Building— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 主題文は明確ですが、文法と語順の小さな誤りがあり、語彙の選択も改善できます。例えば “panorama views” は不自然で “panoramic views” と言う方が自然です。また “beautifully illuminated at night” は形容詞と副詞の位置に注意して簡潔にまとめられます。5文以内に収め、接続詞（e.g. and, because, especially）を適切に使って論理をつなぎ、具体的なディテール（どの方向の景色か、何階からの眺めか）を一つ追加するとさらに良くなります。

例: Yes, there are several tall buildings near my house, such as the station tower and a modern office block. I like them because they offer panoramic views of the city, especially from the upper floors. Also, they are beautifully lit at night during festivals, which makes the skyline very attractive.

提案: 答えが矛盾していて不明瞭です（最初に “Yes” と言いながら否定している）。まず肯定か否定かをはっきりさせ、理由を簡潔に述べてください。文法的には過去形と現在形の混同（"didn't take"）や不完全な文（"It's very vivid colour and."）を直す必要があります。接続詞（because, so, therefore）を使って理由を明確にし、具体例（好きな自然の被写体や色の描写）を一つ挙げると良いでしょう。

例: No, I don't usually take photos of buildings because I find nature more interesting. For example, I prefer photographing colourful flowers and sunsets, which have vivid colours and changing light.

提案: 答えは直接的で分かりやすいですが、表現を自然にする余地があります。“the station of Tokyo”は “Tokyo Station” と固有名詞化し、理由をもう少し具体的に述べると説得力が増します（歴史的意義、建築様式、周辺の名所など）。また、文を繋ぐときは接続語（because, so, and）を適切に使い、文のバラエティ（短文と複文）を混ぜると流暢に聞こえます。

例: I would like to visit Tokyo Station because it is an iconic cultural landmark with historic architecture. I want to see the building’s design up close, ride the train there, and take photos of the station and nearby streets.

提案: 主張は明確ですが文法と語彙の誤りが目立ちます（"tall buildings" の単複や冠詞、"higher flowers" は誤用で恐らく “higher floors” の誤り）。最後の文も未完です。まず名詞の単複と冠詞を正し、語彙ミス（floors, quieter）を直してください。理由は具体的に（眺望、騒音、空気の流れなど）述べ、接続詞で整え、全体を3文以内に収めると良いでしょう。

例: Yes, I would like to live in a tall building because it offers fantastic views of the city, especially at night during festivals. Higher floors are usually quieter and get a nice breeze, which I find relaxing.

× I like them because they offer panorama views of the city and beautifully illuminated at night, especially during festivals.

✓ I like them because they offer panoramic views of the city and are beautifully illuminated at night, especially during festivals.

Use 'panoramic' (adjective) instead of 'panorama' (noun). Also adverb 'beautifully' cannot modify the subject directly; include the appropriate verb 'are' to form a correct passive description.

× Yes, I didn't take some pictures over buildings because it's not fascinating to me and I prefer to take pictures of the nature rather than buildings.

✓ Yes, I didn't take many pictures of buildings because they are not fascinating to me and I prefer to take pictures of nature rather than buildings.

Use 'many' instead of 'some' after 'didn't take' for negative quantity, and 'of buildings' is correct preposition. 'It's not fascinating' should agree with plural 'buildings' so use 'they are not fascinating'. 'The nature' is unneeded article; use 'nature'.

× It's very vivid colour and.

✓ The colours are very vivid.

Original is an incomplete sentence and mismatches noun and adjective order. Use plural 'colours' with verb 'are' and place adjective 'vivid' after linking verb. Remove trailing conjunction.

× I would like to visit the station of Tokyo in Japan.

✓ I would like to visit Tokyo Station in Japan.

Use the standard English name 'Tokyo Station' rather than 'the station of Tokyo'. This fixes awkward word order and article use.

× It's a cultural building and everyone knows about it.

✓ It's a cultural landmark and everyone knows about it.

'Cultural building' is grammatically possible but 'landmark' is a more natural collocation here. No article change needed; this suggestion improves idiomatic usage.

× So I want to visit the station and use the train and take a picture.

✓ So I want to visit the station, ride the train, and take a picture.

Use 'ride the train' instead of 'use the train' for natural English. Use parallel verb forms and include commas for clarity.

× Yes, I would like to live in a tall buildings because it offers fantastic views of the city and the streets look beautiful when they are illuminated during festivals or special events.

✓ Yes, I would like to live in a tall building because it offers fantastic views of the city and the streets look beautiful when they are illuminated during festivals or special events.

Use singular 'building' after 'a tall' not plural. Keep verb 'offers' agreeing with singular subject 'building'.

× Also, higher flowers are usually quieter and get to a nice breeze which are.

✓ Also, higher floors are usually quieter and get a nice breeze.

'Higher flowers' is a spelling/word error; should be 'higher floors'. 'Get to a nice breeze which are' is ungrammatical; use 'get a nice breeze'. Remove the redundant relative clause.