Building— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Speak more clearly and answer directly. Start with a clear topic sentence (Yes/No), then add one or two concise supporting details. Use correct vocabulary (e.g., "tall buildings" not "toll building") and avoid filler words and repetition. Keep to 2–3 sentences and check grammar for subject-verb agreement and singular/plural forms.

例: No, there aren't many tall buildings near my home. Most houses are two or three stories high, so the area feels low-rise and quiet.

提案: Be concise and organized: give a direct yes/no, then a reason and a brief example. Use accurate phrases like "photos of buildings" and avoid vague expressions. Use linking words (for example, because, so) to connect ideas and provide one specific example of a building or architectural feature you like.

例: Yes, I do take photos of buildings because I'm interested in architecture and culture. For example, I often photograph tall skyscrapers to capture their unique designs and the way they reflect light at sunset.

提案: Name the building clearly and give two specific reasons why you want to visit. Use correct article usage and verb forms, and avoid unsure fillers like "I guess" unless necessary. Provide a short prediction or personal plan to show engagement.

例: I would like to visit the Eiffel Tower in Paris because it is an iconic structure with stunning views of the city. I plan to go up to the viewing platforms to take photos and enjoy the nearby cafés and gardens.

提案: Answer directly and give a balanced opinion with one or two specific reasons. Use clear vocabulary for living in a tall building (e.g., "apartment in a high-rise"). Avoid vague phrases and rhetorical questions; instead explain what you like or dislike about tall buildings.

例: Yes, I would like to live in a high-rise apartment because the higher floors offer great views of the city and more natural light. However, I would also consider noise and elevator wait times before deciding.

× I think actually there's there's no toll building near my home.

✓ I think actually there are no tall buildings near my home.

The original sentence has structural and word choice errors: repeated 'there's' and 'toll' instead of 'tall.' Use 'there are' for plural 'buildings' (subject-verb agreement) and correct the spelling 'tall.' Also remove the duplicate 'there's.' Suggestion: Use 'there are' with plural nouns and proofread for repeated words and typos.

× When I cut the floors on each clothing it's mostly fine or foreign laws maximum of it.

✓ When I walk on each floor, it is mostly fine and the foreign buildings are not too tall.

This sentence is unclear and contains incorrect word choices: 'cut the floors' and 'clothing' are wrong. Replaced with 'walk on each floor.' Recast to convey likely meaning about building heights. Suggestion: Keep actions and nouns consistent and use clear vocabulary; if unsure, rephrase simply.

× So I think they are absolutely a little knot tall.

✓ So I think they are absolutely not tall.

'A little knot tall' is incorrect phrase and misspells 'not'; use 'not tall' to negate. Also 'absolutely not tall' is natural. Suggestion: Avoid odd modifiers and check spelling.

× Yes, I usually take both of buildings.

✓ Yes, I usually take photos of buildings.

'Take both of buildings' is ungrammatical. Use 'take photos of buildings' to express photographing buildings. Suggestion: Use 'take photos of' or 'photograph' followed by the object.

× I don't take photos everyone around me such as buildings.

✓ I don't take photos of everyone around me, but I do photograph buildings.

Original misuses 'take photos everyone' and confuses scope. Add preposition 'of' and split into two clauses for clarity. Suggestion: Use 'take photos of someone/something.'

× I think I like to take photos a building that is really tall because I want to know about architecture and culture and each building bring me a lot of kind of different one culture and and the.

✓ I like to take photos of buildings that are really tall because I want to learn about architecture and culture; each building shows me different aspects of culture.

Multiple errors: missing 'of' after 'photos,' incorrect verb forms ('bring' should be 'shows'), awkward phrasing 'a lot of kind of different one culture.' Rewrote to be grammatical and clear. Suggestion: Use 'learn about' for acquiring knowledge and ensure subject-verb agreement.

× I want to visit called a really tall building in Paris.

✓ I want to visit a really tall building in Paris called the Eiffel Tower.

Original word order is incorrect: place the name after 'called' or use 'called the ...' Also provide the proper name. Suggestion: Use 'a building called X' or 'the X building.'

× It's called FM.

✓ It's called the Eiffel Tower.

'FM' is incorrect or unclear; likely referring to 'Eiffel Tower.' Also include the definite article 'the' for famous structures. Suggestion: Use the correct name and include 'the' for unique landmarks.

× I think it's really tall and it's have attract a lot of tourists.

✓ I think it's really tall and it has attracted a lot of tourists.

Use correct auxiliary and past participle: 'has attracted' (present perfect) to indicate an action affecting the present. 'It's have attract' is ungrammatical. Suggestion: For effects up to now, use present perfect: 'has attracted.'

× Uh, in a year just like more than 5 millions, I guess.

✓ I guess more than 5 million people visit it each year.

Number and noun agreement: use '5 million people' not '5 millions.' Also clarify 'in a year' to 'each year' and place the verb correctly. Suggestion: Use 'million' without plural 's' and include the noun 'people'.

× So yeah, I want to go there. That's only about capture the movement, but also faded around and eating food.

✓ So yeah, I want to go there. It's not only about taking photos, but also about walking around and eating local food.

Original contains wrong words: 'capture the movement' and 'faded around.' Replace with 'taking photos' and 'walking around.' Add 'local' for clarity. Suggestion: Use gerunds 'taking' and 'walking' with 'about' to describe activities.

× Is absolutely when you live in a Toby, you can see a lot of views from a tall places, uh, form from the roads, from the road that is below your, you know, what are you standing? Where are you standing?

✓ Absolutely. When you live in a tall building, you can see many views from high up, including the roads below where you are standing.

Sentence begins with 'Is absolutely' incorrectly; 'Toby' is wrong word; 'a tall places' and 'form from the roads' are ungrammatical. Rewrote to convey intended meaning: living in a tall building gives views of roads below. Suggestion: Use clear subject-verb structure and correct nouns ('building') and plurality.

× So yeah, you can capture your views by using your photography.

✓ So yeah, you can capture those views by taking photographs.

'Capture your views by using your photography' is awkward. Use 'take photographs' or 'use photography' with correct object 'those views.' Suggestion: Prefer 'take photos' or 'use photography to capture views.'