Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer the question directly without an unnecessary opening such as “That is an interesting question.” Your answer is clear and within five sentences, but “cake” is repeated several times, and “It is really delicious for me in my daily life” is unnatural. Give one or two specific reasons, such as the flavour, texture, or a particular type of cake, and use more natural phrasing such as “I enjoy eating it” or “I have it as a treat.”

例: My favourite food is cake, especially chocolate cake. I love its rich flavour and soft texture, and I usually have a slice on special occasions. Although I do not eat it every day, it is still my favourite dessert.

提案: The response contains many hesitations and an unclear phrase (“UH-18”), which makes the answer difficult to understand. Also, “cookie” should usually be plural in this context (“cookies”), and “I preferred cookies” should be followed by a clear reason or memory. Avoid repeating the present-day preference because the question focuses on your childhood. Use a simple structure: name the food, explain why you liked it, and add a specific childhood detail.

例: When I was young, I really liked cookies, especially chocolate-chip cookies. They were sweet and crunchy, and my mother often gave me some after school. I have liked them ever since, although I try not to eat too many now.

提案: This answer does not directly address whether you eat different foods at different times of the year. It mainly describes eating pizza during holidays and also shifts unnecessarily to your elementary-school experience. Begin with a clear answer such as “Yes, I do,” then compare seasonal foods and give a specific example. Correct the grammar in “we enjoy eating pizza” and avoid repeated fillers and broken sentences.

例: Yes, I do. In summer, I prefer light foods such as fruit and salads, while in winter I usually eat hot soup or stews. During holidays, my friends and I sometimes make pizza together because it is easy to share and always puts us in a good mood.

提案: You eventually answer the question, but the response is weakened by frequent hesitations, repetition, and the unnatural phrase “it is a really delicious for me.” State clearly whether your preference has changed: “No, it hasn’t.” Then support this answer with a reason or a specific comparison between childhood and now. Avoid saying that you eat cake almost every day, which may sound repetitive and less natural; “I still enjoy cake” is more effective.

例: No, my favourite food has not changed since I was a child. I loved cake when I was young, and I still enjoy it now because I have always liked its sweet taste and soft texture. The only difference is that I eat it less often because I am more conscious of my health.

× I preferred UH-18, uh, cookie to other kinds of food.

✓ I preferred cookies to other kinds of food.

Cookies are being discussed as a general type of food, so the plural form is more appropriate. Use a plural countable noun when speaking about food in general.

× I preferred UH-18, uh, cookie to other kinds of food.

✓ I preferred cookies to other kinds of food.

The singular countable noun cookie needs an article, such as a cookie. However, because you are talking about cookies in general, the plural form cookies is more natural here.

× I still like eating a cookie almost everyday now.

✓ I still like eating cookies almost every day now.

The sentence describes a general eating habit, so cookies should be plural rather than a cookie. Use the plural form when referring to a type of food generally.

× It is a really delicious for me.

✓ It is really delicious to me.

Delicious is an adjective and does not need the article a before it. Also, to me is the more natural prepositional phrase for expressing a personal opinion.

× When I was in elementary school, my favorite food is pizza.

✓ When I was in elementary school, my favorite food was pizza.

The time expression refers to the past, so the verb must also be in the past tense. Change is to was to maintain consistent past-time reference.

× When I have a holiday, I usually invite my friends to my home and we eat pizza together.

✓ When I had a holiday, I usually invited my friends to my home and we ate pizza together.

The answer is describing a repeated habit during your elementary-school years. Use the past tense throughout: had, invited, and ate.

× We enjoy a eating pizza at home.

✓ We enjoy eating pizza at home.

The verb enjoy must be followed by a gerund, which is a verb ending in -ing. Remove the unnecessary article a and use enjoy eating.

× We. Enjoy a eating pizza at home it it always makes me feel happy and brings back wonderful memories.

✓ We enjoy eating pizza at home. It always makes me feel happy and brings back wonderful memories.

The original sentence contains an incorrect full stop, an unnecessary article, and two independent clauses joined without proper punctuation. Divide the ideas into two complete sentences and use it once as the subject of the second sentence.

× Umm, uh, it is a really delicious for me.

✓ It is really delicious to me.

Do not use the article a before the adjective delicious. The natural structure is it is really delicious, and to me is more appropriate than for me in this context.

× When I was a child.

✓ When I was a child, I preferred cookies to other kinds of food.

When I was a child is a dependent clause and cannot stand alone as a complete sentence. Connect it to an independent clause that contains a complete idea.

× When I eat a cake.

✓ I feel happy when I eat cake.

When I eat a cake is a dependent clause and is incomplete by itself. Add an independent clause, such as I feel happy, to form a complete sentence.