Building— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific details. Avoid fillers (uh) and use plural/singular correctly (buildings, condominiums). Use linking words like “for example” or “such as” to organize details.

例: Yes. I live in the city, so there are many tall buildings near my home. For example, there are several shopping malls and residential condominiums within a short walk.

提案: Use correct verb forms and make the answer natural and concise. Begin with a direct reply, then give a reason and one specific example. Replace awkward phrases like “for remembrance” with “to remember” or “as a souvenir.”

例: Yes, I do. I especially photograph tall buildings to remember the places I visit. For instance, I often take pictures of impressive skyscrapers when I travel abroad.

提案: Give a clear reason and avoid repetition and fillers. Correct grammar (e.g., “some because some of my friends were been there” should be “because some of my friends have been there”). Add one specific detail about why you want to visit (e.g., view, history, photos).

例: Yes, I would like to visit the Eiffel Tower in France because some of my friends have been there and told me about the amazing view. I also want to see the tower's architecture and take photos from the top.

提案: Correct sentence structure and vocabulary (live, not leave). Start with a clear statement, then give one specific reason and a linking word. Avoid run-on phrasing and add a brief detail about practical aspects if possible.

例: Yes, I would like to live in a tall building because I enjoy the views from high floors. Also, living in a high-rise often means convenient facilities like shops or a gym nearby.

× That's why there's a lot of tall building near our home.

✓ That's why there are a lot of tall buildings near our home.

Subject 'a lot of tall building' is plural in meaning so the verb 'there is' should be plural 'there are' and 'building' should be plural 'buildings'. Use subject-verb agreement with 'there be' and plural noun form.

× Some of these are malls also there's, uh, condominium.

✓ Some of these are malls; there are also condominiums.

The original runs sentences together and mixes singular/plural. Use a semicolon or period to separate clauses and make noun plural 'condominiums'. Also place 'also' before the verb for natural word order.

× Yes I do taking photos most especially for those tall buildings and I take photo for remembrance most especially when I'm at vacation.

✓ Yes, I do take photos, especially of tall buildings, and I take photos as a remembrance, especially when I'm on vacation.

After 'do' use the base verb 'take' not the -ing form. Use plural 'photos' for general actions. Use preposition 'of' with 'photos of buildings' and 'on vacation' not 'at vacation'. Use 'as a remembrance' or 'to remember'.

× some of my friends were been there before, that's why uh, I want to also visit that, uh, building.

✓ Some of my friends have been there before; that's why I also want to visit that building.

Use present perfect 'have been' to indicate past experience continuing to present, not 'were been' which is incorrect. Also move 'also' to a natural position and remove filler words.

× Yes, I want to leave and I tall building because when I'm at the top I want to look at the view.

✓ Yes, I want to live in a tall building because when I'm at the top I want to look at the view.

The speaker likely meant 'live' not 'leave'. Also the phrase 'I tall building' is ungrammatical; use 'in a tall building'. Preposition 'in' is required to indicate residence. The sentence corrected preserves intent and tense.