Building— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and correct minor grammar and word choice errors; start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid redundancy (e.g., "in my area" and "close to the city centre" convey similar ideas).

例: Yes — there are several tall buildings near my home because I live close to the city centre. For example, many are office towers and apartment blocks that I pass on my way to school, which makes the neighbourhood feel modern; however, during rush hour the streets can feel overcrowded.

提案: Correct phrasing and word choice, and give a concrete example. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid awkward expressions like "stand down from the surroundings" and "the great way."

例: Yes, occasionally I photograph buildings with unique architecture or historical importance. For instance, I recently took pictures of an old theatre that reflects the city’s cultural history, and I do this because photography helps me preserve memories and appreciate architectural details.

提案: Good clear response — make it more specific by naming a particular building and adding one or two concrete reasons or expectations using linking words. Keep it concise and natural.

例: Yes, I would love to visit the Taj Mahal because I want to learn about its history and see its intricate architecture up close. I think visiting would be both educational and enjoyable, as I could study the design details and learn about the people who built it.

提案: Finish your last sentence and avoid small errors; combine ideas smoothly with linking words. Be specific about which aspects of tall-building life you like and which you dislike, and give one brief example to illustrate privacy concerns.

例: Yes, I would like to live in a tall building because it offers great views and easy access to public transport and shops. However, I would prefer a higher floor with good soundproofing, since I value privacy and want to avoid street noise.

× Yes, occasionally I enjoy taking photos of buildings that have unique architectural design and historical significance.

✓ Yes, occasionally I enjoy taking photos of buildings that have unique architectural designs and historical significance.

The noun 'design' should be plural to match 'buildings' and refer to various architectural designs; this is an incorrect use of a singular noun where a plural is expected. Use the plural 'designs' when speaking about multiple buildings having different designs.

× In particular, I'm attracted to buildings that stand down from the surroundings or reflect the culture of the city.

✓ In particular, I'm attracted to buildings that stand out from the surroundings or reflect the culture of the city.

The phrase 'stand down from' is incorrect; the correct phrasal verb is 'stand out from' meaning to be noticeable. This is an incorrect use of a preposition/particle. Replace 'down' with 'out' to convey the intended meaning.

× For me, photography is the great way to preserve memories and appreciate an impressive piece of architecture.

✓ For me, photography is a great way to preserve memories and appreciate an impressive piece of architecture.

Using the definite article 'the' before 'great way' is incorrect here; 'a great way' is the appropriate indefinite article when introducing one of many possible methods. This is an article error.

× Most high rise apartments are allocated in convenient areas with easy access to public transport and other amenities.

✓ Most high-rise apartments are located in convenient areas with easy access to public transport and other amenities.

Two issues: 'high rise' should be hyphenated as 'high-rise' when used as a compound adjective before a noun, and 'allocated in' is awkward/incorrect in this context; use 'located in' or 'located' to indicate position. This addresses a singular/plural/word-usage mismatch and provides a clearer verb choice.

× That said, I would still want a quiet environment because I value my privacy and.

✓ That said, I would still want a quiet environment because I value my privacy.

The sentence ends with an extraneous coordinating conjunction 'and' with no following clause, creating an incomplete sentence. Remove 'and' to complete the thought. This is a sentence structure error (incomplete clause).