Building— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and organise your answer: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific details. Avoid repetition and incorrect phrasing (e.g., “very beautiful and very tall and some beautiful lightings”). Use linking words like “for example” or “such as”.

例: Yes, there are several tall buildings near my home. For example, there are office towers that house large companies, and many of them have decorative lighting that looks impressive at night.

提案: Start with a direct response, then give specific supporting details and correct grammar (e.g., “I like to take photos” not “I like to clicks”). Use linking words such as “because” or “so” appropriately, and avoid vague phrases. Keep it within 2–3 sentences.

例: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of buildings. I often photograph the skyline at night because the lights create interesting contrasts and reflections that look great in photos.

提案: Give a clear, specific answer: name the type of building and a concise reason. Use correct verb forms and linking phrases such as “because” or “so that”. Avoid repeating words like “big” and refine your reason to be precise.

例: Yes. I would like to visit the headquarters of one of the largest companies in my country because I am interested in how they are organised and I hope to learn business practices for my future career.

提案: Answer directly and give two clear reasons with correct grammar. Use linking words such as “because” and “for example” and avoid unclear phrases (“I want to get morning”). Be specific about what you would enjoy living there.

例: Yes, I would like to live in a tall building because the views are wonderful. For example, I could see the city skyline and watch birds in the mornings, which would be peaceful and inspiring.

× Yes Sir, in my city near my home there are some tall buildings like big companies and there are very beautiful and very tall and some beautiful lightings that make city beautiful at night.

✓ Yes sir, in my city near my home there are some tall buildings, such as office buildings, and there are very beautiful, tall structures and decorative lights that make the city beautiful at night.

The sentence uses awkward pronouns and nouns ('big companies' to mean buildings) and has poor coordination. Replace 'big companies' with 'office buildings' or 'commercial buildings' to match meaning. Use 'decorative lights' instead of 'beautiful lightings' because 'lighting' is uncountable and 'lightings' is incorrect. Improve parallel structure and punctuation to make the sentence clear.

× Yes of course I am very fond of photography and I like to clicks their beautiful photos at night because at night there are a very skyline of tall buildings and I wanted to be take with my cameras.

✓ Yes, of course. I am very fond of photography and I like to click their beautiful photos at night because there is a very impressive skyline of tall buildings at night, and I want to take pictures with my cameras.

Errors: 'clicks' should be base verb 'click' after 'like' (verb + base form), 'there are a very skyline' is incorrect count and agreement — use 'there is a very impressive skyline' (singular), and 'I wanted to be take' mixes past and passive incorrectly — use present 'I want to take pictures'. Use 'pictures' not 'photos' duplication of 'their' unclear; keep 'their' only if referring to buildings.

× Is there a building that you would like to visit?

✓ Is there a building that you would like to visit?

This question sentence is correct. No change needed. It matches the singular 'a building' with 'is there' appropriately.

× Yes, in my hometown there are several buildings, but I have wanted to like visit a big companies, like very big company of our country and because I wanted to be a businessman in the future.

✓ Yes, in my hometown there are several buildings, but I would like to visit a large company headquarters, a very big company in our country, because I want to be a businessman in the future.

Problems: 'I have wanted to like visit' is ungrammatical—use 'I would like to visit' or 'I want to visit'. 'a big companies' mixes singular article with plural noun—use 'a large company' or 'big companies'. Use consistent tense 'I want' rather than 'I wanted' to express future ambition. Clarify 'big company of our country' to 'a very big company in our country'.

× Yes, of course I want it to be live in a tall buildings because I like to watch. There are some best of scenes like tall, like there are some birds around me and I want to like to get morning.

✓ Yes, of course I want to live in a tall building because I like the view. There are wonderful scenes, such as tall buildings and birds flying nearby, and I want to enjoy the mornings there.

Errors: 'I want it to be live in a tall buildings' is ungrammatical—use 'I want to live in a tall building' (remove extra pronoun and correct plural). 'I like to watch' is vague—use 'I like the view'. 'There are some best of scenes' is incorrect—use 'There are wonderful scenes' or 'beautiful views'. 'I want to like to get morning' is unclear—use 'I want to enjoy the mornings there'. Improve word choice and word order for clarity.