Building— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cải thiện ngữ pháp và phát âm bằng cách sử dụng cấu trúc câu đơn giản, rõ ràng; sửa lỗi từ vựng không phù hợp và tránh lặp từ. Cụ thể: (1) Bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề ngắn gọn trả lời trực tiếp (Yes/No + reason). (2) Dùng động từ đúng thì (ví dụ: "When I lived... there were no tall buildings"). (3) Tránh lặp từ và sửa các từ sai (ví dụ: "rivers fierce house" → có thể là "riverside house"; "residential area"). (4) Giữ độ dài câu không quá 3-4 câu và thêm một chi tiết cụ thể về vị trí hay khoảng cách để làm rõ.

例: When I lived in a riverside house, it was a peaceful residential area with no tall buildings. Now I live in an apartment in Hanoi, and there are many tall buildings nearby, including several office towers within a 10-minute walk.

提案: Sửa ngữ pháp, collocation và cách dùng từ; đưa ra liên kết hợp lý giữa các câu. Cụ thể: (1) Trả lời trực tiếp rồi giải thích; (2) Dùng collocations đúng như "take photos of" "love the architecture" "interesting features"; (3) Sửa cụm từ mâu thuẫn như "sunshine set when the night" → "sunsets and night scenes"; (4) Thêm một ví dụ cụ thể về tòa nhà hoặc thời điểm chụp để tăng tính rõ ràng.

例: Yes, I often take photos of buildings because I love architecture and interesting features like facades and glass patterns. I especially enjoy photographing modern skyscrapers at sunset and at night when the lights create dramatic effects.

提案: Cải thiện lựa chọn từ và độ chính xác diễn đạt; dùng từ vựng mô tả cụ thể hơn và liên kết ý bằng từ nối. Cụ thể: (1) Tránh lỗi phát âm/viết như "scrapper" → "skyscraper"; (2) Dùng từ miêu tả chính xác (e.g., "sleek lines", "glass facade"); (3) Thêm lý do cụ thể tại sao quan tâm (e.g., quan sát kiến trúc, lịch sử, hoặc tầm nhìn).

例: Yes, I would love to visit a modern skyscraper. It looks very luxurious with sleek lines and a glass façade, and I want to go up to the observation deck to enjoy the panoramic view of the city and to photograph the skyline.

提案: Sửa lỗi lặp từ và chọn từ phù hợp; làm rõ ý chính và lý do bổ sung bằng các liên từ. Cụ thể: (1) Bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề rõ ràng (I prefer not to...); (2) Thay "big fools" bằng cụm phù hợp như "more peaceful" hoặc "a quieter environment"; (3) Giải thích ngắn gọn lý do (gần gia đình, yên tĩnh) và kết thúc bằng một mong muốn thử trải nghiệm với từ ngữ chính xác; (4) Tránh lặp từ như "at least" hai lần.

例: I prefer not to live in a tall building because I enjoy the quieter, more peaceful environment of my hometown and being closer to my family. However, I would like to try living in a high-rise at least once to experience the wonderful views from above.

× When I lived in my rivers fierce house, it was a peaceful reason residential re residential area with no tall buildings.

✓ When I lived in my riverside house, it was a peaceful residential area with no tall buildings.

The original sentence has unnecessary and incorrect words and word order (errors in word choice and structure). 'rivers fierce' is incorrect — use 'riverside'. 'reason residential re residential' is redundant and wrongly ordered; correct phrase is 'peaceful residential area'. Simplify the sentence to follow normal English noun phrase order: determiner + adjective + noun. Improve by removing redundant words and using correct collocations (riverside, residential area).

× Now I live in an an apartment in Hanoi city and there are many tall buildings.

✓ Now I live in an apartment in Hanoi and there are many tall buildings.

Duplicate article 'an an' is a typo and 'Hanoi city' is unnecessary; 'Hanoi' is sufficient. Use simple present 'live' for current situation which is correct. Remove repeated word and shorten proper noun. Also keep parallel clause 'there are many tall buildings' which is correct.

× Absolutely yes.

✓ Absolutely.

Response 'Absolutely yes' is awkward; either 'Absolutely' or 'Yes, absolutely' is natural. Simplify to single appropriate interjection. This fixes redundancy and improves spoken register.

× I often take photos of buildings because I love the architecture and other interesting fact case.

✓ I often take photos of buildings because I love architecture and interesting details.

'the architecture' can be 'architecture' (uncountable) and 'other interesting fact case' is nonsensical. Use 'interesting details' or 'interesting features'. Keep present simple 'often take' and use correct nouns.

× I especially enjoy photographing modern skyscrapers and a sunshine set when the night.

✓ I especially enjoy photographing modern skyscrapers and sunlight at night.

'a sunshine set' is incorrect; use 'sunlight' or 'the sunlight' and 'when the night' is ungrammatical — use 'at night'. Also use parallel nouns 'skyscrapers and nighttime light' or similar. Maintain present tense preference.

× Yes, I would love to visit a modern skyscraper scrapper.

✓ Yes, I would love to visit a modern skyscraper.

Redundant and misspelled word 'scraper scrapper' is incorrect; correct term is 'skyscraper'. Keep modal 'would' for polite desire, which is appropriate.

× It looks very luxurious and has many lines around, and I want to go up to the observation deck to enjoy the panoramic view of the city.

✓ It looks very luxurious and has many surrounding lines, and I want to go up to the observation deck to enjoy the panoramic view of the city.

Phrase 'lines around' is awkward; 'surrounding lines' or 'distinct lines' is clearer. Sentence structure otherwise fine. Suggested alternative: 'many distinctive exterior lines' if meaning architectural lines. Clarify noun modifiers for precision.

× I prefer not to live in the tall building because I like a big fools big fool environment like my hometown which is quieter and closer to my family.

✓ I prefer not to live in a tall building because I like a quieter, more spacious environment like my hometown, which is closer to my family.

Incorrect article 'the tall building' should be 'a tall building' for general statement. 'big fools big fool' is meaningless; likely meant 'more spacious' or 'bigger, quieter environment'. Reorder adjectives: 'quieter, more spacious'. Add comma before relative clause. These changes fix article use and adjective choice/order.

× However, I would like to try living in a high rise at least at least once once to experience the view.

✓ However, I would like to try living in a high-rise at least once to experience the view.

Duplicate words 'at least at least once once' are typos. Use hyphen 'high-rise' or 'high rise' consistently. Modal 'would like' plus gerund 'living' is correct. Remove repetitions to make sentence fluent.