Building— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid contradictory connectors ("but however"), and give one or two specific supporting details. Use correct grammar (e.g., "stories" not "story") and avoid vague phrases like "the traditional things."

例: Yes. There are two relatively tall buildings near my home, but they are only about five or six stories high, not skyscrapers. One is an apartment block and the other is a small hotel, so they don’t dominate the skyline.

提案: Answer directly and use correct grammar. Begin with a clear statement about your habit, then list specific types with linking words. Correct modal and verb forms ("I'm allowed" or "I like taking").

例: Yes, I often take photos of buildings. I especially enjoy photographing traditional architecture and modern landmarks such as skyscrapers and television towers, although I always ask for permission before photographing government buildings.

提案: Stay on topic and be coherent. Start with a direct answer naming the building, then give clear reasons. Avoid irrelevant comments ("I love the weather") unless connected, and choose accurate descriptions ("it is the tallest building"). Use simpler, correct vocabulary instead of unclear phrases like "the room thoroughly actuates."

例: Yes, I would like to visit the Burj Khalifa in Dubai because it is the tallest building in the world and its design is very impressive. I’d love to see the observation deck for panoramic views and experience the building’s modern architecture up close.

提案: Make a clear, direct response and give reasons. Fix grammar and vocabulary ("I'd love to live in a tall building because I would feel like a king"), and contrast with living in a low-rise building if relevant. Keep it to two or three sentences with linking words to explain feelings and practical reasons.

例: Yes, I would like to live in a tall building because living high up feels majestic and offers great views. However, I also value convenience, so I would prefer a high-rise with an elevator and nearby amenities.

× Yes, there are two buildings near my home but however they are not considered as skyscrapers or high rise buildings and the traditional things.

✓ Yes, there are two buildings near my home, but they are not considered skyscrapers or high-rise buildings or traditional structures.

Issues: unnecessary article 'the' before 'traditional things', awkward phrase 'high rise' needs hyphen and 'things' is vague. Also redundant 'but however'. Suggestion: remove 'however', use 'not considered' + noun phrases without 'as', use 'high-rise' and 'traditional structures' for clarity.

× The tallest building near my home is around 5 to 6 story high.

✓ The tallest building near my home is around five or six stories high.

Number agreement and plural form: '5 to 6 story' is incorrect; when giving a range use plural 'stories' and write 'five or six' or 'five to six'. Also place 'high' after the plural correctly.

× They're mainly apartment buildings and hotels.

✓ They are mainly apartment buildings and hotels.

Contraction is acceptable in speech, but for clarity in writing expand 'They're' to 'They are'. No grammatical plural error here; this suggestion mainly clarifies style.

× They allowed to take photo of all different type of buildings.

✓ You are allowed to take photos of all different types of buildings.

Missing auxiliary/modal: 'allowed' needs passive with 'be' (are allowed) and subject should reflect general permission ('you' or 'people'). Also pluralize 'photo' to 'photos' and 'type' to 'types'.

× I like take photo of traditional architecture, skyscrapers, television towers and government building if I have the permission to do so.

✓ I like to take photos of traditional architecture, skyscrapers, television towers, and government buildings if I have permission to do so.

Missing 'to' after 'like' (infinitive), pluralize 'photo' and 'government building', remove 'the' before 'permission'. Also add commas for list clarity.

× Yeah, I love the weather, the Burj Khalifa and Dubai because it is set to be the tallest building in the world.

✓ Yes, I would like to visit the Burj Khalifa in Dubai because it is the tallest building in the world.

Original mixes unrelated items ('weather, the Burj Khalifa and Dubai') and incorrectly uses 'set to be' (it already is). Rephrase to match question about a building to visit and correct subject-verb reference.

× And furthermore, the room thoroughly actuates and the building design is really stylish.

✓ Furthermore, the rooms are well maintained and the building's design is very stylish.

'Thoroughly actuates' is incorrect and unclear; probably intended 'well maintained' or 'well appointed'. Use plural 'rooms' if referring generally, and use possessive 'building's design'. 'Very' is more natural than 'really' in formal correction.

× The lab to leave that whole building because I'll be feeling like a king if I live in the tall building.

✓ I would love to live in that whole building because I would feel like a king if I lived in a tall building.

Original garbled: 'The lab to leave' nonsensical. Use 'I would love to live' to express desire and conditional 'would feel' with past subjunctive 'lived' to match hypothetical. Clarify 'that whole building' vs 'a tall building' for consistency.

× He gave me a majestic feeling how much by living in a one story building.

✓ Living in a one-story building would give me a majestic feeling.

Pronoun 'He' is incorrect for inanimate subject; sentence order and phrasing are awkward. Use gerund phrase 'Living in...' as subject and correct 'one-story' with hyphen and appropriate word order.