Building— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cần sửa ngữ pháp, dùng cấu trúc tự nhiên hơn và rút gọn để tránh dài dòng. Chú ý số ít/ số nhiều (a shopping mall / shopping malls), giới từ (go there), mạo từ và vị trí từ (on weekends). Thêm liên từ ngắn như “and” để mạch lạc.

例: Yes, there are tall buildings near my home. One of them is a shopping mall that offers shops and cafes where people relax after studying, and I often go there with my family on weekends.

提案: Cần sửa lỗi động từ và cấu trúc (into taking photos), dùng từ vựng cụ thể hơn (architecture, facades) và thêm liên kết ngắn để giải thích mục đích chia sẻ. Giữ tối đa 3-4 câu để tự nhiên.

例: Yes, I do. I'm really into taking photos of buildings because I admire their architecture and the way light falls on their facades. I also upload some pictures online to share them with my friends.

提案: Cần nói trực tiếp và ngắn gọn. Sửa ngữ pháp (if I have the chance / I would like to visit Landmark 81), danh từ số nhiều/số ít (country → my country), bỏ từ không cần thiết. Nên đưa lý do cụ thể vì sao muốn đến (view, height, attractions).

例: If I have the chance, I would like to visit Landmark 81 because it is the tallest building in my country and offers amazing views and restaurants at the top.

提案: Cần dùng cấu trúc tự nhiên để giải thích (No, I don't / I prefer living in a house). Sửa lỗi ngữ pháp (prefer → prefer, convenience → convenient), giới từ và diễn đạt lý do rõ ràng hơn (easier access to shops, more space). Giữ 2–3 câu.

例: No, I don't. I prefer living in a house because it is more convenient for getting around and it's easier to go to the market. Houses also usually offer more space and a garden.

× Of course, yes there are.

✓ Of course, yes, there are.

Comma needed after 'yes' for natural spoken sentence flow; not a grammatical error of 'there be' form but punctuation improves clarity.

× There is a tall building near my home.

✓ There is a tall building near my home.

Sentence is correct; no singular/plural error. Keep as is.

× It is a shopping mall centers which can help people relax and feel comfortable after a long day of studying.

✓ It is a shopping mall center which can help people relax and feel comfortable after a long day of studying.

The phrase mixed singular 'a ...' with plural 'centers'. Use singular 'center' to match the article 'a'. Alternatively, use 'shopping mall centers' without 'a'.

× Moreover, I often go to there with my families on weekend.

✓ Moreover, I often go there with my family on weekends.

Use 'go there' (not 'go to there'). 'Family' as a collective noun is usually singular in English; 'families' implies multiple families. Use plural 'weekends' for habitual actions or add 'on the weekend' for a specific time.

× Yes I do. I am really into take photos of buildings because the scenery is very beautiful.

✓ Yes, I do. I am really into taking photos of buildings because the scenery is very beautiful.

After 'into' we need the gerund form 'taking', not the base verb 'take'.

× Moreover, I want to share them with my friends on the Internet.

✓ Moreover, I want to share them with my friends on the internet.

'Internet' is commonly not capitalized in modern usage; this is stylistic rather than a strict grammar error.

× To be honest, just there is in the future, if I have chance, I hope I want to visit Landmark 81.

✓ To be honest, in the future, if I have the chance, I hope to visit Landmark 81.

Original sentence has redundancy and incorrect word order: 'just there is' is incorrect. Use 'in the future' first, include the article 'the' for 'chance', and use 'hope to visit' (verb infinitive) rather than 'hope I want to visit'.

× It's a very famous 2 building in my countries.

✓ It's a very famous building in my country.

Remove the numeral '2' (unclear) and correct plural 'countries' to singular 'country' if speaking about the speaker's own country.

× No I don't because it's very inconvenient of getting around.

✓ No, I don't because it's very inconvenient to get around.

Use 'to get around' (infinitive) after 'inconvenient', not the '-ing' form with 'of'. Also add comma after 'No'.

× Moreover, I prefers live in a house because it can help me convenience.

✓ Moreover, I prefer to live in a house because it is more convenient for me.

Use 'prefer' (not 'prefers') with subject 'I'. Use infinitive 'to live'. 'Help me convenience' is incorrect; use 'is more convenient for me'.

× I want to go to market easier.

✓ I want to go to the market more easily.

Use the article 'the' with 'market' for a specific place. 'Easier' is an adjective; after a verb use the adverb 'more easily'.