Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer the question directly at the beginning by naming your current favourite food. Correct the unclear phrases “like or Mesopotamia” and “porching”; you may mean “Mesopotamian dishes” and “protein.” Avoid repeating “food” and use a natural expression such as “I consider it unhealthy” instead of “unhealthy for my body.” Add one specific reason or example to make your answer more effective.

例: My favourite food is traditional Mesopotamian cuisine, especially dolma. I used to enjoy Italian food such as pizza and lasagna, but I now prefer traditional dishes because they contain more vegetables and are usually less processed. I also enjoy them because they remind me of my family and culture.

提案: Give a direct answer without repeating “enjoyed enjoying.” Use the past tense consistently: “I realized” rather than “I realize,” since you are describing a change over time. Replace the unnatural phrase “less in fat and oil” with “lower in fat and oil,” and provide a specific example, such as burgers or fried chicken, to develop the answer.

例: When I was young, I really liked fast food, especially burgers, fried chicken and chips. However, as I grew older, I realized that eating too much of it could be unhealthy. As a result, I gradually switched to a diet that is higher in protein and lower in fat and oil.

提案: Use the correct preposition and phrasing: “on different days of the year” or, more naturally, “at different times of the year.” Correct “another special dishes” to “other special dishes,” and clarify the food description. Give one or two specific seasonal examples and explain why they are eaten, using linking words such as “for example” and “also.”

例: Yes, my family eats different foods at different times of the year. For example, during New Year celebrations, we often prepare fish, rice and vegetables because these dishes are traditional in my culture. We also cook special desserts and homemade meals for religious festivals and family occasions.

提案: Avoid repeating the previous answer and correct the unclear phrase “giant foods,” which probably means “junk food.” Say “delicious” rather than “very delicious and tasty,” since these ideas are redundant. Use the present perfect for a change that continues now: “My preferences have changed,” and briefly compare your childhood choices with your current favourites.

例: Yes, my favourite food has changed since I was a child. I used to love junk food, such as pizza, burgers and chips, because I found it delicious and exciting. However, my preferences have changed, and I now prefer healthier traditional dishes with vegetables, rice and lean protein.

× So today I can say I prefer my traditional foods like or Mesopotamia which is high in porching and vegetables.

✓ So today I can say I prefer my traditional foods from Mesopotamia, which is high in porching and vegetables.

Use the preposition from to show the origin of the food. Like or is not a grammatically correct expression for introducing the origin of traditional foods.

× So today I can say I prefer my traditional foods like or Mesopotamia which is high in porching and vegetables.

✓ So today I can say I prefer my traditional foods from Mesopotamia, which are high in porching and vegetables.

The relative pronoun which refers to traditional foods, which is plural. Therefore, use the plural verb are instead of is.

× When I was younger I really enjoyed enjoying foods like fast food and chips, but as I've grown up over the years I realize that they might be unhealthy for my body.

✓ When I was younger, I really enjoyed eating foods like fast food and chips, but as I've grown up over the years, I realize that they might be unhealthy for my body.

The verb enjoy is followed by a gerund, but using enjoying after enjoyed is awkward and incorrect in this sentence. Use enjoyed eating to describe the activity you liked.

× So I changed and switched to a better and healthier diet which is high in protein and less in fat and oil.

✓ So I changed and switched to a better and healthier diet, which is high in protein and lower in fat and oil.

The natural adjective used with fat and oil is lower, not less in. Use high in protein and lower in fat and oil to create a clear parallel description.

× Yes, we do eat different dishes in different days of the year, like New Year celebrations for instance.

✓ Yes, we do eat different dishes on different days of the year, such as during New Year celebrations, for instance.

Use on with specific days or groups of days, not in. Also, during is the appropriate preposition for an event or celebration.

× We eat fish and rice vegetables at the beginning of the year.

✓ We eat fish, rice, and vegetables at the beginning of the year.

When listing three or more separate items, separate the items with commas and use and before the final item. This makes it clear that fish, rice, and vegetables are three different foods.

× But we also have another special dishes for other special dates as well.

✓ But we also have another special dish for other special dates as well.

Another is used with a singular countable noun. Therefore, another special dish is correct, not another special dishes.

× But we also have another special dishes for other special dates as well.

✓ But we also have another special dish on other special dates as well.

Use on with specific dates. The preposition for does not clearly express that the dishes are served on those dates.

× As I mentioned earlier, I used to eat giant foods because they seemed very delicious and tasty to a child, so I wasn't different from other children.

✓ As I mentioned earlier, I used to eat giant foods because they seemed very delicious and tasty when I was a child, so I wasn't different from other children.

When referring to the period of your childhood, use the time expression when I was a child. The phrase to a child does not clearly identify the time when you had this opinion.

× But today I changed my mind about my diet and I'm really into healthier food.

✓ But today I have changed my mind about my diet, and I'm really into healthier food.

Use the present perfect have changed to describe a past change that has a present result. The phrase I'm really into healthier food shows that the result continues now.