Building— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct and clear. Start with a short topic sentence answering the question (Yes/No), then give one or two specific details about the buildings near you. Use simple correct grammar and avoid irrelevant phrases. Use linking words like "for example" or "for instance" if you add a detail.

例: Yes, there are several tall buildings near my home. For example, the Mary Apartment and a long, modern office tower are within a five-minute walk. The office tower is one of the tallest buildings in Thailand and can be seen from my balcony.

提案: Answer directly and clearly. Say whether you take photos now or did in the past, then give a specific reason or occasion. Keep sentences short and use correct tense (simple present for habits, past simple for one-time events).

例: Yes, I often take photos of buildings when I travel. For example, three years ago my family and I visited a famous landmark for my birthday, and I took many photos because it was a special and memorable occasion.

提案: Be specific and organized. Start by clearly answering (Yes/No). If you say no, explain briefly why with a clear reason. If yes, name a particular building and give one or two reasons. Use correct vocabulary (e.g., "beautiful" not "beauty") and limit to 2–3 sentences.

例: I don't have a single building I want to visit because I enjoy exploring many different places. I find each building has its own beauty, so I prefer visiting many sites rather than focusing on one.

提案: Give a clear yes/no and then one or two specific reasons. Use simple, correct sentence structures and appropriate vocabulary (e.g., "dangerous" with a clear reason such as safety, earthquakes, or fire). Use linking words like "because" or "so" correctly.

例: No, I would not like to live in a tall building because I worry about safety during earthquakes and fires. I prefer living in a house because it feels safer and has more outdoor space.

× I'm not sure, but if you ask me in the Mary's apartment, this would be yours behind a car building which is known as, uh, longest building in Thailand.

✓ I'm not sure, but if you ask me, Mary's apartment building behind the car park would be the tallest building in Thailand.

Original sentence misuses prepositions and has unclear noun phrases. 'in the Mary's apartment' is incorrect; use 'Mary's apartment' without 'the' and place it correctly. 'behind a car building' is unclear; likely 'behind the car park' or 'behind the parking garage'. Also 'which is known as, uh, longest building' needs 'the tallest building' and proper article use. Reorder phrase for clarity and correct prepositions.

× Yes, about 3 year ago I have been there for but my birthday and my our family went there to celebrate my birthday, which is very expensive and memorable that.

✓ Yes, about three years ago I went there with my family to celebrate my birthday; it was expensive and very memorable.

Mixes present perfect 'have been' with a specific past time 'about 3 years ago'; use simple past 'went'. '3 year' needs plural 'three years'. 'my our family' is redundant; use 'my family'. 'which is very expensive and memorable that' is ungrammatical; use a clear clause 'it was expensive and very memorable'.

× I don't have any because in my perspective I think every beauty in that I want to grow. I have been go there almost almost every building that's in my mind.

✓ I don't have any particular building in mind because, from my perspective, I find beauty in many places and I want to visit and learn from them. I have visited almost all the buildings I can think of.

Original has broken structure and incorrect verb forms: 'every beauty in that I want to grow' is unclear; rephrase to express intended meaning. 'I have been go there' mixes perfect progressive 'have been' with infinitive 'go'; correct to 'I have visited'. Repeat 'almost' removed. Clarified tense and sentence structure.

× No, not at all 'cause at that time that I know as creative is coming to Thailand. So in the tall building is quite very dangerous for living. I would prefer houses have.

✓ No, not at all, because when I know that earthquakes can occur in Thailand, living in a tall building can be quite dangerous. I would prefer to live in a house.

Original uses awkward and incorrect phrases: 'at that time that I know as creative is coming to Thailand' is unintelligible; likely intended 'earthquakes' or 'creatives'? Replaced with 'earthquakes can occur'. 'So in the tall building is quite very dangerous for living' has wrong word order and extra adverbs; correct to 'living in a tall building can be quite dangerous.' 'I would prefer houses have' is ungrammatical; use 'I would prefer to live in a house.' Also fixed subject-verb agreement and phrasing.