Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Give a direct, accurate answer and organize it into a clear topic sentence plus one or two supporting details. Use correct nouns and verbs (e.g., “dumplings” not “fruit”), correct tense and simple linking words. Keep it concise (1–3 sentences) and avoid irrelevant fragments.

例: My favourite food is dumplings. My mother cooks them at home and I love their savory taste and soft texture, so I often ask her to make them for family meals.

提案: Start with a clear past-tense topic sentence, and then add specific supporting details. Use accurate descriptive vocabulary (chocolate is not ‘spicy’ unless you mean chilli chocolate) and link ideas with words like “because” or “and”. Limit to 2–3 coherent sentences.

例: When I was young, I loved chocolate, especially homemade chocolate treats my mother made because they were sweet and rich. I also enjoyed snacks with a crunchy texture, such as wafer bars.

提案: Answer directly then give contrasting seasonal details using linking words like “in summer” and “in winter.” Use correct vocabulary (salad, soups, stews) and complete sentences. One or two supporting details are enough.

例: Yes. In summer I usually eat lighter foods such as salads and grilled vegetables because it is hot. In winter I prefer warm, hearty dishes like soups and stews to keep me warm.

提案: Begin with a clear yes/no and state the change. Use past and present tenses correctly and provide specific examples and reasons, linked with words like “because” or “now.” Avoid repetition and unclear phrases.

例: Yes, my favourite foods have changed. As a child I preferred sweets and chocolates, and sometimes instant noodles because they were sweet and comforting, but now I prefer healthier, warm cooked meals such as roasted vegetables and rice dishes.

× My favourite fruit is dumpling because they good for taste my mum cooked for me a week wait so I lobbed

✓ My favourite food is dumplings because they taste good; my mum cooked them for me a week ago so I loved them.

Pronoun and noun number: 'dumpling' should be plural 'dumplings' when speaking generally. 'They' correctly refers to plural dumplings. Verb agreement: 'they good' needs the verb 'taste' to describe flavor. Tense and word choice: 'a week wait' is incorrect; use 'a week ago'. 'lobbed' is incorrect form; intended 'loved'. Also 'favourite fruit' was wrong category for dumplings, so changed to 'food'. Suggestions: ensure nouns match singular/plural, include appropriate verbs for descriptions, use correct time expressions like 'a week ago', and choose correct past tense verbs like 'loved'.

× I like chocolate when I was young because it tasted spicy and delicious.

✓ I liked chocolate when I was young because it tasted sweet and delicious.

Tense consistency: 'I like' is present tense but must be past 'I liked' to match 'when I was young'. Word choice: chocolate is usually described as 'sweet' rather than 'spicy'. Suggestion: match verb tense to time markers ('when I was young' requires past tense) and choose appropriate descriptive adjectives.

× I love the crunchy.

✓ I loved the crunchiness.

Word form: 'the crunchy' is incorrect; 'crunchy' is an adjective and needs a noun form like 'crunchiness' or use 'the crunchy texture' or 'I loved how crunchy it was'. Tense: changed to past 'loved' to match previous sentence. Suggestion: convert adjectives into nouns when referring to qualities, or restructure sentence to use adjective with a noun.

× Yes I do, I tend to eat lighter food like solad and food in the summer because the weather is hot but in winter I prefer warm hearty dishes sauce soups and straw to keep me

✓ Yes, I do. I tend to eat lighter foods like salad in the summer because the weather is hot, but in winter I prefer warm, hearty dishes, such as soups and stews, to keep me warm.

Plural and word choice: 'food' should be plural 'foods' when listing examples. Spelling errors: 'solad' -> 'salad'. Sentence structure: run-on sentence missing commas and connectors. Word choice: 'sauce soups and straw' is unclear; likely 'soups and stews'. Missing ending: add 'warm' to complete 'to keep me warm'. Suggestions: use commas to separate clauses, correct spellings, use plural when listing multiple items, and complete comparative phrases.

× Yes when I was a child my favorite food was sweet and chocolate and sometimes instance noodles because they taste dairy sweet sweet and comforting now I prefer earlier and warm cooked food

✓ When I was a child, my favorite foods were sweets and chocolate, and sometimes instant noodles because they tasted sweet and comforting. Now I prefer simpler, warm cooked food.

Tense consistency: 'they taste' should be past 'they tasted' to match 'when I was a child'. Singular/plural: 'favorite food was sweet and chocolate' should be 'favorite foods were sweets and chocolate'. Word choice and spelling: 'instance' -> 'instant'; 'dairy sweet sweet' is incorrect, use 'sweet'; 'earlier' is wrong here, use 'simpler'. Sentence punctuation: original is run-on; add commas and split into two sentences for clarity. Suggestions: maintain consistent past tense when describing past preferences, correct spellings, use plural nouns when listing multiple items, and separate ideas into clear sentences.