Building— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is clear and directly addresses the question with a reason, which is good. To improve, make the language more natural and concise, avoid fillers (“uh”), and add one brief specific detail or example about what “architecture with character” means. Also keep the response to under five sentences.

例: Yes, there are many high‑rise buildings near my home, and they bother me because I prefer older buildings with distinctive features. For example, I like places with ornate facades and wooden balconies, which feel more charming than glass towers.

提案: Good content and clear reason (you are a photographer). Improve grammar and coherence: avoid repetition, fix tense/order, and use linking words to make it concise. Add one specific example of what you photograph and why to make the answer more vivid.

例: Yes, I often photograph buildings because I'm a photographer and I want to capture their form and atmosphere. For instance, I like shooting old churches at sunset to record their textures and the warm light.

提案: The transcript lacks the student’s actual answer to this question. You should directly name a building you want to visit and give a brief reason or specific detail. Keep it one topic sentence plus one supporting detail, and avoid meta-comments about the test.

例: I would like to visit the Sagrada Família in Barcelona because I'm fascinated by its unusual architecture and the way light filters through its stained glass. I want to study its sculptural facades and photograph the interior columns.

提案: You answer directly and give reasons, which is good. To improve, remove fillers, correct small grammar issues, and add one concrete detail about what you prefer in a private house (garden, views, layout). Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: No, I wouldn't. I find living in a tall building unsettling because of the haze and limited outdoor space, so I prefer a private house with a small garden and large windows that let in fresh air.

× Yes, there are a lot of high rise buildings near my home, and actually they often bother me because I prefer architecture with character.

✓ Yes, there are a lot of high-rise buildings near my home, and actually they often bother me because I prefer architecture with character.

The sentence needs a hyphen in the compound adjective 'high-rise' when it precedes a noun. This is an article/word-formation style issue related to 'Article errors' category 22 and also clarity; using the hyphen makes the compound modifier correct and clear. Suggestion: use 'high-rise' before the noun and keep plural 'buildings' to match 'there are.'

× So I'd like to live somewhere with that kind of, uh, story.

✓ So I'd like to live somewhere with that kind of history.

The phrase 'story' is semantically odd here; 'history' is the noun that correctly conveys a building having a past. This is a vocabulary/substitution correction; treat as 'verb/past participle' category 9 because the intended noun relates to past events. Suggestion: use 'history' to express a place with historical character.

× Yes, I take photos of buildings a lot because I'm a photographer and I love seeing this place after living it.

✓ Yes, I take photos of buildings a lot because I'm a photographer and I love seeing a place again after living in it.

The original has incorrect article usage and incorrect verb phrase 'after living it.' You need an indefinite or demonstrative article 'a place' or 'this place' and the correct verb construction 'living in it.' This fits article errors (22) and verb/present participle issues (10). Suggestion: use 'a place' and 'living in it' to indicate residing in that location.

× So that's very important for me to just remember this moment and remember how magnificent was this building.

✓ So it's very important for me to remember this moment and remember how magnificent this building was.

Word order in the clause 'how magnificent was this building' is incorrect for a statement; the auxiliary inversion is for questions. Use 'how magnificent this building was.' Also 'that's' to 'it's' is stylistic; both acceptable but 'it's' flows better. This is a past tense and sentence structure issue (5 and 26). Suggestion: place the verb after the subject in reported/explanatory clauses: 'how magnificent this building was.'

× Actually, I find a living in a tall building really terrifying for me because I'm scared of haze and I'd like to live in a more, umm, grounded, uh, house.

✓ Actually, I find living in a tall building really terrifying because I'm scared of haze and I'd like to live in a more grounded house.

Remove the article 'a' before 'living' (gerund) and avoid redundant 'for me' after 'terrifying.' These are pronoun/structure issues (12 and 26). Suggestion: use the gerund 'living' without 'a' and omit redundant pronouns to make the sentence natural.

× That would be my private house, not like a flat.

✓ That would be my private house, not a flat.

The phrase 'not like a flat' is informal and redundant; use the precise contrast 'not a flat.' This is an article/word-choice issue (22). Suggestion: use 'not a flat' for clarity and correctness.