verb and unclear meaning. Based on context, the speaker likely means 'There are just not many tall buildings.' Recast the fragment into a complete clause using 'there are' to state existence.

× In addition, there are many agricultural land, many farmer lives.

✓ In addition, there are many agricultural lands, and many farmers live there.

'Agricultural land' as countable requires plural 'lands' or better 'areas of agricultural land'; 'farmer' should be plural 'farmers' and needs a verb 'live'. Also add 'there' for location. Improve parallel structure and subject-verb agreement.

× Yes, I will take photos of buildings if I she tall buildings.

✓ Yes, I will take photos of buildings if I see tall buildings.

'She' is incorrect pronoun; the verb should be 'see' (base form) after 'if I'. The original likely mis-typed 'see' as 'she'. Use 'see' to indicate conditional action.

× My hometown hasn't tall buildings so.

✓ My hometown doesn't have tall buildings, so I don't.

'Hasn't tall buildings' is ungrammatical: use 'doesn't have tall buildings'. The trailing 'so' needs completion; original seems to trail off—'so I don't' completes the thought but better: 'so I don't take photos often.' Ensure auxiliary 'doesn't' for negative with 'have'.

× I'm not. She.

✓ I don't usually take photos (of buildings) here.

Fragments 'I'm not. She.' are unclear. Likely intent: 'I don't [take photos].' Replace with a full negative sentence. Avoid random pronoun 'she'.

× Yes, I'd like to visit Tokyo Sky Three I haven't never been to.

✓ Yes, I'd like to visit Tokyo Skytree; I have never been there.

Combine two clauses correctly and fix double negation 'haven't never'. Use present perfect 'have never been' and 'there' as a locative pronoun. Also correct the landmark name to 'Tokyo Skytree'.

× Tokyo, so I often, because I often watched it on TV, so I want to.

✓ I often see it on TV, so I want to visit it.

The original is fragmented and mixes tenses. Use simple present 'I often see' for habitual action. Remove redundant phrases and complete 'want to visit it.' Avoid past tense 'watched' when referring to habitual viewing.

× Where patriots but not completely tall buildings has many charms such as beautiful views and great security.

✓ Tall buildings have many charms, such as beautiful views and good security, but I'm not completely sure about living in them.

Original is garbled: 'Where patriots' is incorrect. Subject 'tall buildings' plural requires plural verb 'have'. Rephrase to express advantages and the speaker's uncertainty. Use 'good' or 'great' consistently for adjectives.

× But if the earthquakes happens, I'm afraid.

✓ But if an earthquake happens, I'm afraid.

Use singular 'earthquake' with article 'an' when speaking hypothetically. Also subject-verb agreement: 'happens' is fine with 'an earthquake'; the original used plural 'earthquakes' incorrectly. Keep sentence concise.