Building— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 質問に対して直接答えている点は良いですが、文法や語順の誤り、冗長さ、意味の重複が目立ちます。より自然で簡潔にするには、主節で直接答え、必要ならば1〜2文の補足を加え、冠詞と前置詞、複数形の使い方を正すこと。また“office town”の代わりに“business district”や“commercial area”など適切な語を使い、不要な反復（“in my house in my town”など）を避けましょう。

例: Yes. My home is in a business district, so there are many tall office buildings around. I live in a small apartment among them.

提案: 答えは簡潔ですが文法ミス（both...andの誤用、単数・複数、一致）や不完全文があり、最後の文が中途半端です。まず簡単な否定の答えを述べ、その後に理由を1文で示し、友人の話は別文で完結させましょう。接続詞や時制の一貫性にも注意してください。

例: Not really. I'm not interested in photography or in architectural shots. However, a friend of mine is good at taking photos and often carries his camera, so he sometimes photographs local buildings.

提案: 良い具体例（Sydney Opera House）を挙げていますが、文の流れと時制がやや不自然です。過去の訪問と現在の希望を論理的に結び付けるために、過去形→現在形の順で整理し、冗長な表現を省きましょう。また“visit the Opera House again”のように冠詞を忘れないでください。

例: I'd like to visit the Sydney Opera House. I went there when I was a child but remember very little, so I'd love to see it again now that I'm older.

提案: 意味は伝わりますが多くの文法ミスと語選びの誤り（build vs live、'2 tall building'の誤用、不要な語の繰り返し）があり、文が未完です。主題文で立場を示し、理由を明確に一文で述べる練習をしましょう。地震の懸念を表現する際は、'earthquakes are common'や'safety concerns'など自然な表現を使ってください。

例: I'm not sure. I prefer a low-rise building because earthquakes are common in Japan and I worry about safety in high-rises.

× Yes, we can see a lot of buildings around my house because my house is located in the kind of office town. So except for my house, there are only tall buildings in my house in my town.

✓ Yes, we can see a lot of buildings around my house because it is located in an office area. Except for my house, most buildings in my town are tall.

The original contains awkward phrasing and redundancy ('my house' repeated, 'the kind of office town' is nonstandard). This is a sentence structure and wording problem. Simplify and reorder: replace 'my house is located in the kind of office town' with 'it is located in an office area' and change 'there are only tall buildings in my house in my town' to 'most buildings in my town are tall' to correct meaning and fluency.

× Not really because I'm not interested in both taking pictures and tall buildings.

✓ Not really, because I'm not interested in taking pictures of buildings.

The phrase 'interested in both taking pictures and tall buildings' incorrectly links an activity and an object. Use 'interested in taking pictures of buildings' to express the idea. Removing 'both' fixes the pronoun/reference issue and clarifies the object of interest.

× However one of my friend I really good at taking photos and he always bring his camera with him and he took some photos of.

✓ However, one of my friends is really good at taking photos; he always brings his camera with him and he has taken some photos for me.

Multiple errors: 'one of my friend' should be 'one of my friends' (plural after 'one of'), missing verb 'is' after the subject, 'bring' should be 'brings' for third person singular, and 'took some photos of' is incomplete and awkward. Use present perfect 'has taken' or simple past 'took' with a clear object. These are subject-verb agreement and sentence structure corrections.

× I really want to visit Opera House in Australia because when I was a child I visited there, but I almost have no memory for that because I was too little.

✓ I really want to visit the Opera House in Australia because when I was a child I visited it, but I have almost no memory of it because I was too young.

Use the definite article 'the' with 'Opera House'. 'Visited there' is incorrect; use 'visited it'. 'Almost have no memory for that' should be 'have almost no memory of it'. 'Too little' is unnatural for age; use 'too young'. These are past tense and article/preposition usage corrections.

× So now after I grow up, I really want to visit there again.

✓ Now that I am grown up, I really want to visit it again.

The original mixes tenses: 'after I grow up' suggests future, but context indicates present desire. Use present perfect/state 'Now that I am grown up'. Replace 'visit there again' with 'visit it again'. This corrects tense and pronoun reference.

× I'm not sure whether I want to build a tall or short building, but I think it is not good for me to live 2 tall building because in Japan there are many earthquakes that are happened if I live in the like tall building such as the.

✓ I'm not sure whether I want to live in a tall or short building, but I don't think it's good for me to live in a tall building because Japan has many earthquakes.

Several problems: 'want to build' should be 'want to live in' to answer the question, '2 tall building' is incorrect (number and noun form), and 'there are many earthquakes that are happened if I live in the like tall building such as the' is ungrammatical. Use modal/negative contraction 'don't think it's good' and simple present 'Japan has many earthquakes'. Remove extraneous fragments. This addresses modal verb phrasing and sentence structure.