Building— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答要更自然、语法更准确，句子更简洁并使用连接词。应直接回答后用一到两句补充细节，避免重复和错误，例如“two or three storms high”应为“two or three storeys high”。可以说出原因或举例说明周边环境。

例: No, there aren’t any tall buildings near my home because I live in a small town. Most houses here are only two or three storeys high, so the skyline is quite low and spread out.

提案: 保持简洁并用正确时态和搭配。避免重复“travel to other country or other place”，用连词自然衔接并说明原因或具体偏好（如风格或细节）。

例: Yes, I often take photos of buildings, especially when I travel abroad. For example, I’m going to Shanghai next week and I plan to photograph the modern skyscrapers because I’m fascinated by their design and lighting.

提案: 需更自然表达情感并用更准确的词汇，避免机械直译。先给出明确回答，然后用1–2句说明原因和举例。把“remember the historical”改为“learn about its history”或“recall historic events”。

例: Yes, I’d love to visit a historical building because it makes me feel excited and respectful. I enjoy learning about its history and the stories behind the architecture.

提案: 句子结构和语法问题较多，表达不清晰。建议先直接回答，再列一至两条具体原因，使用正确词汇（例如 ‘not feel safe’, ‘fire safety’），并用连接词衔接。避免频繁停顿和口头填充词。

例: No, I wouldn’t want to live in a tall building. Firstly, I wouldn’t feel safe in case of a fire, and secondly, living high up might make me feel isolated and uncomfortable.

× my neighborhoods also made their house by two or three storms high

✓ my neighborhood's houses are only two or three stories high

原句中“neighborhoods”与上下文不一致，应为单数“neighborhood”或把意思改为“neighborhood's houses”。另外“made their house by two or three storms high”是错误的表达，推测想说“房子只有两三层高”，英文应为“houses are only two or three stories high”。建议：使用复数形式“houses”来表示多个房屋，并用“stories”表示楼层高度。

× I really take photos of buildings, especially when I travel to other country or other place.

✓ I really take photos of buildings, especially when I travel to other countries or other places.

原句缺少不定冠词或复数形式。短语“other country”在泛指其他国家时应使用复数“other countries”或加冠词“another country”。同样“other place”应为“other places”或“another place”。建议根据语境使用复数以表示不特定的多个地方。

× For example, I travel to Shanghai next week. I take so many photos of buildings there because I think they are very special and modern.

✓ For example, I will travel to Shanghai next week. I will take so many photos of buildings there because I think they will be very special and modern.

句子描述将来发生的事情，应使用将来时态。原句使用一般现在时“travel/take”，不符合时间状语“next week”。应改为“will travel/will take”。关于“they are very special”可以用“they will be very special”来一致地表达将来感。建议在表示将来计划或安排时使用“will”或其他将来时表达。

× I would like to visit a historical building because I will feel very exciting and respected when I face the very tall and old buildings.

✓ I would like to visit a historical building because I will feel very excited and respectful when I see very tall and old buildings.

“feel very exciting”用法错误，应为“feel very excited”（用形容词作表语来描述人的感受）。“respected”意思是被尊重，不适合这里想表达“感到敬畏/尊敬”，应用“respectful”或“full of respect”，但“respectful”更常用来表示人表现出尊重，而“full of respect”或“in awe”更贴切。同时“when I face”在此语境可改为“when I see”。建议使用正确的形容词形式描述情感，且选用更自然的动词短语。

× I can remember the historical and remember some stories.

✓ I can remember the history and remember some stories.

“the historical”不是名词短语，应该用“history”表示历史。句子重复使用“remember”，可合并为“I can remember the history and some of its stories.”以更自然表达。建议使用正确的名词“history”并使句子结构更流畅。

× I don't want to live in a tall building in uh. There are several reasons. Uh, first of all I think it haven't in self enough for me when there have some fire problem uh otherwise I think it make me more uncomfortable.

✓ I don't want to live in a tall building. There are several reasons. First of all, I think it wouldn't be safe enough for me if there were a fire. Otherwise, I think it would make me more uncomfortable.

原句有多处语法错误："it haven't in self enough" 完全不符合英语习惯，想表达“不够安全”应为“it wouldn't be safe enough”或“it isn't safe enough”。“when there have some fire problem”中的“have”与主语不一致且时态错误，应为“if there were a fire”或“if there is a fire”。“it make me more uncomfortable”缺少主语一致及时态，正确为“it would make me more uncomfortable”。总体需要使用虚拟或条件结构（would/if/were）来表达对可能情况的担忧。建议学习条件句和“be”动词的正确形式及主谓一致。