Building— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答需要更自然、语法正确并且直接。先用主题句回答“是/不是”，然后用一两句具体细节支持，例如建筑风格、用途或位置。注意时态和主谓一致，避免冗余。可用连接词如“and”“also”连接要点。

例: Yes. There are many tall buildings near my home, even though I live in an older part of the city. These include modern office towers and residential high-rises, and some streets still feature traditional sculptures and facades.

提案: 回答要更简洁且自然，使用现在时描述习惯，并用连接词说明原因或方式。细节应具体，例如拍摄角度、时间或工具。避免错误的过去式（lingered）。

例: Yes, I often take photos of buildings. When I walk around the streets, I like to capture different angles—such as a building’s façade, the lobby interiors, or reflections in nearby ponds—usually in the late afternoon for better light.

提案: 回答应更明确并解释原因。先直接回答（Yes/No），然后给出具体理由和例子。注意语法和表达明确的时间或风格词汇，避免不清楚的短语如“located at 2020”或“absolute style”。

例: Not really. I’m not particularly interested in visiting any local buildings because I find the recent developments too uniform. Most towers built in the last few years look very similar, so I prefer older or more unique architecture.

提案: 回答要自然并提供具体理由。先肯定回答，然后说明原因（如景色、安静、通风）并给出具体细节。修正不自然的短语如“the level over 65”和“不完整的时间表达”。

例: Yes, I would like to live in a tall building. If possible, I’d choose an apartment above the 65th floor because it would offer great views of the sunrise and more privacy, especially during the quieter months.

× Yes, many tall buildings nearby my home and I living at a traditional city. It has many different architecture, sculptures.

✓ Yes, there are many tall buildings near my home, and I live in a traditional part of the city. It has many different architectural styles and sculptures.

句子缺少谓语并且结构混乱："many tall buildings nearby my home"缺少系动词，应为"there are many tall buildings near my home"（存在句或主谓结构）；"I living at a traditional city"使用了动名词形式且介词不当，应为一般现在时的"I live in a traditional part of the city"。另外名词搭配错误，architecture需用形容词形式或改为复合名词"architectural styles"。建议：使用完整主谓结构，注意动词时态与介词搭配，名词搭配用正确形式。

× Yes, I often take photos of buildings and when I lingered in the street, I prefer to catch the different angles viewed, such as tall buildings, lobbies or the pond.

✓ Yes, I often take photos of buildings, and when I linger on the street, I prefer to capture different viewing angles, such as those of tall buildings, lobbies, or ponds.

混合时态错误和动词搭配不当：句中先用了现在时"I often take"，却用过去式"I lingered"，应保持一致用一般现在时"I linger"或更自然的表达"I linger on the street"。"catch the different angles viewed"表达不自然，改为动词"capture"并用名词短语"different viewing angles"更准确；列举时冠词和复数要一致（pond应为复数或改为特指单数）。建议：保持时态一致，使用常用搭配如"linger on the street"、"capture angles"，名词复数与冠词要匹配。

× Not really, I don't like the architecture style and many tall buildings around my house even it is located at 2020. It is a absolute style.

✓ Not really. I don't like the architectural style of many tall buildings around my house, even though the area was developed in 2020. It has a very uniform style.

句子结构混乱，逻辑连接不清：原句缺少连接词且时态与表达不当。"architecture style"应为形容词形式"architectural style"；"even it is located at 2020"需要用连词并将时间表达为过去式或完成式，改为"even though the area was developed in 2020"更通顺；"It is a absolute style"中a与绝对形容词搭配错误，应为"a very uniform style"或"an absolute style"（但更自然用"very uniform"）。建议：调整形容词形式，使用合适的连接词（even though），时间用法与上下文一致，修正不可数/可数和冠词用法。

× If I have a chance, I would like to choose the tall building and the level over 65. It can see the sunrise and for a few months.

✓ If I have the chance, I would like to choose a tall building on a floor above the 65th. I could see the sunrise, at least for a few months of the year.

时态与表达不明确：条件句头使用一般现在时可接受，但后半句使用情态动词时应与习惯搭配，"choose the tall building and the level over 65"不自然，改为"choose a tall building on a floor above the 65th"更准确；"It can see the sunrise"主语错误，应为"I could see the sunrise"；"and for a few months"缺少语法与语义连接，补充为"at least for a few months of the year"以明确时间范围。建议：注意条件句与虚拟语气的搭配，主语应与动词一致，楼层用法用序数词并标明“floor/on the 65th floor”。

× Yes, many tall buildings nearby my home and I living at a traditional city. It has many different architecture, sculptures.

✓ Yes, there are many tall buildings near my home, and I live in a traditional part of the city. It has many different architectural styles and sculptures.

介词使用错误：应使用"near my home"而不是"nearby my home"；"living at a traditional city"中的介词应为"in"而非"at"，且城市应使用"part of the city"更自然。建议：常见地点搭配使用"in"用于城市或区域，"near"用于靠近某地，避免用法混淆。