Building— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 句子要更自然且语法正确。主句应直接回答问题，随后用一两句补充细节并用连接词。注意时态和小错误（例如“then”应为“that”或删除）。可把信息组织成：存在、高楼的来源/特点、你能看到它们的方式。

例: Yes, there are several tall buildings near my home. They were completed last year and stand out because of their glass facades, so I can often see them from my bedroom window.

提案: 句子需要更自然的表达和正确的动词形式。先直接回答，然后说明频率或条件，使用连接词（e.g. because, when）。避免重复和啰嗦（如两次提到用手机）。

例: Yes, I often take photos of interesting buildings, especially when I see unique or beautiful architecture. I usually use my phone because it's convenient.

提案: 注意语法与连贯。先给出明确的目标建筑，然后说明原因和相关经历。动词形式和冠词要正确，并用连接词（e.g. although, because）把句子衔接好。

例: I'd like to visit the Welcome Building in Shanghai because it's famous for its historic architecture. I actually went to Shanghai last year, but unfortunately I didn't have time to see it.

提案: 表达要简洁、有条理。先直接回答（Yes/No），然后给出一到两条具体原因，使用连接词（e.g. because, because of）并避免重复短语。注意句子结构和冠词。

例: No, I wouldn't like to live in a tall building because I dislike living so close to many neighbors. I prefer more privacy and a quieter environment.

× Yes, there are plenty of high buildings near my house then were built last year.

✓ Yes, there are plenty of tall buildings near my house that were built last year.

句子中“high buildings”虽然可理解，但更自然的表达是“tall buildings”。更重要的是原句缺少关系代词连接主句与定语从句，使用“then”错误，应为“that”或“which”。同时“buildings”与“were built”在复数上一致，主要错误是用词和连接词。建议：使用“that/which”引导定语从句，注意选择更地道的形容词（tall）。

× I'm due take a photo of buildings, especially when I saw unique or beautiful buildings.

✓ I often take photos of buildings, especially when I see unique or beautiful ones.

原句“I'm due take”结构不正确，可能想表达“我经常拍”应使用一般现在时“I often take”。此外“when I saw”时态与习惯动作不符，应为“when I see”。“buildings”重复，使用代词“ones”更简洁。建议：描述习惯性动作用一般现在时，避免错误短语“I'm due take”。

× I will definitely use my phone to take some photos.

✓ I will definitely use my phone to take some photos.

句子语法正确，时态与上下文（将来动作）一致，无需修改。此处确认为现在/将来时使用正确。

× I would like visit Welcome building which is a famous buildings in Shanghai.

✓ I would like to visit the Welcome Building, which is a famous building in Shanghai.

缺少不定式“to”动词不完整（would like to visit）。“Welcome building”作为专有名词首字母应大写并加定冠词“the”。“a famous buildings”中“buildings”为复数而冠词“a”要求单数，应改为“a famous building”。建议：注意不定式to、专有名词大小写及名词单复数一致。

× Although I'm visited Shanghai last year and didn't go that place.

✓ Although I visited Shanghai last year and didn't go to that place.

“I'm visited”是现在完成或被动的错误形式，正确过去式应为“I visited”。此外“didn't go that place”缺少介词“to”。建议：表过去发生的动作用一般过去时（visited），动词后跟移动动词需用介词“to”。

× No, to tell the truth and don't like the feeling of living with a lot of people in living in a long building means like you have to share a lot of things with your neighborhood.

✓ No, to tell the truth I don't like the feeling of living with a lot of people in a tall building, because it means you have to share a lot of things with your neighbors.

原句缺少主语“I”，且结构混乱重复“living”。“long building”用词不当，应为“tall building”。“you have to share a lot of things with your neighborhood”中“neighborhood”用作群体名词不如“neighbors（邻居们）”明确。建议：补主语，删除重复，使用更自然的名词（neighbors），并用连词“because”连接原因。