Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve pronunciation (e.g., “lechon”), correct grammar, shorten redundant phrasing, and add one specific detail. Use a clear topic sentence, one linking phrase, and limit to 3–4 sentences. For example, replace repeating words and fix articles and adjective order.

例: My favourite food is lechon, a traditional Filipino roast pig. It’s cooked over charcoal and stuffed with a blend of garlic, lemongrass and spices, which gives the skin a very crispy texture. Because of the smoky flavour and crunchy skin, I find it irresistible on special occasions.

提案: Be concise and correct grammar (tense and subject-verb agreement). Use linking words to connect ideas and add a specific example of a dish. Keep answers within 3–4 sentences and avoid repetition.

例: When I was young I loved eating fish because we lived on an island where fresh fish was readily available. My mother often made a clear fish soup with ginger and vegetables, which felt light and refreshing after a day outdoors.

提案: Correct tense consistency and use a linking word to make the response smoother. Add one brief specific example to illustrate availability. Keep it to two sentences if possible.

例: Not really; I live in a tropical country where there are only rainy and dry seasons, so most fruits and vegetables are available year-round. For example, mangoes and coconuts are easy to find almost any month.

提案: Split into two sentences for clarity, fix grammar, and give a reason for the change. Use a linking word (e.g., “because” or “so”) and provide a short example of what you eat now versus before.

例: Yes, it has changed. As an adult I eat a lot more vegetables because I'm trying to be healthier, whereas when I was younger I ate more meat and salty snacks, like fried pork and chips.

× Lichon is an authent thick Filipino food.

✓ Lichon is an authentic, rich Filipino dish.

The word 'authent' is a misspelling and should be 'authentic' (adjective). 'Thick' is not the appropriate adjective for describing a cooked whole roast pig; 'rich' or 'flavorful' fits better. Also 'food' is less natural here than 'dish'. Add a comma to separate adjectives. Suggestion: learn common adjective collocations and check spelling.

× It is a roast pig that is cooked by charcoal and inside the pork or the pig it has a lot of spices and that makes the Lichon really delicious.

✓ It is a roast pig cooked over charcoal, and the pork is seasoned with many spices, which makes the lechon really delicious.

Word order and article use are awkward. 'Cooked by charcoal' is better as 'cooked over charcoal'. 'Inside the pork or the pig it has a lot of spices' is ungrammatical; rephrase to 'the pork is seasoned with many spices'. Use 'which' for the relative clause. Use consistent lowercase 'lechon'. Suggestion: simplify sentence structure and use passive/active appropriately.

× The kind of food that I liked when I was young was fish.

✓ The kind of food I liked when I was young was fish.

This sentence is grammatically acceptable but wordy; removing 'that' is natural in spoken English. Tense 'liked' correctly refers to past. Suggestion: omit unnecessary relative pronouns to sound more natural.

× We used to live in an island where fresh fish is is very accessible.

✓ We used to live on an island where fresh fish was very accessible.

Use the preposition 'on' with 'island', not 'in'. There is a duplicated 'is is' and the tense should match 'used to live' so 'was' is better than present 'is'. Also 'accessible' works but 'readily available' sounds more natural. Suggestion: check prepositions with locations and ensure tense consistency.

× My mom always cook fish soup and it makes me feel refreshed all day.

✓ My mom always cooks fish soup, and it makes me feel refreshed all day.

When the subject is third person singular ('my mom'), the verb needs an -s in the present simple: 'cooks'. Suggestion: review third person singular present tense rules.

× Not really because I lived in a tropical country.

✓ Not really, because I live in a tropical country.

The speaker describes a current situation, so present simple 'live' is appropriate rather than past 'lived'. Ensure tense matches meaning. Suggestion: use present tense for general facts about current residence.

× We only have rain and sunny season and foods are usually available the whole year.

✓ We only have rainy and dry seasons, and food is usually available all year round.

Use plural 'seasons' and the standard terms 'rainy' and 'dry' (or 'sunny') as adjectives. 'Foods' is unnatural here; 'food' as an uncountable noun is better. 'All year round' is the idiomatic expression. Suggestion: learn common collocations for seasons and time expressions.

× Yes, it has changed now that I'm an adult I usually eat vegetables a lot and like before, I always eat meat and salty foods.

✓ Yes, it has changed. Now that I'm an adult, I usually eat a lot of vegetables, whereas before I always ate meat and salty foods.

The original run-on sentence mixes tenses and lacks proper punctuation. Keep present perfect 'has changed' to indicate change since childhood, then use present 'I usually eat' for current habit and past 'I always ate' for past habit. 'Vegetables a lot' is awkward; 'eat a lot of vegetables' is natural. Suggestion: split into two clauses with correct tense for each time frame and improve word order.