Building— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答要更直接、语法更准确，并给出具体信息。可以先用主题句直接回答（有或没有），然后用一两句补充细节，例如高度、用途或位置。注意动词和单复数的一致性，避免不必要的犹豫词。

例: Yes, there is a tall building near my home. A new landmark was built recently and it is about 400 metres tall. It stands out in the skyline and is visible from many parts of the town.

提案: 回答时先直接说频率或习惯，然后用具体原因或例子支撑观点。注意时态和主谓一致，使用连词（for example, because, so）使句子更连贯。避免模糊表达如“I think I would argue years”。

例: Yes, I take photos of buildings from time to time because I see architecture as a form of art. For example, I often photograph old facades and modern skyscrapers to capture their shapes and details.

提案: 先直接回答想去某座建筑，然后给出具体原因或感受，并补充一点期待的细节。注意完成句子并避免重复（例如“All the videos about it”可以具体说明哪类视频或感受）。

例: Yes, I would like to visit the Shanghai Centre. I have seen many videos of its observation deck and I would love to see the panoramic view of the whole city in person, especially at sunset.

提案: 先清楚地给出肯定或否定的主题句，然后说明两到三个具体原因，使用连接词如 'because' 或 'however' 使论述更连贯。避免重复词和口头语（uh, you know）。

例: No, I don't think I would like to live in a tall building because it can be inconvenient. For instance, waiting for elevators during rush hour can waste time, and high-rise apartments may feel less private and more isolated.

× Umm may actually is a tall buildings, I don't know what's.

✓ Umm maybe actually there is a tall building, I don't know what to call it.

错误类型：名词单复数及句子结构。说明：’a tall buildings’ 中同时出现不定冠词 a（用于单数）和复数名词 buildings，冲突。建议：若要强调单个建筑，应使用单数名词并搭配 a；如果不确定建筑数量可用 'there is/are' 结构。将 maybe 拼写正确并补全 'there is' 使句子完整。示例改正：'Umm maybe actually there is a tall building.'

× Signify a building as a tall building, but there is one that is built recently as a landmark of my hometown.

✓ If we call a building 'tall', there is one that was built recently as a landmark of my hometown.

错误类型：'there be' 及从句逻辑问题。说明：原句开头 'Signify a building as a tall building' 结构不自然且动词用法错误，且时态与语义不一致。建议：改为条件从句 'If we call...' 或 'To be considered tall,' 并把后半句过去完成或一般过去 'was built recently' 更符合时间表达。此处用 'was built recently' 表示最近建成的事实。

× It is like 400 meters tallest.

✓ It is about 400 meters tall.

错误类型：形容词/副词使用不当。说明：'400 meters tallest' 语序和词形错误。正确说法用形容词 'tall' 修饰，数词前用 about 表示估计，或直接 '400 meters high'。建议：使用 'about 400 meters tall' 或 'approximately 400 meters high'。

× Yeah, from time to time, I think I would argue years, because I feel that architecture is a kind of art.

✓ Yeah, from time to time, I think I would say so, because I feel that architecture is a kind of art.

错误类型：时态和词汇使用不当。说明：'I would argue years' 不合语境且语法错误；likely 想表达 '我会这么说'，应使用 'I would say so' 或 'I have for years' 根据语境。建议：将 'argue years' 改为 'say so' 或具体表达 'I have liked it for years'。

× It is what the designer have put effort into making it what we see nowadays.

✓ It is what the designer has put effort into making what we see nowadays.

错误类型：主谓一致。说明：主语 'the designer' 为单数，谓语应为 'has' 而不是 'have'；另外句尾去掉多余的 it，保持从句通顺。建议：使用 'has put effort into making what we see nowadays' 或更自然 'the designer put a lot of effort into creating what we see today'。

× I always wanted to visit the Shanghai Center in Shanghai actually, because it is the tallest building in China and it is really magnificent seeing all the videos about it.

✓ I have always wanted to visit the Shanghai Center in Shanghai, actually, because it is one of the tallest buildings in China and it looks really magnificent in all the videos about it.

错误类型：'there be' 及句子结构。说明：原句 'it is the tallest building in China' 断言为中国最高可能不确；更重要的是时态应用 'I always wanted'（过去）与现在愿望不匹配，改为现在完成 'I have always wanted'。此外 'magnificent seeing all the videos' 结构不自然，改为 'it looks really magnificent in all the videos' 更通顺。建议：根据事实改为 'one of the tallest' 或确认事实后使用定冠词，统一时态为现在完成以表达一直以来的愿望。

× I can't imagine having a view of the whole city from the.

✓ I can't imagine having a view of the whole city from there.

错误类型：句子结构/缺词。说明：句尾缺少地点副词 'there'，导致句子不完整。建议：在 'from' 后加上 'there' 或 'from the top' 等完整短语，使意思明确。

× Uh, well, actually as in the term of living, I don't think so, because living in a tall building means you, you will have to use a lot of time to commute, you know, going up and down, lining up for the elevator.

✓ Uh, well, actually in terms of living, I don't think so, because living in a tall building means you will have to spend a lot of time commuting, you know, going up and down and waiting for the elevator.

错误类型：情态动词及词组使用不当。说明：'as in the term of living' 用法不自然，应为 'in terms of living'；'use a lot of time to commute' 更自然说法是 'spend a lot of time commuting'；'lining up for the elevator' 可以改为 'waiting for the elevator'。建议：用固定搭配 'in terms of...' 和 'spend time doing sth'，并用 'waiting' 表达排队/等电梯的意思。