Building— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make your answer more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details with linking words. Correct grammar (e.g. "There are no tall buildings near my home"), and avoid redundancy ("hometown" vs "home town").

例: No, there are no tall buildings near my home. I live in a small village surrounded by agricultural land, and the nearest city with skyscrapers is about 35 kilometers away, so I rarely see tall buildings in my daily life.

提案: Begin with a direct answer, then give specific reasons and use linking words. Correct collocations ("camera settings", "learn about"). Be concise and avoid repeating ideas.

例: Yes, I often take photos of buildings. I enjoy it because photographing architecture helps me practice camera settings and better understand structural design, so I can improve both my photography skills and my knowledge of infrastructure.

提案: Answer directly and give one clear reason with a specific detail. Avoid vague phrases like "a lot of buildings" and improve phrasing ("named as" → "called" or just "the Burj Khalifa").

例: Yes, I would love to visit the Burj Khalifa in Dubai. I am fascinated by its modern design and engineering, and I would like to see the observation deck to appreciate the city views and the building's structural features.

提案: Clarify your preference and use consistent reasoning. Avoid contradictory statements ("fond of lower buildings" then "would love to live in a tall building"). Give one or two concrete reasons and correct grammar ("an amazing").

例: I might like to try living in a tall building because it would be an exciting experience and offer great views. For example, living on a high floor could be motivating for me and provide convenient access to city amenities.

× There are not at all buildings near my hometown because I am living in a village which is surrounded by agricultural land and the main city is about 35 kilometers from my home town which has a lot of tall buildings.

✓ There are no buildings near my hometown because I live in a village surrounded by agricultural land, and the main city, which has many tall buildings, is about 35 kilometers from my hometown.

Use 'there are no' instead of 'there are not at all' for natural negation with plural noun (There be issue). Change 'I am living' to simple present 'I live' for a general state (Present tense issue, but only corrected because it improves grammar). Use 'many tall buildings' rather than 'a lot of tall buildings' for smoother relative clause placement; combine clauses with commas for clarity.

× As I am fond of photographing a lot of different things, I really like to take pictures of buildings because it helps me to learn more about camera setting and a lot of buildings help me to understand infrastructure.

✓ As I am fond of photographing many different things, I really like to take pictures of buildings because it helps me learn more about camera settings and because many buildings help me understand infrastructure.

Keep 'photographing' as gerund is correct, but improve quantifier 'many' (Verb + -ing form issue partly) and change 'camera setting' to the plural 'camera settings' (Incorrect use of nouns). Use 'helps me learn' (omit 'to') for natural phrasing and add 'because' to clarify the second clause. Also change 'a lot of buildings' to 'many buildings' for formality.

× There are a lot of buildings that I would like to visit, but first of all, I like to visit the tallest building in the world named as Burj Khalifa. I like this building because of its modern design and architecture.

✓ There are many buildings that I would like to visit, but first of all I would like to visit the tallest building in the world, the Burj Khalifa. I like this building because of its modern design and architecture.

Use 'many' instead of 'a lot of' for more formal speech (There be issue in quantifier usage). Use 'I would like to' for polite preference instead of 'I like to visit' (modal preference). Remove 'named as' and use apposition 'the Burj Khalifa' to name the building correctly.

× As I am fond of lower buildings, I would love to live in a tall building because it could be a amazing experience and it helps me to stay much more motivated to achieve a lot more.

✓ Although I am fond of low-rise buildings, I would love to live in a tall building because it could be an amazing experience and it would help me stay more motivated to achieve more.

Use 'low-rise buildings' instead of 'lower buildings' for correct adjective use (Incorrect use of adjectives). Change 'a amazing' to 'an amazing' (Article error). Use conditional/modal consistency: 'would help' fits the hypothetical 'would love to'. Replace 'much more motivated to achieve a lot more' with 'more motivated to achieve more' for conciseness and natural phrasing.