Building— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make the response more natural and grammatical, start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, and add a brief specific detail using a linking word. Correct article and plural errors and reduce hesitations. For example, say whether there are tall buildings nearby, then contrast with the city centre using a linking word like "however" or "but".

例: I live on the outskirts of Bangkok, so there aren’t any tall buildings near my house. However, in the city centre there are many skyscrapers, such as the high office towers around Siam Square.

提案: Provide a concise topic sentence, avoid filler words, and finish the reason or example. Use linking words like "for example" and give a specific reason why you took photos (architecture, design, memories). Keep under five sentences.

例: Yes, I often photograph buildings. For example, two months ago I visited Taipei 101 in Taiwan and took many photos because I admired its modern design and unique structure.

提案: Start with a clear answer saying whether you would like to visit it, correct facts and grammar, and explain specifically why it interests you. Avoid unclear or incorrect statements; if unsure about facts, state your impression instead. Use a linking word to expand (e.g., "because" or "since").

例: Yes, I would like to visit Baiyoke Tower in Bangkok. Although it was once criticised for its appearance, it is now a famous landmark because it offers an observation deck with panoramic city views.

提案: Give a clear topic sentence and a specific reason, correct tense and article use, and reduce hesitations. Mention what changed your mind and possibly an alternative preference. Use linking words such as "but" and "because" to connect ideas.

例: I used to want to live in a tall building, but after experiencing an earthquake in Thailand I changed my mind because I became afraid of the building collapsing. Now I prefer a low-rise house that feels safer.