Building— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific supporting detail. Avoid redundancy like “to be honest” and repetition of place names.

例: No, there aren’t any tall buildings near my home. I live in a small village about 10 kilometres from Patiala, so the area mainly has low houses and farms rather than high-rises.

提案: Improve fluency and vocabulary choice and avoid repetition. Give one clear reason and a brief example. Use linking words like “because” or “for example.”

例: Yes, I do. When I travel with family or friends I often photograph buildings because I admire interesting architecture; for example, I photographed a colonial-era courthouse last month because of its ornate columns.

提案: Clarify and correct vocabulary and details. Give one clear reason why you want to visit and avoid unclear phrases. Keep it to two or three sentences max and use linking words like “because.”

例: Yes, I’d like to visit a nearby resort in Patiala called The Rice Box. It’s a tall building with a popular restaurant and café, and I want to see its modern design and try the food there.

提案: Make your answer more natural and reduce repetition. State your preference clearly, give one reason and a brief personal example. Correct grammar (e.g., “two-storey brick house”).

例: No, I wouldn’t. I feel uncomfortable living in high-rise flats and prefer a two-storey brick house because it feels more private and familiar; for example, my own home is a two-storey brick house where I feel very comfortable.