Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Улучшите грамматику, произношение и последовательность высказывания. Начните с краткого тематического предложения, затем дайте одно-два уточняющих предложения с точными деталями. Избегайте лишних слов (например, «Hi» в ответе) и исправьте ошибки в согласовании и форме (например, «it’s made of meat and looks like a pizza but without cheese»). Также используйте связку, чтобы звучать более естественно.

例: My favourite food is lahmacun, a traditional Turkish dish. It is made with minced meat and spices spread on thin dough, so it looks like a pizza but without cheese. I enjoy it because the thin crust and spicy topping are very flavorful.

提案: Уточните структуру ответа и лексику. Дайте тематическое предложение, затем конкретное описание. Исправьте неверные слова (возможно, вы имели в виду «croissants» вместо «Crontees») и порядок слов («I liked my mother's breakfast»). Избегайте разговорных вставок «so much» в середине, лучше поместить их после глагола.

例: When I was young, I loved my mother's breakfasts. She often made fresh croissants and served them with sweet black tea, which made mornings feel cozy and special.

提案: Сформулируйте более естественно и точно. Начните с прямого ответа (Yes/No) и используйте связующие слова для объяснения. Замените «ration» на «diet» или «meals», исправьте порядок слов «we prefer many more soups» на «we tend to eat more soups». Добавьте конкретный пример супа или зимнего блюда.

例: Not really, our diet stays fairly similar throughout the year, but we tend to eat more soups during winter. For example, in cold months we often have lentil soup or chicken broth because they are warming and comforting.

提案: Сделайте ответ более связным и грамматически правильным. Начните с простого «Yes» или «No», затем объясните причину и приведите пример. Избегайте тавтологии («it's natural that... you are changing») и лишних слов. Используйте связки («because», «as», «for example») и правильные формы глаголов.

例: Yes, my favourite food has changed since childhood because I have tried many new dishes over the years. For example, I used to prefer simple home-cooked meals, but now I often choose international dishes like sushi or spicy stews.

× My favorite food is Lamaju, a traditional Turkish food dish and it's made of meat and look like pizza but without cheese.

✓ My favorite food is Lamaju, a traditional Turkish dish; it's made of meat and looks like a pizza but without cheese.

The sentence contains several issues: parallel structure and verb agreement. 'Food dish' is redundant; use 'dish' or 'food'. After 'it's made of meat and look like pizza' the verbs must agree with the singluar subject 'it', so use 'looks'. Also add an article before 'pizza' ('a pizza'). Use a semicolon or conjunction to join two independent clauses. Suggestion: simplify noun phrases and ensure subject-verb agreement. Grammar problem type ID:13

× When I was young I liked so much my mother's breakfast with Crontees and sweet black tea.

✓ When I was young I liked my mother's breakfasts with croissants and sweet black tea very much.

Word order and choice: 'liked so much my mother's breakfast' is awkward in English; place the object before the adverb: 'liked ... very much'. 'Breakfast' should be plural 'breakfasts' to indicate repeated occasions. 'Crontees' appears to be a misspelling; likely 'croissants'. Also move 'very much' to the end for natural emphasis. Grammar problem type ID:14

× Usually our ration is the same in warm or cold weather but we prefer many more soups in winter.

✓ Usually our meals are the same in warm or cold weather, but we prefer to eat more soups in winter.

'Ration' is not the correct word for everyday meals; use 'meals'. 'Our meals' is plural, so use 'are'. 'Prefer many more soups' is ungrammatical; use 'prefer to eat more soups' or 'prefer more soup'. Also add a comma before 'but'. Grammar problem type ID:1

× Yes, and it's natural that And through some experience and years you are changing your preferences, you test new dishes and it's okay when you change your preference

✓ Yes, that's natural. Over time and through experience your preferences change; you try new dishes, and it's okay to change your preferences.

Combine and reorder phrases for clarity and correct tense. Remove redundant 'And'. Use simple present to describe general truth: 'preferences change'. 'You test new dishes' is an awkward collocation; 'you try new dishes' is more natural. Use consistent plural 'preferences' and infinitive 'to change' after 'okay'. Grammar problem type ID:6