Building— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve by making the response more concise and using clearer linking words; correct small grammar issues and avoid redundancy. Start with a direct topic sentence, then add one or two specific details (e.g., number or notable building) and finish with a short opinion using a linking phrase like "because" or "so".

例: Yes. I live near the city centre, so there are several tall buildings nearby, mainly office towers and apartment blocks. For example, a 20-storey office building stands beside the main park, which makes the area feel more modern and vibrant because it attracts shops and restaurants.

提案: Fix grammar and repetition, and make supporting details specific. Use linking words (e.g., "for example", "because") and avoid duplicate words. Limit to 3–4 clear sentences: topic sentence, one or two specific reasons or examples, and a brief concluding statement.

例: Yes, I sometimes photograph buildings with unique architecture or historical importance. For example, I like taking pictures of the old town hall because its carved stone façade reflects the city's heritage. Photography helps me preserve memories and study architectural details.

提案: Remove hesitations and repetitions, and correct grammar (singular/plural). Give one clear example of a specific building and a reason, using linking words like "because" or "so". Keep it to 2–3 sentences to sound natural and confident.

例: Yes, I would love to visit a historic site such as an ancient temple or a medieval castle. For instance, visiting Angkor Wat would allow me to learn about the temple's history and admire its intricate stone carvings, which would be both educational and enjoyable.

提案: Finish sentences fully and correct small errors (e.g., article use, plural forms). Make one clear topic sentence, then add two concise, specific reasons with linking words like "because" and end with a brief contrast if needed. Avoid trailing off.

例: Yes, I would like to live in a tall building because it offers great views and modern facilities. For example, many high-rise apartments are near good public transport and shops, but I would choose a quieter floor or a well-insulated unit because I value privacy and peace.

× Yes, occasionally I enjoy taking photos the buildings that have unique architectural or historical significance.

✓ Yes, occasionally I enjoy taking photos of buildings that have unique architectural or historical significance.

Missing preposition 'of' before the object of 'taking photos' creates an ungrammatical phrase. Use 'taking photos of [something]' to indicate what is being photographed. Suggestion: remember the pattern 'take photos of + noun'.

× In particular, I'm attracted to to buildings that stand out from the surroundings and all reflect the cultural of the city.

✓ In particular, I'm attracted to buildings that stand out from their surroundings and reflect the culture of the city.

Errors: double 'to' (typo), incorrect use of 'all' and wrong noun phrase 'the cultural of the city'. Correct: remove duplicate 'to', replace 'all reflect' with 'reflect' to match plural subject, use 'their surroundings' for clarity, and use noun 'culture' instead of adjective 'cultural' with 'of the city'. Suggestion: proofread for repeated words, ensure verb agrees with subject, and use correct noun forms.

× For me, photography is the great way to preserve memories.

✓ For me, photography is a great way to preserve memories.

Using the definite article 'the' implies a unique way; 'a' is more natural here to indicate one way among others. Use 'a great way' for general statements. Suggestion: use 'a' when referring to one of many possible examples.

× Yes there is. I'd really like to visit a famous historic buildings such as a castle or an ancient an ancient temple.

✓ Yes, there is. I'd really like to visit famous historic buildings such as a castle or an ancient temple.

Errors: 'a famous historic buildings' mixes singular article 'a' with plural 'buildings'—article must agree with number; duplicated phrase 'an ancient an ancient' is a repetition. Correct by removing the article before plural 'buildings' or change to singular. Suggestion: ensure articles match noun number and avoid accidental repetition.

× Umm. I'm interested in learning about its history and admiring its architectural design.

✓ Umm. I'm interested in learning about their history and admiring their architectural design.

Refers to 'buildings' (plural) earlier, so pronoun should be plural 'their' not singular 'its'. Maintain pronoun-antecedent agreement. Suggestion: check antecedent number before choosing pronoun.

× Living in a tall building would allow me to enjoy stunning view and a more modern lifestyle.

✓ Living in a tall building would allow me to enjoy a stunning view and a more modern lifestyle.

Count noun 'view' requires an article for singular form: 'a stunning view'. Without it the phrase is ungrammatical. Suggestion: use 'a' with singular countable nouns.

× Most high rise apartments are located in convenience areas with easy access to public transport and other amenities.

✓ Most high-rise apartments are located in convenient areas with easy access to public transport and other amenities.

Compound adjective should be 'high-rise' with a hyphen, and 'convenience areas' is incorrect; use adjective 'convenient areas'. Suggestion: use correct adjective forms and hyphenate compound adjectives when used before a noun.

× That said, I would still want a quiet environment because I value my privacy and.

✓ That said, I would still want a quiet environment because I value my privacy.

Sentence ends with stray conjunction 'and' with no following phrase, creating an incomplete sentence. Remove 'and' or add the omitted phrase. Suggestion: avoid leaving coordinating conjunctions at the end; ensure clauses are complete.