Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cải thiện ngữ pháp, phát âm một số từ và làm câu trả lời rõ ràng hơn; tránh lỗi chính tả/ý sai (ví dụ “unwide” không đúng). Hãy bắt đầu bằng một câu chủ đề rõ ràng, sau đó giải thích ngắn gọn lý do và thêm một ví dụ cụ thể. Giữ tối đa 3–4 câu và dùng từ nối nếu cần.

例: My favourite food is chocolate cake. I like it because sweet treats lift my mood and give me quick energy when I need to work hard. For example, I often have a small slice during study sessions to stay focused.

提案: Sửa ngữ pháp và từ vựng không chính xác (ví dụ “swiss” có vẻ sai ngữ cảnh; có thể ý là "sweets" hoặc tên kẹo cụ thể). Bắt đầu bằng một câu chủ đề, dùng thì quá khứ nhất quán và thêm một chi tiết cụ thể về ví dụ hoặc cảm xúc.

例: When I was a child, my favourite food was candy because sweets were fun and tasty. My parents often gave me sweets as a reward when I finished my homework, so I associated them with good feelings.

提案: Cần sửa cấu trúc câu, ngữ pháp và từ vựng (ví dụ “day holiday”, “cherry sunfloods” và cuối câu thiếu hoàn chỉnh). Nên nêu chủ đề, đưa ra 1–2 ví dụ cụ thể với mô tả ngắn, và dùng liên từ để mạch lạc hơn.

例: Yes, I do. For example, during the Mid-Autumn Festival we eat mooncakes, and at Tet (Lunar New Year) my family prepares Bánh Chưng, a traditional rice cake. I enjoy these foods because they reflect our culture and family traditions.

提案: Sửa lỗi nội dung/điều chỉnh từ dùng (ví dụ “drunk” sai; ý muốn nói “young” hoặc “a child”) và cấu trúc câu. Nên trả lời trực tiếp, so sánh quá khứ với hiện tại, giải thích ngắn lý do và thêm một minh chứng cụ thể về việc học làm bánh.

例: My favourite food has changed somewhat since childhood. As a child I loved candies, but now I prefer desserts like chocolate or strawberry cake. I even learned how to bake cakes last year, so I enjoy making and sharing them with friends.

× I really like chocolate cake because sweet things will make me happier and unwide it gives me energy to work hard.

✓ I really like chocolate cake because sweet things make me happier and, besides, they give me energy to work hard.

The sentence uses awkward and incorrect words and adverb placement. 'Will' is unnecessary for general truths; use present simple 'make'. 'Unwide' is not a word — likely intended as 'besides' or 'also'. Commas help separate clauses. Suggestion: use clear linking words (also/besides) and present simple for habitual or general statements. ID:13

× When I was a kid, my favorite food was candy because children like swiss.

✓ When I was a kid, my favorite food was candy because children liked sweets.

Mixing past context with present-tense 'like' is inconsistent. In a past-time clause, use past tense 'liked'. 'Swiss' is incorrect lexically; likely 'sweets' is intended. Suggestion: keep tense consistent and use correct noun 'sweets'. ID:5

× My parents often gave me swiss as a reward when I finished my homework or have a household chore

✓ My parents often gave me sweets as a reward when I finished my homework or did a household chore.

In past context, 'have' should be past 'did' to match 'gave' and 'finished'. 'Household chore' requires past simple 'did'. Also 'swiss' should be 'sweets'. Suggestion: maintain past tense for actions occurring in the past and use correct vocabulary. ID:10

× Yes I often eat different foods at different times the year.

✓ Yes, I often eat different foods at different times of the year.

Missing definite article 'the' before 'year' requires placement 'of the year'. Also missing comma after 'Yes'. Suggestion: use the phrase 'at different times of the year' and include commas for natural pauses. ID:22

× For example during the mid autumn festival we eat mooncakes and during the day holiday we eat Bang Chung which are cherry sunfloods.

✓ For example, during the Mid-Autumn Festival we eat mooncakes, and during the Lunar New Year holiday we eat Banh Chung, which are sticky rice cakes.

Several lexical and capitalization issues: festivals and holiday names should be capitalized. 'Day holiday' is incorrect; likely 'Lunar New Year holiday'. 'Bang Chung' should be 'Banh Chung'. 'Cherry sunfloods' is incorrect description; 'sticky rice cakes' is accurate. Use commas to separate clauses. Suggestion: use correct names and clear descriptions. ID:13

× I enjoy them because it expresses cultural

✓ I enjoy them because they express my culture.

Pronoun and verb agreement: 'it expresses cultural' is incomplete and ungrammatical. Mooncakes and Banh Chung are plural, so use 'they express'. 'Cultural' is an adjective; need noun 'culture' or phrase 'cultural traditions'. Suggestion: match plural subject with plural verb and use correct noun forms. ID:26

× When I was drunk, my favourite food was candy, but that hasn't shined completely.

✓ When I was a child, my favourite food was candy, but that hasn't changed completely.

'Drunk' is wrong contextually; likely 'young' or 'a child'. 'Hasn't shined' is incorrect collocation; correct is 'hasn't changed'. Maintain contrast between past preference and present by using present perfect 'hasn't changed completely'. Suggestion: use appropriate words and collocations ('changed', 'child'). ID:5

× I still enjoy sweet things.

✓ I still enjoy sweet things.

Sentence is grammatically correct; present simple is appropriate for current habitual preference. No change needed. Suggestion: none. ID:6

× Now I prefer desserts like chocolate or strawberry cake and then I learned how to make it instead just enjoying.

✓ Now I prefer desserts like chocolate or strawberry cake, and I have learned how to make them instead of just enjoying them.

Mixed tenses and incorrect forms: 'then I learned' should be present perfect 'I have learned' to show recent change relevant now. 'It' should agree with plural 'cakes' -> 'them'. 'Instead just enjoying' needs preposition 'instead of' and gerund 'enjoying them'. Suggestion: keep tense consistent and ensure pronoun agreement and correct 'instead of' structure. ID:8