Building— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct and concise: start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct grammar (singular/plural, articles) and avoid fragments. For example, say whether tall buildings exist, describe what is typical near your home, and contrast with cities.

例: No, there aren’t many tall buildings near my home. I live in the countryside where there are mostly small houses and open fields, so the area is very peaceful. However, I often go to the city for work, where there are many high-rise buildings and busy streets.

提案: Give a clear opinion and complete sentences. Use linking words to add reasons and examples. Fix vocabulary errors (e.g., ‘lighting’, not ‘bullying’) and avoid trailing off. Mention frequency and specific preferences.

例: Yes, I sometimes take photos of buildings, especially when they are colorful or tall because they look dramatic. Also, I take pictures when the lighting is good, for example at sunrise or sunset, because the light makes architectural details stand out.

提案: Answer directly and give specific reasons why you want to visit. Use linking words and complete sentences. Avoid filler words like ‘uh’ and unclear phrases like ‘I want really feels’. Mention particular features or historical facts to enrich your answer.

例: Yes, I would like to visit the Tarahara building because it represents our cultural heritage. It has traditional carvings and historic architecture, so I want to see those details in person and learn more about its history.

提案: State your opinion clearly and support it with specific, linked reasons and examples. Correct grammar (add articles, use comparative forms) and avoid incomplete sentences. Mention practical aspects (views, facilities, convenience) to make your answer concrete.

例: Yes, I would like to live in a tall building because it is often more comfortable and convenient. For example, high-rise apartments usually have elevators, security, and good views, which makes daily life easier.

× Not really, I live in countryside areas so there are many small residents and. And the peaceful area. Work in cities.

✓ Not really. I live in the countryside, so there are many small houses and it is a peaceful area. Most people work in cities.

The original contains sentence fragments and incorrect nouns. 'countryside' needs 'the' and is singular as a collective noun. 'small residents' is incorrect; 'houses' fits context. Fragments 'And the peaceful area.' and 'Work in cities.' lack subjects and verbs. Combine ideas into complete sentences and add subject for 'work in cities.' Suggestions: use complete clauses, include articles ('the'), and choose correct nouns ('houses' not 'residents').

× I prefer to take photos of buildings if they are colorful, tall and. Good lightning, but if the bullying is average, I really.

✓ I prefer to take photos of buildings if they are colorful and tall, and have good lighting, but if the building is ordinary, I don't really take photos.

The sentence has fragments and wrong word forms. 'and.' is an unfinished list; 'Good lightning' should be 'good lighting' (noun) and 'bullying' is incorrect for 'building' or 'ordinary' — here 'bullying' is a wrong word. Also missing negatives and verbs. Correct by completing clauses, using correct noun 'lighting', and making subject-verb agreement ('building is'). Use 'don't really take photos' to express lack of interest.

× Yes, I really like to visit Tarahara building because it is it represents our cultural heritage and uh, I want really feels.

✓ Yes, I would really like to visit the Tarahara building because it represents our cultural heritage, and I really want to feel it.

Problems: duplicate pronoun 'it is it represents' — remove redundancy; missing article 'the' before a specific building; awkward phrase 'I want really feels' — incorrect pronoun and verb form. Use 'would like' for polite desire and 'want to feel it' or better specify 'experience it'. Ensure correct pronoun reference and verb infinitive after 'want'.

× Yes, I really like to live in tall building because it feels like more comfortable and. Convenient.

✓ Yes, I would really like to live in a tall building because it feels more comfortable and convenient.

Missing article 'a' before 'tall building'. 'Feels like more comfortable' is ungrammatical; use 'feels more comfortable'. The fragment ending with '.' before 'Convenient' creates an incomplete sentence. Combine adjectives with 'and' to form one clause. Use 'would like' for a polite preference and ensure both adjectives modify the subject correctly.