Building— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cụ thể: Trả lời thiếu rõ ràng và ngữ pháp nhiều lỗi. Cần mở đầu bằng câu chủ đề rõ ràng, sửa lỗi từ vựng (ví dụ: "small" not "mini", "suburb" not "El suburb", "low-rise houses"), dùng số ít câu (1-3 câu), và cung cấp thêm chi tiết cụ thể nếu cần. Hãy nối các ý bằng liên từ để mạch lạc.

例: No, there aren’t many tall buildings near my home. I live in a suburb of Melbourne where most houses are low-rise and there are only a few small apartment blocks nearby.

提案: Cụ thể: Nội dung hợp lý nhưng có lặp từ và câu rời rạc. Cần tránh lặp "really", sửa ngữ pháp (e.g. "take photos of myself at the beach"), gộp câu ngắn thành câu mạch lạc bằng liên từ và thêm một ví dụ cụ thể.

例: Not really. I usually photograph natural scenery because I prefer landscapes and beaches, so when I go to the beach I often take photos of the scenery and sometimes pictures of myself enjoying the view.

提案: Cụ thể: Trả lời trực tiếp tốt nhưng hơi ngắn và lặp. Nên bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề rõ ràng, giải thích ngắn gọn lý do và cho ví dụ cụ thể. Dùng liên từ để nối ý và tránh câu mơ hồ như "I think no".

例: Not really; I don’t have a particular building I want to visit because I only go into buildings for practical reasons. For example, I visit shopping malls when I need to buy clothes or shoes.

提案: Cụ thể: Ý rõ ràng và có lý do, nhưng có lỗi ngữ pháp và từ vựng (e.g. "privacy and quiet", "buildings"), câu thừa từ ("and job"). Cần sắp xếp ý mạch lạc: chủ đề, lý do chính, ví dụ; dùng liên từ để nối và sửa các lỗi chia động từ và số nhiều.

例: No, I wouldn’t like to live in a tall building because I prefer a house for more space and greater privacy. Also, apartment buildings can be crowded and involve extra maintenance and parking costs; for example, sharing an elevator and dealing with noisy neighbours can be frustrating.

× No the Apple mini tall building near my home.

✓ No, there is no tall Apple Mini building near my home.

The original sentence lacks a verb and the 'there is/are' construction required to state existence; also word order is incorrect. Use 'There is/are' to indicate existence and include commas for clarity. Suggestion: add 'there is' and reorder nouns appropriately.

× I live in El suburb of Melbourne and the area is mostly low rice house and some small apartment apartment blocks.

✓ I live in the suburb of El in Melbourne, and the area mostly has low-rise houses and some small apartment blocks.

Errors include missing articles ('the suburb'), incorrect adjective form ('low rice' should be 'low-rise'), pluralization ('house' -> 'houses'), and duplicated word 'apartment'. Also need 'has' to describe what the area contains. Suggestion: use correct compound adjective 'low-rise', plural nouns for countable items, and include 'has' or 'is' as needed.

× Not really. I don't really take photos of buildings because I prefer natural scenery.

✓ Not really. I don't usually take photos of buildings because I prefer natural scenery.

'Really' is acceptable but 'don't usually' is a better collocation for habits. No major grammar error, mainly word choice. Suggestion: use 'usually' to describe frequency of habitual action.

× I enjoy photographing the beach, landscapes and trees. Mall for example.

✓ I enjoy photographing the beach, landscapes, and trees; for example, malls.

'Mall for example' is a sentence fragment and placement is incorrect. Combine into one sentence and make 'mall' plural if it is an example of places. Suggestion: attach the example correctly using 'for example' and ensure complete sentence structure.

× When I go to the beach I often take photo of me and my beach.

✓ When I go to the beach, I often take photos of myself and the beach.

Use plural 'photos' for multiple images, reflexive pronoun 'myself' not 'me' when the subject performs the action on the object, and 'the beach' to refer to the place. Also add a comma after the subordinate clause. Suggestion: use reflexive pronouns and correct articles.

× I think no, but I usually only visit a building when I need to buy something.

✓ I don't think so, but I usually only visit a building when I need to buy something.

'I think no' is not natural English. Use 'I don't think so' to express disagreement. The rest is acceptable. Suggestion: use idiomatic negative response forms.

× For example, I go to a shopping mall to shop for clothes or shoes.

✓ For example, I go to shopping malls to buy clothes or shoes.

Using 'a shopping mall' is acceptable, but plural 'shopping malls' better matches habitual action; 'to buy' is more natural than 'to shop for' here. No major grammar error. Suggestion: choose singular/plural to match context and use natural verb collocations.

× No, I don't want to live in a tall building.

✓ No, I don't want to live in a tall building.

This sentence is correct. No grammatical change needed. Explanation: Negative preference is properly expressed with present simple and 'want'.

× I prefer a house because I want more space and greater privacy and job.

✓ I prefer a house because I want more space, greater privacy, and a separate room for work (or a private workspace).

The phrase 'and job' is unclear and ungrammatical as a conjunction of nouns. Likely intended 'and a place to work' or 'a private workspace'. Also add commas in a list. Suggestion: clarify 'job' into an appropriate phrase and use parallel list structure.

× Building are often crowded and come behind maintenance and parking costs.

✓ Buildings are often crowded and come with maintenance and parking costs.

Subject-verb agreement: 'Building' should be plural 'Buildings' to match 'are'. The phrase 'come behind' is incorrect; use 'come with' to indicate associated costs. Suggestion: ensure noun plurality matches verb and use correct phrasal verbs.

× For example, living in a flat usually means sharing elevator and noise from neighborhood.

✓ For example, living in a flat usually means sharing an elevator and experiencing noise from the neighborhood.

Missing articles: 'an elevator' and 'the neighborhood'. Also need verb 'experiencing' to pair with 'noise' or rephrase as 'and dealing with noise from the neighborhood'. Suggestion: include appropriate articles and verbs to make the sentence grammatically complete.