Building— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答要更简洁自然，减少犹豫词（如 uh, umm）和重复，同时用一到两句具体细节支持观点，比如描述高楼的类型或位置。保持句子在五句以内并使用连接词使表达连贯。

例: Yes. There are many tall buildings near my home because I live in the city center. For example, there are several office towers and apartment blocks along the main avenue, and many restaurants occupy the ground floors.

提案: 注意语法和用词准确性，避免奇怪的表达（如 "owns a sense of science" 和 "taking photos on the net"）。可以用一两句说明什么时候拍、拍什么以及为什么拍，并使用连接词。

例: Yes, I often take photos of buildings, especially at sunset when the lights come on. I like to capture the contrast between the illuminated windows and the dark sky, and I sometimes post my best shots on social media.

提案: 回答要更直接并按逻辑组织：先给出明确回答，然后用一两句说明原因或计划。注意时态和表达清晰（例如 "I haven't visited it yet"）。

例: Yes, I would like to visit the tallest building in my city. I haven't had time yet because of my studies, but if I get a free weekend I plan to go to the observation deck to see the view.

提案: 表达要更流畅和准确，避免重复词和不清楚的句子（例如最后一句不明）。先直接回答，然后给出两到三个原因并用连接词。可以具体说明喜欢的住处类型和原因。

例: No, I wouldn't like to live in a tall building. I feel tall buildings can be unsafe during emergencies, and I prefer a low-rise house in the countryside because I enjoy outdoor space and a quieter environment.

× My city is a, a metropolitan and flourishing city.

✓ My city is a metropolitan and flourishing city.

句中有多余的冠词和停顿词“a, a”，造成重复。应只保留一个不定冠词“a”。建议去掉多余的“a”并连贯表达："My city is a metropolitan and flourishing city."。

× Uh, so include which including umm, a lot of companies, restaurants.

✓ It includes a lot of companies and restaurants.

原句中不正确使用了"include which including"，结构混乱。应使用主动语态“It includes ...”或“There are ...”，并用并列连词连接名词。建议学习如何用 include/it includes 引出所包含的事物。

× So there are a lot of tall buildings.

✓ So there are a lot of tall buildings.

此句语法本身正确。保留原句即可。注意主语“there”后面使用复数谓语“are”与“a lot of tall buildings”一致。

× It's very beautiful and I think it owns a sense of science.

✓ It's very beautiful and I think it has a sense of modernity.

原句中使用"owns"搭配抽象名词不自然。常用动词是 have 来表示具有某种感觉，且“sense of science”不地道，改为"a sense of modernity"或"a scientific feel"更自然。建议用 have 表达拥有抽象特质。

× So I always taking photos on the net.

✓ So I always take photos online.

原句“always taking”缺少助动词构成进行时，且语境为习惯动作应使用一般现在时“always take”。另外“on the net”更常说“online”。建议把动词恢复为一般现在时。

× I am a student so actually I don't have enough time to explore my city and the highest building in my city I haven't visited now, so if I have enough time I will visit it.

✓ I am a student, so I don't have enough time to explore my city. I haven't visited the tallest building in my city yet, but if I have enough time I will visit it.

原句时态和句子连接混乱："I haven't visited now" 不正确，应使用现在完成时加 yet 表示到目前为止还没去过；句子之间需断句以提高可读性。建议将句子分开，并用 yet 表示尚未发生。

× No, actually from my perspective, I think tall buildings a little bit dangerous and I I always, always go outside.

✓ No. Actually, from my perspective, I think tall buildings are a little bit dangerous, and I always go outside.

原句缺少系动词“are”与复数主语“tall buildings”不一致；重复“I I”是口语填充词，应删去。建议在主语和表语之间加上动词 be 的正确形式，并删除重复词。

× So I want to live in a, a short buildings.

✓ So I want to live in a short building.

原句中“a”与复数“buildings”冲突，应在单数前使用不定冠词“a”并把名词改为单数“building”。同时去掉重复的“a”。

× A Tibetan answer is countryside.

✓ A better answer is that I prefer the countryside.

原句结构不通顺且“A Tibetan answer”毫无语境意义。推测想表达“更恰当的回答是我要去乡下”或“我更喜欢乡村”。建议改为更自然的表达，如“I prefer the countryside”或“A better answer is that I prefer the countryside”。