Building— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Сократите запинки и неверные структуры, используйте прямой ответ и одно-два поддерживающих предложения. Исправьте грамматику (например, «there is still city have tall buildings» → «there are still tall buildings in the city») и избегайте лишних словоизлияний («uh»).

例: Yes. My city has several tall buildings, and I actually live in one of them. I appreciate living there because it offers good views and is close to shops and transport.

提案: Дайте более уверенный и краткий ответ; используйте связку для объяснения причины и приведите конкретный пример. Исправьте грамматику (например, «I will be take a photo» → «I would take a photo») и числа (photo/photos).

例: No, I usually don't photograph modern buildings because they don't interest me. However, I would take photos of historic or artistic buildings, such as an old cathedral or a decorative museum façade.

提案: Отвечайте прямо и последовательно: скажите название здания и объясните, почему хотите его посетить, с одной-двумя деталями. Уберите повторы и запинки, исправьте порядок слов (например, «the last building our city built is the Museum of History and Muslims»).

例: Yes. I would like to visit the new Museum of History and Muslims because it showcases local heritage. I am interested in its exhibits about traditional culture and the architecture of the building.

提案: Дайте чёткий ответ и объясните 1–2 причины, избегая тавтологии и ошибок (например, «live in a topic» неясно; возможно, «live in a tower/building»). Проверьте согласование и числа (this have → this has).

例: Yes, I would like to live in a tall building because it often offers better views and modern amenities. For example, high-rise apartments usually have elevators, security, and easy access to nearby services.

× Uh, now what? Even though nowadays our, uh, city is improving and new buildings are coming up, uh, there is still city have tall buildings and I live in one of them, uh, and I really appreciate that.

✓ Even though our city is improving and new buildings are coming up nowadays, there are still tall buildings, and I live in one of them. I really appreciate that.

The original sentence has multiple structural and agreement problems: 'there is still city have tall buildings' is ungrammatical. Use 'there are' with the plural 'tall buildings' (there be issue and plural agreement). Also the sentence is long and disfluent; split into clearer clauses and place 'nowadays' in a natural position. Suggestion: reorder to 'Even though our city is improving and new buildings are coming up nowadays, there are still tall buildings, and I live in one of them.' Note: explanation provided in English as requested.

× Uh, no, because I really don't know why to take the pictures of this kind of buildings.

✓ No, because I really don't know why I would take pictures of this kind of building.

The phrase 'know why to take' is incorrect. Use a modal construction 'would' or an infinitive with a subject: 'know why I would take' or 'know why I should take.' Also 'this kind of buildings' mixes singular/plural; use 'this kind of building' for general type or 'these kinds of buildings.' Suggestion: 'I really don't know why I would take pictures of this kind of building.' Note: explanation provided in English as requested.

× Maybe if it will be some kind of art, uh, or, uh, old buildings, I will be take a photo.

✓ Maybe if it is some kind of art or an old building, I will take a photo.

'If it will be' is incorrect for conditional; use present 'if it is' for a likely future condition (there be/future tense issue). 'I will be take a photo' wrongly mixes continuous and base form; use 'I will take a photo.' Also maintain singular/plural consistency: 'an old building' or 'old buildings.' Suggestion: 'Maybe if it is some kind of art or an old building, I will take a photo.' Note: explanation provided in English as requested.

× I will take a photos.

✓ I will take a photo.

'A' requires a singular noun: 'a photos' is ungrammatical. Use 'a photo' or drop 'a' and use plural: 'I will take photos.' Suggestion: choose one: 'I will take a photo' or 'I will take photos.' Note: explanation provided in English as requested.

× Of course, because, uh, nowadays, as I said, uh, our, uh, city is developing rapidly. Uh, I want to visit uh, the last building that our city built is umm, Museum of History and Muslims.

✓ Of course. As I said, our city is developing rapidly. I want to visit the latest building our city has built, the Museum of History and Muslims.

The original combines clauses awkwardly and uses incorrect tense/structure: 'the last building that our city built is' should be rephrased as 'the latest building our city has built' to show a recent completed action. Also split into clearer sentences. Suggestion: 'I want to visit the latest building our city has built, the Museum of History and Muslims.' Note: explanation provided in English as requested.

× Yes, I think that even though, uh buildings are now creating, created, uh, really high, I uh, really want to live in a topic because this have some kind of vibes of uh, history and uh, it's more comfortable.

✓ Yes, I think that even though buildings are now being built very high, I really want to live in one because it has a kind of historical vibe and it's more comfortable.

Multiple errors: 'buildings are now creating, created' should be passive progressive 'buildings are now being built.' 'Live in a topic' is incorrect; likely 'live in one' (one building). 'This have' should be 'it has' (singular subject-verb agreement). 'Some kind of vibes of history' should be 'a kind of historical vibe' or 'vibes of history.' Suggestion: '...buildings are now being built very high, I really want to live in one because it has a kind of historical vibe and it's more comfortable.' Note: explanation provided in English as requested.